Visiting Hoa Sen Charity Shelter

Thank you, Kevin.

Visiting Hoa Sen charity shelter left an indelible mark on my memory. I had the chance to meet and give encouraging gifts to orphaned children. Seeing their tears dropped while they told tragic stories before being adopt into the shelter, I felt and a blend of sad and resentment rose in me, sad for their lives, and resentment against myself for not having noticed such unfortunate people before. Joining a hand in helping the children reduce what they had suffered made me really happy. Indeed the visit gave me a very important lesson - the lesson of giving cares to other people.

I think that the short essay above is quite wordy. What is your opinion?

Seeing their tears drop while they told tragic stories about their lives before being adopted into the shelter, I felt and a blend of sadness and resentment rise in me. I was sad about their lives, and I was resentful toward against myself for not having noticed such unfortunate people before. Lending a hand in helping ...

I don't think it is too wordy, but make the corrections above! :)