I would be very happy if you read my essay and corrected the grammatical mistakes I'm bound to have in it. Also, tell me what you think of it generally. Constructive criticism is more welcome than praises, so please feel free to say anything you think about it, I'm not sensitive when it comes to my own works. The deadline is also looming dangerously close.
Describe the courses of study and the unique characteristics of the University of Pennsylvania that most interest you. Why do these interests make you a good match for Penn?
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For me, moving to the United States to study is an incredible life-altering opportunity itself, but attending the best business school in the world would be really astounding and beyond anything I have done in my life.
What makes the Wharton School special, is how the undergraduate program combines liberal arts with business and theory with practical knowledge. This integration would enable me to gain comprehensive knowledge about the world of business and at the same time, feed my hunger for more knowledge in fields like social science, history and philosophy. Likewise, the program would enable me to learn the technical and practical skills of business, and at the same time, study the abstract theories of economics.
This versatility is important because I think that in order to think outside the box, one must also know what is outside the box. That is, to know about the world outside your expertise.
It is very simple; if you want to invent something new and unique, you need to know how to think differently from other people, because if you think like everyone else, you will only come up with the same ideas as everyone else. Only a person with broad knowledge of various fields is able to think outside the box, because he knows and comprehends the world the world outside. Thus, he knows how to think differently.
Combining the teaching of the underlying technicalities, patterns and methodologies with the teaching of the ability to think beyond the norm in approaching problems, the Wharton School puts its students into a position where they can create something brand new. A position where they can change the world.
At the moment my interests are very much in finance, but I have no idea where they will be in four years. One thing, however, is clear to me, wherever I will go, I want to break boundaries and do something no one else has ever done. I want to attend business school because owning your own business is the best way fulfill my dream of creating something unique, something that is me.
All the learning does not happen in classrooms, equally important is the learning that happens in interacting with other students. As the University of Pennsylvania is packed with intelligent and ambitious students, the possibilities of having interesting and enriching conversations are unlimited.
Just imagining that I could wind up in a heated debate about the economy or politics with an another student gets me excited and enthusiastic. We are all kids who are passionately interested in the same things yet we think differently about them. I am always eager to find out what has led my comrade to think the other way. I want to broaden my perspectives and play with new ideas. I want to talk to different people with different views. I think this is the best way to test your own ideas and views, how will they handle the scrutiny of other people?
The competitive aspect also attracts me to Wharton. I really think that living and studying with brilliant minds who are my age and interested in the same things I am is extremely motivating. They are the perfect contenders. To me, competition is the greatest motivation of all, and the competition at Wharton would push me the furthest.
Aside from enriching myself academically, because the university is so well organized in groups and different events, I would also wind up with people who have the same interests in other areas like literature and music. I also see myself joining the Scandinavian Society of the University of Pennsylvania to promote my Finnishness. I find the fact that someone foreign would be interested in my culture absurdly fantastic. There are no words to express the enthusiasm I have for educating people who are interested in Finland and smashing the stereotypes people have about Finnish people.
The top notch alumni of Penn intrigues me as well. I think it would be very astounding for me to go to the same school Steven Cohen, Daniel Och, James Dinan and many others went. These are the people who have gone into careers that are very similar to the one I aspire to have. Following their footsteps by going to the same university will help me to reach my ambitious goal of going as far as they have gone, and even more importantly, surpass their achievements.
The Wharton Leadership Ventures and Wharton's overall focus on leadership would give me important tools to use in my professional and personal life. When the time comes when I will be starting by own business, I need to have the ability to build trust on my employees and on myself. As a business owner, I also have to have the courage to take risks. These are skills that cannot be learned by reading a textbook, instead, they develop from real life experiences. Going to an university that understands this fact and constructs its education on it would advance me in a very profound way.
I see attending Wharton as the logical extension of my interests and aspirations.
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I might be adding something extra to it since it's far from the 7900 limit.
Thank you in advance.
Describe the courses of study and the unique characteristics of the University of Pennsylvania that most interest you. Why do these interests make you a good match for Penn?
- - - - - - -
For me, moving to the United States to study is an incredible life-altering opportunity itself, but attending the best business school in the world would be really astounding and beyond anything I have done in my life.
What makes the Wharton School special, is how the undergraduate program combines liberal arts with business and theory with practical knowledge. This integration would enable me to gain comprehensive knowledge about the world of business and at the same time, feed my hunger for more knowledge in fields like social science, history and philosophy. Likewise, the program would enable me to learn the technical and practical skills of business, and at the same time, study the abstract theories of economics.
This versatility is important because I think that in order to think outside the box, one must also know what is outside the box. That is, to know about the world outside your expertise.
It is very simple; if you want to invent something new and unique, you need to know how to think differently from other people, because if you think like everyone else, you will only come up with the same ideas as everyone else. Only a person with broad knowledge of various fields is able to think outside the box, because he knows and comprehends the world the world outside. Thus, he knows how to think differently.
Combining the teaching of the underlying technicalities, patterns and methodologies with the teaching of the ability to think beyond the norm in approaching problems, the Wharton School puts its students into a position where they can create something brand new. A position where they can change the world.
At the moment my interests are very much in finance, but I have no idea where they will be in four years. One thing, however, is clear to me, wherever I will go, I want to break boundaries and do something no one else has ever done. I want to attend business school because owning your own business is the best way fulfill my dream of creating something unique, something that is me.
All the learning does not happen in classrooms, equally important is the learning that happens in interacting with other students. As the University of Pennsylvania is packed with intelligent and ambitious students, the possibilities of having interesting and enriching conversations are unlimited.
Just imagining that I could wind up in a heated debate about the economy or politics with an another student gets me excited and enthusiastic. We are all kids who are passionately interested in the same things yet we think differently about them. I am always eager to find out what has led my comrade to think the other way. I want to broaden my perspectives and play with new ideas. I want to talk to different people with different views. I think this is the best way to test your own ideas and views, how will they handle the scrutiny of other people?
The competitive aspect also attracts me to Wharton. I really think that living and studying with brilliant minds who are my age and interested in the same things I am is extremely motivating. They are the perfect contenders. To me, competition is the greatest motivation of all, and the competition at Wharton would push me the furthest.
Aside from enriching myself academically, because the university is so well organized in groups and different events, I would also wind up with people who have the same interests in other areas like literature and music. I also see myself joining the Scandinavian Society of the University of Pennsylvania to promote my Finnishness. I find the fact that someone foreign would be interested in my culture absurdly fantastic. There are no words to express the enthusiasm I have for educating people who are interested in Finland and smashing the stereotypes people have about Finnish people.
The top notch alumni of Penn intrigues me as well. I think it would be very astounding for me to go to the same school Steven Cohen, Daniel Och, James Dinan and many others went. These are the people who have gone into careers that are very similar to the one I aspire to have. Following their footsteps by going to the same university will help me to reach my ambitious goal of going as far as they have gone, and even more importantly, surpass their achievements.
The Wharton Leadership Ventures and Wharton's overall focus on leadership would give me important tools to use in my professional and personal life. When the time comes when I will be starting by own business, I need to have the ability to build trust on my employees and on myself. As a business owner, I also have to have the courage to take risks. These are skills that cannot be learned by reading a textbook, instead, they develop from real life experiences. Going to an university that understands this fact and constructs its education on it would advance me in a very profound way.
I see attending Wharton as the logical extension of my interests and aspirations.
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I might be adding something extra to it since it's far from the 7900 limit.
Thank you in advance.