Hello! This is my admission essay for WashU University Scholars Program in Medicine. I appreciate any and all feedback on this essay, and PLEASE do not hesitate in your criticism. Better to hear about the flaws early on than 2 days before the deadline :) Thank you all very much and good luck!
Prompt: Please answer the following question in one page* or less: Explain why you are interested in pursuing a career in medicine. Describe any life experiences that may have sparked this interest, as well as any personal attributes that make you especially suited for a medical career.
*Fits one page
Essay:
Getting candy after a visit to the doctor's office? No. Reading an anatomy textbook? No. Watching House or Grey's Anatomy? No. No, my interest in medicine and passion for a career in this field did not originate from these surface-level, indirect exposures to the subject. It did not come from a fascination to cut up people or the attraction to the six-figure salaries. I was allured to this line of work from hands-on experiences and a genuine dedication towards the moral goal that fuels doctors' engines after years of exhausting schoolwork and clinical training. And it first hit me in seventh grade during my class's science fair unit. My project was investigating the effects of sulfur dioxide in the atmosphere of growing mustard plants. This was more of developing an engrossed interest in biological sciences rather than medicine specifically. However, the experience played an enormous impact on me and has drawn me significantly towards doing a research internship in high school. And that's exactly what I did. But as a read the papers that professors wrote on their projects, I noticed that the medically-focused ones encompassed the other two biological sciences that I was interested in-biology and chemistry. So the medicine was looking more and more appealing as it encompassed many areas of science I was fascinated in. And the medical aspect they investigated was not just researching to get results for publishing a paper. No, they approached their project with a revolutionary intention. An intention to find a cure for that disease or an innovative understanding of that organ. To accomplish these goals, an intuitive, sharp way of thinking is required, and I experience first-hand what this thinking feels like in my internship at Dr. Jason Yuan's Lab at UIC. In the lab, I investigated calcium signaling and various ion, protein, and ligand-operated channels that led to an influx in calcium and a proliferation in pulmonary arterial smooth muscle cells, which causes pulmonary arterial hypertension and right ventricular hypertrophy. Yeah. That's a lot of things on my plate, so that intuitive thinking I mentioned really got put to the test in the two months I spent in the lab. And the catch-up I had to play to keep up with the PhD fellows and M.D. fellows was one of the most difficult challenges in my life-all the more reason to tackle a challenge of similar caliber. A career in medicine.
But apart from the wonderful experience and knowledge I gained from my internship, I took away another important observation-the ultimate reason as to why these researchers do what they do. To help people. It all goes back to that revolutionary intention. They are not just performing all of these experiments because it is there job and what there degree entails them to do. No, they want to give back to the people who suffer from this disease and help them by finding a cure or a treatment. And these qualities of selflessness and altruism are what I try to base my character on and why I want to pursue a career in medicine where I can apply them. Ever since first grade where I would help my classmates with spelling up until now when I stay up until 1 a.m. to help my friend study for a calculus test, I have always strived to put the needs of others above mine. Not so that I could expect a reward in return. But so that I could see the satisfaction and relieved look on their face. So that I could hear the appreciation in their "thank you's" and "you're a lifesaver's. So that I could feel the world around them getting lighter as a huge, stressful burden has been lifted from their shoulders. And that is a greater reward than any material object in this world. When I volunteered and shadowed a doctor at an internists' clinic, I got to experience this sight, sound, and feeling. As I walked out of the patient's room, I felt...happier and more accomplished. Becoming a doctor for me is going to be a "journey-ception", for lack of a better term. All the different stages in accomplishing this feat, everything from undergraduate school all the way to retirement, will be different journeys each demanding new challenges. Challenges that I am eagerly looking forward to conquer.
Prompt: Please answer the following question in one page* or less: Explain why you are interested in pursuing a career in medicine. Describe any life experiences that may have sparked this interest, as well as any personal attributes that make you especially suited for a medical career.
*Fits one page
Essay:
Getting candy after a visit to the doctor's office? No. Reading an anatomy textbook? No. Watching House or Grey's Anatomy? No. No, my interest in medicine and passion for a career in this field did not originate from these surface-level, indirect exposures to the subject. It did not come from a fascination to cut up people or the attraction to the six-figure salaries. I was allured to this line of work from hands-on experiences and a genuine dedication towards the moral goal that fuels doctors' engines after years of exhausting schoolwork and clinical training. And it first hit me in seventh grade during my class's science fair unit. My project was investigating the effects of sulfur dioxide in the atmosphere of growing mustard plants. This was more of developing an engrossed interest in biological sciences rather than medicine specifically. However, the experience played an enormous impact on me and has drawn me significantly towards doing a research internship in high school. And that's exactly what I did. But as a read the papers that professors wrote on their projects, I noticed that the medically-focused ones encompassed the other two biological sciences that I was interested in-biology and chemistry. So the medicine was looking more and more appealing as it encompassed many areas of science I was fascinated in. And the medical aspect they investigated was not just researching to get results for publishing a paper. No, they approached their project with a revolutionary intention. An intention to find a cure for that disease or an innovative understanding of that organ. To accomplish these goals, an intuitive, sharp way of thinking is required, and I experience first-hand what this thinking feels like in my internship at Dr. Jason Yuan's Lab at UIC. In the lab, I investigated calcium signaling and various ion, protein, and ligand-operated channels that led to an influx in calcium and a proliferation in pulmonary arterial smooth muscle cells, which causes pulmonary arterial hypertension and right ventricular hypertrophy. Yeah. That's a lot of things on my plate, so that intuitive thinking I mentioned really got put to the test in the two months I spent in the lab. And the catch-up I had to play to keep up with the PhD fellows and M.D. fellows was one of the most difficult challenges in my life-all the more reason to tackle a challenge of similar caliber. A career in medicine.
But apart from the wonderful experience and knowledge I gained from my internship, I took away another important observation-the ultimate reason as to why these researchers do what they do. To help people. It all goes back to that revolutionary intention. They are not just performing all of these experiments because it is there job and what there degree entails them to do. No, they want to give back to the people who suffer from this disease and help them by finding a cure or a treatment. And these qualities of selflessness and altruism are what I try to base my character on and why I want to pursue a career in medicine where I can apply them. Ever since first grade where I would help my classmates with spelling up until now when I stay up until 1 a.m. to help my friend study for a calculus test, I have always strived to put the needs of others above mine. Not so that I could expect a reward in return. But so that I could see the satisfaction and relieved look on their face. So that I could hear the appreciation in their "thank you's" and "you're a lifesaver's. So that I could feel the world around them getting lighter as a huge, stressful burden has been lifted from their shoulders. And that is a greater reward than any material object in this world. When I volunteered and shadowed a doctor at an internists' clinic, I got to experience this sight, sound, and feeling. As I walked out of the patient's room, I felt...happier and more accomplished. Becoming a doctor for me is going to be a "journey-ception", for lack of a better term. All the different stages in accomplishing this feat, everything from undergraduate school all the way to retirement, will be different journeys each demanding new challenges. Challenges that I am eagerly looking forward to conquer.