Need help to see if I answered the question and whether I have any glaring grammatical errors.
Thanks in advance.
Prompt- Describe the courses of study and the unique characteristics of the University of Pennsylvania that most interest you. Why do these interests make you a good match for Penn?
I have experienced the college campus life before during summer programs at universities like Carnegie Mellon, Dickinson College and St. Mary's College, so I know what is important to me in a college atmosphere. Whether lounging in my dorm room or studying in the colleges libraries I expect adequate facilities, and I know I receive even better at the University of Pennsylvania. To me, the academic, social and athletic networks at a university are very important and are necessary in order to thrive.
During my six week summer stay at the Carnegie Mellon University I divulged in a world class architectural education. With tenured professors that gave me one-on-one interaction I learned how important a good professor can be. At the University of Pennsylvania I can expect exemplary professors that enhance my learning. At the Wharton School, especially, students such as I are privy to the minds of professors like Dr. Franklin Allen and Dr. Jeremy J. Siegel. To be able to learn at an institution that has been recognized as the best business school in years past would be an honor and would harness my intellectual abilities. At the College of Arts and Sciences I would also be able to learn from some of the best professors in the world. With Drs. William Harris and Richard Johnston as political science professors I would be able to learn from their research in the field. At a university I not only look for a place where not only the education is excellent but where the ability to research is present. With fifteen libraries amassed with 4.5 million volumes of literature, group study areas, computer lounges and seminar rooms I would be able to accomplish such studies in a comfortable setting.
At St. Mary's College in Maryland, I enjoyed a socially active three week stay in which I made dozens of friends. The campus quads were welcoming, the walks along campus beautiful and the dorm rooms homey. Such an environment made St. Mary's City not just my house for three weeks, but a home. I know that I can feel the same way at the University of Pennsylvania. During my visit at the university I went through Locust Walk and saw the beauty of the campus on an early summer morning. The walk resembled the St. Mary's College path and it made me want to just sit down on a bench and take it in. Although I was unable to enter one of the dormitory halls of the campus, I have heard of the great community that is forged at W.E.B. Du Bois college house. As a hall with main quads, exercise rooms, a library and a computer lab, I am sure I would feel right at home.
I would also be interested in the universities wide array of social groups and clubs to help myself and other students feel more at home. The Civic House would be a great utility for me because the Civic House acts as a social "hub" for Penn students and I would be able to engage in community service programs while also meeting new people on and off campus. Using the resources of the Office of Student Life, I am sure to be able to fill my time with activities in groups such as the Model Congress and other political organizations as well as the Men's Club Volleyball team.
The University's study abroad program is also something that has attracted me to the University. As a person who likes to see new places and experience different cultures, the ability to study in a foreign culture is exciting. With familial roots in Ireland and Spain and a great interest in England being able to study in those countries would be an adventure for me but also challenge me to adjust.
During my three-week stay at Dickinson College in 2006, I was treated to a rather adequate education in chemistry but was very pleased by the wide array of athletic fields and services. Almost daily I would trek over to the football field on campus or another field in town and play with friends. My greatest interest in athletics is baseball, but I also enjoy football, fencing, volleyball and table tennis. At the University of Pennsylvania I would be able to harness and enjoy all of these sports whether as a casual participant, observer or varsity athlete at any one of the University's facilities. I would be especially interested in the facilities at the David Pottruck Health and Fitness Center. Here, I would be able to do some recreational swimming, shoot some hoops and maybe challenge myself to some rock-climbing. The Center sounds like an all-in-one facility for rigorous or recreational athletic activities.
As a whole, the University of Pennsylvania forges an excellent balance of academics, social opportunities and athletics. As a leader in these fields, I can anticipate to attain a world class education while enjoying myself at the gym or in my dorm. Some universities may have a world class education or an exceptional social network, but Penn provides all three. With an efficient, yet aesthetically pleasing environment, I will be able to learn and research while also being able to join social groups and admire the beauty that is Philadelphia.
