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The waiting room ; looking through a window- COMMON APP


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Oct 13, 2013   #1
Imagine looking through a window at any environment that is particularly significant to you. Reflect on the scene, paying close attention to the relation between what you are seeing and why it is meaningful to you. Please limit your statement to 300 words.

I'm sitting in a waiting room. Other suitors sit beside me murmuring, waiting to get hitched to this videogame firm. This morning I woke up at seven and practiced my lines for the interview getting dressed. I left my tiny apartment and took the bus to the game studio where I was hoping to be a character designer. I sat in the bus whilst a train drove past. A train of thoughts of how, in my high school years I felt hopeless. Thinking that the rest of my life would be spent selling plastic to my father's clients. I remember how all my friends used to look at my 'doodles' and ask me why I didn't want to pursue this field getting no Today I am in this utopia, commuting to my dream job.

The waiting room has a glass wall to one side, on which there is a door that opens to the office. Through the glass, my future is visible. Offices and Cubicles occupied by iMac computers and Graphics tablets, heaps of blank paper and all kinds of pencils and colors. At one side of the room, are the programmers, converting coffee into lines and lines of code. As you walk to the other side of the office, the tapping noise of keyboards fades away and you start hearing the scratching of pen on tablets and can see art being created on every screen. I feel utter fascination and think, "This is how I want to spend the rest of my life. I want to create stuff, not sell it."

This is my dream environment. This humble workplace. For me, this dream is farfetched and there are some issues that keep it at bay. But there is no reason I can't bend my life around it, is there?

admission2012 - / 481 90  
Oct 13, 2013   #2
Hello,

This is very interesting and a really unique take on this question. You will certainly stand out from the crowd as most others will actually talk about sitting on one side of an actual window. Aside from a few grammatical issues, the only real negative about this essay is when you wrote; "For me, this dream is far fetched and there are some issues that keep it at bay." why is it far-fetched? I did not really connect that from your essay and feel that it would be best to remove it or edit it to a more optimistic outlook. -Admissions Advice Online

Hope this helps
OP ui95 1 / 1  
Oct 23, 2013   #3
Thank you for the feedback.
how's this?

I'm sitting in a waiting room. Other suitors sit beside me murmuring, waiting to get hitched to this videogame firm. This morning I woke up at seven and practiced my lines for the interview while getting dressed. I left my apartment and took the bus to the game studio where I was hoping to be a character designer. I was sitting in the bus, looking out the window, when a train drove past. A train of thoughts of how, in my high school years I felt hopeless. Thinking that the rest of my life would be spent running my father's business. I remember how all my friends used to look at my 'doodles' and ask me why I didn't want to pursue this field. I had no answer... but today I am in this utopia, commuting to my dream job.

The waiting room has a glass wall to one side, on which there is a door that opens to the office. Through the glass, my future is visible. Offices and Cubicles occupied by iMac computers and Graphics tablets, heaps of blank paper and all kinds of pencils and colors. At one side of the room, are the programmers, converting coffee into lines and lines of code. As you walk to the other side of the office, the tapping noise of keyboards fades away and you start hearing the scratching of pens on tablets and can see works of art on every screen. I feel utter fascination and think, "This is how I want to spend the rest of my life. I want to create things. I want to communicate through the characters I make."

This is my dream environment. This humble workplace.


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