Prompt :Ben Franklin once said, 'All mankind is divided into three classes: those that are immovable, those that are movable, and those that move.'
Which are you?
After scraping my first idea, I wrote an essay that emphasized my extracurricular activity and leadership role.
I hear the well-known yell from the other side of the courts, as I feel the last sip of Gatorade slide down my dry throat. "Hustle back onto the court ladies." I force myself up, hauling my weary legs. The summer sun has soaked up all my energy and I continue to pant as my coach orders me to stand in the alley. A line of anxious tennis girls forms behind me as we await our next strenuous exercise.
Suicides... tennis style. We all release a heavy groan simultaneously before our coach lays down the rules; each girl sprints to the net, shuffles along the net to the other alley, and back-paddles to the baseline. I can imagine the starting gunfire, when the beep of the watch signals my start. I propel my legs and pump my arms, ignoring the ache in my legs. "Move, come on, faster!" I lunge for the net transitioning to a sideway shuffle. "Bend your knees, bend you knees!" I'm shuffling but at this point I'm almost immovable. "Lift your feet, move!" My feet drag across as I back-paddle to the finish. Another girl dashes off toward the net, as I claw my fingers into the fence to hold myself up.
After all the girls complete the drill and my breathing slows down, coach calls us into a circle to briskly brush over our upcoming practices and matches. When she gives me the floor, I spit out a few ideas for our team-bonding events and remind the girls to attend Captain's Practice the following night. The girls become antsy when they see their parents' cars roll into view, so I lead the team with our tennis cheer to close out practice.
The next night, I am eager to run Captain's Practice. Pleased with the attendance, I see the determination that was once locked away in these girls. As a Captain, I aimed to satisfy their hunger for tennis and ultimately help them improve. I planned to inspire the immovable through my experience and make them move. I certainly did not want them to be discouraged by tennis as I once was and I did not want them to give up as a result of failure.
Understanding the discomfort that I once felt as a beginner, I start by instructing a basic swing and follow through. With simple repetition of strokes, I witness the girls gradually improving. I encourage them to keep practicing, even if that means smashing tennis balls against their garage doors.
Though it took me sometime to realize the potential that I had in tennis, I always had a coach who pushed me to do better. She made me move... literally. After realizing my potential, I wanted to improve even more and compete. More importantly, I wanted the discouraged players to look optimistically at there mistakes, and think they can only get better. I wanted them to be moved.
Please tell me whether this idea works with the question and if I answer it clearly. Also please help me out with the ending. I understand it makes no sense.
I will also help you with yours. Thanks
Which are you?
After scraping my first idea, I wrote an essay that emphasized my extracurricular activity and leadership role.
I hear the well-known yell from the other side of the courts, as I feel the last sip of Gatorade slide down my dry throat. "Hustle back onto the court ladies." I force myself up, hauling my weary legs. The summer sun has soaked up all my energy and I continue to pant as my coach orders me to stand in the alley. A line of anxious tennis girls forms behind me as we await our next strenuous exercise.
Suicides... tennis style. We all release a heavy groan simultaneously before our coach lays down the rules; each girl sprints to the net, shuffles along the net to the other alley, and back-paddles to the baseline. I can imagine the starting gunfire, when the beep of the watch signals my start. I propel my legs and pump my arms, ignoring the ache in my legs. "Move, come on, faster!" I lunge for the net transitioning to a sideway shuffle. "Bend your knees, bend you knees!" I'm shuffling but at this point I'm almost immovable. "Lift your feet, move!" My feet drag across as I back-paddle to the finish. Another girl dashes off toward the net, as I claw my fingers into the fence to hold myself up.
After all the girls complete the drill and my breathing slows down, coach calls us into a circle to briskly brush over our upcoming practices and matches. When she gives me the floor, I spit out a few ideas for our team-bonding events and remind the girls to attend Captain's Practice the following night. The girls become antsy when they see their parents' cars roll into view, so I lead the team with our tennis cheer to close out practice.
The next night, I am eager to run Captain's Practice. Pleased with the attendance, I see the determination that was once locked away in these girls. As a Captain, I aimed to satisfy their hunger for tennis and ultimately help them improve. I planned to inspire the immovable through my experience and make them move. I certainly did not want them to be discouraged by tennis as I once was and I did not want them to give up as a result of failure.
Understanding the discomfort that I once felt as a beginner, I start by instructing a basic swing and follow through. With simple repetition of strokes, I witness the girls gradually improving. I encourage them to keep practicing, even if that means smashing tennis balls against their garage doors.
Though it took me sometime to realize the potential that I had in tennis, I always had a coach who pushed me to do better. She made me move... literally. After realizing my potential, I wanted to improve even more and compete. More importantly, I wanted the discouraged players to look optimistically at there mistakes, and think they can only get better. I wanted them to be moved.
Please tell me whether this idea works with the question and if I answer it clearly. Also please help me out with the ending. I understand it makes no sense.
I will also help you with yours. Thanks