Thanks in advance.
Prompt- Describe the courses of study and the unique characteristics of the University of Pennsylvania that most interest you. Why do these interests make you a good match for Penn?
I have experienced the college campus life before during summer programs at universities like Carnegie Mellon, Dickinson College and St. Mary's College, so I know what is important to me in a college atmosphere. Whether lounging in my dorm room or studying in the colleges libraries I expect adequate facilities, and I know I receive even better at the University of Pennsylvania. To me, the academic, social and athletic networks at a university are very important and are necessary in order to thrive.
During my six week summer stay at the Carnegie Mellon University I divulged in a world class architectural education. With tenured professors that gave me one-on-one interaction I learned how important a good professor can be. At the University of Pennsylvania I can expect exemplary professors that enhance my learning. At the Wharton School, especially, students such as I are privy to the minds of professors like Dr. Franklin Allen and Dr. Jeremy J. Siegel. To be able to learn at an institution that has been recognized as the best business school in years past would be an honor and would harness my intellectual abilities. At the College of Arts and Sciences I would also be able to learn from some of the best professors in the world. With Drs. William Harris and Richard Johnston as political science professors I would be able to learn from their research in the field. At a university I not only look for a place where not only the education is excellent but where the ability to research is present. With fifteen libraries amassed with 4.5 million volumes of literature, group study areas, computer lounges and seminar rooms I would be able to accomplish such studies in a comfortable setting.
At St. Mary's College in Maryland, I enjoyed a socially active three week stay in which I made dozens of friends. The campus quads were welcoming, the walks along campus beautiful and the dorm rooms homey. Such an environment made St. Mary's City not just my house for three weeks, but a home. I know that I can feel the same way at the University of Pennsylvania. During my visit at the university I went through Locust Walk and saw the beauty of the campus on an early summer morning. The walk resembled the St. Mary's College path and it made me want to just sit down on a bench and take it in. Although I was unable to enter one of the dormitory halls of the campus, I have heard of the great community that is forged at W.E.B. Du Bois college house. As a hall with main quads, exercise rooms, a library and a computer lab, I am sure I would feel right at home.
I would also be interested in the universities wide array of social groups and clubs to help myself and other students feel more at home. The Civic House would be a great utility for me because the Civic House acts as a social "hub" for Penn students and I would be able to engage in community service programs while also meeting new people on and off campus. Using the resources of the Office of Student Life, I am sure to be able to fill my time with activities in groups such as the Model Congress and other political organizations as well as the Men's Club Volleyball team.
The University's study abroad program is also something that has attracted me to the University. As a person who likes to see new places and experience different cultures, the ability to study in a foreign culture is exciting. With familial roots in Ireland and Spain and a great interest in England being able to study in those countries would be an adventure for me but also challenge me to adjust.
During my three-week stay at Dickinson College in 2006, I was treated to a rather adequate education in chemistry but was very pleased by the wide array of athletic fields and services. Almost daily I would trek over to the football field on campus or another field in town and play with friends. My greatest interest in athletics is baseball, but I also enjoy football, fencing, volleyball and table tennis. At the University of Pennsylvania I would be able to harness and enjoy all of these sports whether as a casual participant, observer or varsity athlete at any one of the University's facilities. I would be especially interested in the facilities at the David Pottruck Health and Fitness Center. Here, I would be able to do some recreational swimming, shoot some hoops and maybe challenge myself to some rock-climbing. The Center sounds like an all-in-one facility for rigorous or recreational athletic activities.
As a whole, the University of Pennsylvania forges an excellent balance of academics, social opportunities and athletics. As a leader in these fields, I can anticipate to attain a world class education while enjoying myself at the gym or in my dorm. Some universities may have a world class education or an exceptional social network, but Penn provides all three. With an efficient, yet aesthetically pleasing environment, I will be able to learn and research while also being able to join social groups and admire the beauty that is Philadelphia.
