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'I value every moment I have each day' - Stanford Supplement - Letter to Roomate



alexxlen 2 / 5  
Oct 10, 2011   #1
I am working on my supplement for Stanford and would appreciate some feedback on my short answers! Please help!

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

The opening lines of Eminem's song "Lose Yourself" sum up how I live my life: "Look! If you had one shot, one opportunity to seize everything you ever wanted, one moment, would you capture it? Or just let it slip?" I value every moment I have each day and never let a second go to waste. People say my red hair is where I get all my energy from, but I believe it comes from my drive to get the most out of life. My passion of traveling has influenced my life and the trajectory of my education and life goals. I have many goals for myself, and one of my favorite things is when I can cross something off of my bucket list! I am not much of a morning person, so I tend to have multiple alarm clocks to wake me. Being an only child has helped me to become more independent, but it has also provided me with time to myself to just relax. I love being active throughout the day, but I enjoy having some time to chill as well. I am somewhat indecisive, especially when it comes to food; however, I'm always up for eating Mexican. Music defines my life. Country music is my obsession, so don't be surprised if you see me wearing my cowboy boots! I've long desired to learn how to play the guitar, mainly so I can accompany my attempts of singing on key. I love playing and watching sports, it brings out my competitive side. I like to have a clean living environment, although my mom sometimes refers to my piles as a "messy-organization". I'm a 5'2'' ball of energy who loves making new friends. I love capturing the world through the lens of my camera. The little things in life make me laugh and smiling faces make my day. I can't wait to meet you!

Sincerely, Alex

JessH 4 / 10  
Oct 11, 2011   #2
I think you've responded really well to the prompt,given that you have expressed yourself earnestly describing the things in your life that matter and that define you.The "Carpe Diem" outlook you have on life is very telling,at least it is to me,and it's easy to deduce from this piece what kind of person you can expect to meet.The essay is also very laid-back which is after all the way we would all describe ourselves to a stranger,or simply to another human being.You are not ashamed of who you are and that is also evident in your words.

My only correction is a grammatical one.

My passion of traveling

should be "My passion for traveling..."

Also,

and one of my favorite things is when I can cross

would be better as "...and one of my favourite things is being able to cross..."


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