Waterloo AIF Nanotechnology Engineering program

Hello, I am working on my AIF can someone check my structure and grammar as well as comments on my answer for furthur improvement.

University of Waterloo application

Q1: Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program, please discuss your interest in each program. (900 characters limit)

My intention with Engineering is about learning skills and growing my passions. The idea of innovating, designing, and researching nanomaterials is the basis of my educational goal towards the Nanotechnology Engineering program at the University of Waterloo. Ranging from effective medical accessories to dust-sized computer chips with a high-functioning system, these are the fascination of nanotechnology that always appeals to me. Being an engineer at Waterloo will help me make these ideas come to life. This is not only because of the prestigious co-operative opportunities given students to have hands-on experiences as well as building the solid foundation in technical and personal skills but also the characteristic of Waterloo in being one of the world-lead in innovation makes me believe in its potentiality to bring out the most extended capability of students when they study in Waterloo.

Engineer
Q1: Briefly explain why you are interested in engineering and particularly in the program to which you have applied. Comment, for example, on your interests and abilities; your career goals; exposure to engineering through school-related and other experiences; and discussions you have had with engineers, teachers, current or past Waterloo students. (900 characters limit)

My interest in Nanotechnology Engineering roots in my passion for wanting to make the image of the future world authentic. Growing up in a developing country like Thailand had limited my chance of accessing new ideas in the world of science. However, during my middle school year, I had had a chance to attend a seminary presenting the novel idea of an innovative society constructed around the application of nanotechnology which greatly fascinated me. Since then, I have believed that nanotechnology would bring significant changes to today's society. And I could not wait to become one of those forefronts who brought this idea into practicality which being an engineer is a gateway to succeed in this passion. Since nanotechnology engineering is still a new science of the world, I wished that I could be a benefit in advancing its potentiality and creating more innovation for our society.

In the last paragraph, you have grammar mistakes and don't use a lot of big words to let your essay flow together because when you use big words it doesn't make the essay flow anymore.

You shouldn't use the word I wish it makes it seem like you are putting yourself down instead of use I WANT TO BENEFIT MYSELF and don't use could not use couldn't.

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You have presented an intention that lacks discussion development. There is no clear path from your interest, to your academic goals, all the way to your professional ambitions. How will the university help you achieve the ultimate goal? The idea in this part is to show your path of learning. Relating your interest in Nanotechnology with a future idea you have for revolutionizing the field, which will then become the basis of your professional career ( educational goals and interest in your chosen program).

You should relate the course choice, laboratory, internship, and other unique learning aspects of Waterloo with the aforementioned data ( reasons for applying). That presentation would bring the discussion full circle based on the prompt discussion instruction. You have the right idea with this presentation, it just lacks appropriate information.

I would suggest looking into the brochures Waterloo has on their website. They have information about what extra opportunities are offered for each program. Talking about these opportunities can help you stand out since most applicants opt for the co-op = amazing option. For example, Engineering has the Sedra Design Center that hosts a Rocketry Team; I find Aerospace interesting, so I mentioned that. What @Holt mentioned could be remedied with the information on these brochures; you could explain how these opportunities (the laboratories, internships, unique learning aspects, etc.) can help you revolutionize nanoscience. You should find these so called brochures by searching them up or looking under the applications tab on their website. Best of luck, fellow applicant!

@makineau
Thanks a lot for your advice!! I did a bit of research about clubs in Waterloo and include those into my AIF. Best o luck for you too!