Waterloo's health science, software engineering and the business and computer science program - AIF

Reasons for choosing your program and Waterloo

Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900 character limit)

I applied to Waterloo's health science, software engineering and the business and computer science program to develop skills necessary for my future as a health professional. I love the idea of cooperating with like-minded individuals to enhance both the health prevention and health treatment sectors of healthcare through means of software or policies. Waterloo's abundance in clubs and its small classes allow me to build strong connections with peers and professors. The diverse electives in the pre-clinical specialization lets me concentrate on medicine while also having extra health paths open. I look forward to learning more on underlying lifestyle health risks in the HLTH 458 course. Additionally, Waterloo's velocity program, alongside the business and programming skills I will gain, is the base I require to launch my idea of an improved health diagnosis system. (878 characters)

Does this seem to show my interest? I see others wrote their life story for this question and I don't know if I should do the same or not.

Also, does this sound robotic (in terms of diction and tone)?
I am open to all suggestions.

Thank you!

These are unique responses and direct qualifiers for your double major. Why not make it more definitive so that the reviewer will have a stronger idea of your course and university choice process. These actually tell the reviewer more about what your interests are and how Waterloo applies to your professional purpose, which is the point of this prompt. It is important that you enhance these aspects of your response so that you come in strong with your written interview response. Remember, this may be the only chance you will have to convince the reviewer that you have a qualified purpose for attending Waterloo. Focus on the strongest aspects of your response.This is a unique presentation that can create an impression on the reviewer, if properly developed as a response.