Optional short essay (approximately 150 words): introduce yourself to Penn. Our aim is to better understand how your identity, talents, and background guide your day-to-day experiences.
I wrote two different versions for my prompt let me know which one you think is better
I'm also not sure if my apporach to this prompt actually answers the question and makes sense. Should I just be straightforward and talk about me? Any hellp would be appreciated thanks!
Four pieces of corkboard strategically placed to form a diamond shape adorn a wall of my yellow room. On the bottom most piece the makeshift bulletin board one can find old faded "Pearl Before Swine" comic strips and a ticket from the Harry Potter and the Death Hollows Part Two midnight show. Underneath is a flyer from a Maroon 5 concert. On the adjoining corkboard is a thank you card from the nurses at JFK Hospital along with the doodle of a bird. A used, slightly ripped boarding pass to Kyoto abuts an email address scribbled on notebook paper, this email belongs to Ai, a Japanese boarding school student. Also on the makeshift bulletin board is a picture of a girls soccer team. Throughout the bulletin board are random doodles several old paper snowflakes and friendship bracelets. Clumsily yet somewhat artfully placed on this bulletin board are pieces of the last 17 years of my life.
Four pieces of corkboard strategically placed to form a diamond shape adorn a wall of the yellow room. Clumsily yet somewhat artfully placed is a picture of a girl's soccer team, a used, slightly ripped boarding pass to Tokyo, a thank you card from the JFK Hospital's 3 East A staff, and several faded Pearl Before Swine comic strips. Underneath the collage is a bookshelf with every one of Jane Austen's novels and leaned up against it is a beautiful acoustic guitar. On the other side lies a desk piled with textbooks, folders and binders, next to them lies a laptop and a mug filled with 20 different kinds of writing utensils and a candy cane. A neatly made bed sharply contrasts with the clothes and scarves strewn across the chair and a closet with a curtain instead of rolling doors lies slightly exposed. My room scattered with the things that matter to me and traces of the life I lead.
I wrote two different versions for my prompt let me know which one you think is better
I'm also not sure if my apporach to this prompt actually answers the question and makes sense. Should I just be straightforward and talk about me? Any hellp would be appreciated thanks!
Four pieces of corkboard strategically placed to form a diamond shape adorn a wall of my yellow room. On the bottom most piece the makeshift bulletin board one can find old faded "Pearl Before Swine" comic strips and a ticket from the Harry Potter and the Death Hollows Part Two midnight show. Underneath is a flyer from a Maroon 5 concert. On the adjoining corkboard is a thank you card from the nurses at JFK Hospital along with the doodle of a bird. A used, slightly ripped boarding pass to Kyoto abuts an email address scribbled on notebook paper, this email belongs to Ai, a Japanese boarding school student. Also on the makeshift bulletin board is a picture of a girls soccer team. Throughout the bulletin board are random doodles several old paper snowflakes and friendship bracelets. Clumsily yet somewhat artfully placed on this bulletin board are pieces of the last 17 years of my life.
Four pieces of corkboard strategically placed to form a diamond shape adorn a wall of the yellow room. Clumsily yet somewhat artfully placed is a picture of a girl's soccer team, a used, slightly ripped boarding pass to Tokyo, a thank you card from the JFK Hospital's 3 East A staff, and several faded Pearl Before Swine comic strips. Underneath the collage is a bookshelf with every one of Jane Austen's novels and leaned up against it is a beautiful acoustic guitar. On the other side lies a desk piled with textbooks, folders and binders, next to them lies a laptop and a mug filled with 20 different kinds of writing utensils and a candy cane. A neatly made bed sharply contrasts with the clothes and scarves strewn across the chair and a closet with a curtain instead of rolling doors lies slightly exposed. My room scattered with the things that matter to me and traces of the life I lead.
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