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UVA - Favorite word & work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature



ajliu84 3 / 6  
Dec 15, 2011   #1
Anyone willing to take a crack at my essay? Thanks so much in advanced!

College of Arts and Sciences: What work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature has surprised, unsettled, or challenged you, and in what way?
The first time I heard John Cage's 4'33'', to say I was surprised would be an understatement. Very frankly, I thought it was a joke. How on Earth could anyone classify this as artistic? Cage's magnum opus, no less? The piece very literally consists of 4 minutes and 33 seconds of silence. Pure, empty, quiet silence. I was utterly baffled and could not for the life of me comprehend this supposed 'masterpiece'. How did the world of music get from great maestros to this? What happened along the way? When I reached home, still I couldn't push it to an unforgotten part of my mind and so I decided to do my own little research. And with that one Google search button, everything changed.

Turns out, John Cage was attempting to create a piece which would utilize the automaticism movement first proposed by Romantic Era composers to the closest it's ever been before. Upon realizing what the movement is about and the ingenuity behind the John Cage's piece, I started to understand and agree, to a certain extent, on the 'beauty' of 4'33". For the first time, I approached the piece with a different mindset; not one strictly bound by the musical influences of the classical eras but one that's open to new concepts, one without judgement. The unconventionality of it, the brilliance behind its creation, the audacity and boldness Cage undertook to create this, my feelings quickly progressed from hate to utmost admiration.

Art doesn't have to be aesthetically pleasing. It doesn't have to be worth grand amounts of money and it doesn't have to be understood by everyone. In my opinion, successful art is something that triggers emotions - emotions one didn't even know they had. 4'33'' helped me realized this and encouraged me to face problems with an open-mind.

What is your favorite word and why?
"Home" means something completely different to each and every person. It may for some be accompanied with a rush of nostalgia and joy and for others possibly with a slight tinge of dread. Its origins and details differ from person to person but it is something that everyone lives with. To me, home is where I am most comfortable. Home is an escape from harsh realities of the world and home is my favorite word.

It really wasn't until the prospect of leaving it in half a year's time did the concept of my own home really hit me. All the things that I would miss, all the things that I take for granted that would be out of reach, all the things so familiar to me suddenly whisked from under my feet. At first it was the trivial things; the laundry, the cleanliness, the home-made cooking. But as I thought on, what was really the most essential thing I'm going to miss?

Home is where I can put up my feet without anyone questioning. It's where I can loudly sing at the top my lungs without a batter of an eyelid. It's where I can sleep most at ease during the nights. A home is so much more than a house and its contents, of the trivial thing that comes along with it: it's a feeling. It's that warm fuzzy sensation when you first walk through the front doors after a long vacation. It's the sense of unconditional belonging. Simply put,

Home to me will always be nothing less of blissful to me. It goes hand in hand with childhood, family, happiness and for that "Home" is my favorite word.

The word count for both the essays is, and I quote, "half page or roughly 250 word". For the first essay, my final word count it 301 and for the second it's 281. Thank you!

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 15, 2011   #2
When I reached home, still Icouldn'tpushstruggling to pass it to an unforgotten partforgotten section of my mind,.and so I decided to do my own little research. And with that one click on Google search button, everything changed. ---------- Interesting style of writing. I like it .

Do you have a word constraint for your answer?
OP ajliu84 3 / 6  
Dec 15, 2011   #3
Thanks for the feedback! I've made the changes.
The word limit for both essays is half a page to roughly 250 words which I've taken to mean give or take 50. (Someone please correct me I'm wrong on this by the way!) the first essay is 301 words and the second one is 281 words.

Thanks again, Dumi! =]
dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 15, 2011   #4
I felt you have a word constraint coz you have said certain things very abruptly. Do you want any help with trimming your word count?
OP ajliu84 3 / 6  
Dec 15, 2011   #5
Oh. I hadn't realized. Where am I ending too abruptly? And I don't think the word count itself really is that important. As long as I can portray what I'm saying the best way possible in the least amount of words. If it really is necessary, I guess some help wouldn't hurt!
mag8087 - / 4  
Dec 15, 2011   #6
I like your writing style. I think both of them are very meaningful and written very eloquently.
My one suggestion would be to maybe try to think of a hook to start off each essay? the opening sentences are both very bland and straightforward. Good luck!


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