Hey, guys. This is the topic of the Kenyon supplement essay:
Describe an experience when you worked in partnership with others to achieve something you could not have done alone.
And below is my essay. Please feel free to say anything about it. I'd really appreciate your help.
The air was freezing. After glancing at the whole auditorium, which was filled with more than 200 teachers and students, my hands sweated worse.
Here came the most exciting round of the debate-the free debate. In this round, leading roles are the second and the third debater whose job was to lauch intense bombardment on our opponents. At first, things went pretty well. But a few minutes later, my teammate sitting next to me was attacked by our opponents for she had an obvious loophole in her previous statement. She got a little agitated and wanted to fight back. Being the captain of the school debate team, I was supposed to control the situation when my teammates got unstable. So I gently patted her on shoulder, telling her not to panic but calm down. She was appeased. Then I stood up to help defend her point and counteract my opponent. In fact, that was what I and the fouth debater did in this round--to complement our arguments and make them water-tight with the statistics, examples that we had been collecting for weeks. Since our speed and tone of speaking varied, our speeches sounded perfectly cadent.
20 minutes slipped away fast. Luckily, our opponents used up their time before us, and we got one more minute to keep delivering our speeches. Each of my teammates made the final statement in order, then it was my turn. Only six seconds left. I grabbed the microphone and uttered a few resounding words "So internet addiction is an individual issue rather than a social issue."to restate our position and perfect our performance. The alarm of the countdown rhymed with the end of my voice. I sat down and lost breath. As astounding as it was, the audience bursted into applause.
We finally won the competition. Although I was not the "main force" of the team, our division of labor and cooperation helped me realize my own value. I learned that you don't necessarily need to be the main force in a team. Leading the team and controling the situations can also attribute to your group.
Describe an experience when you worked in partnership with others to achieve something you could not have done alone.
And below is my essay. Please feel free to say anything about it. I'd really appreciate your help.
The air was freezing. After glancing at the whole auditorium, which was filled with more than 200 teachers and students, my hands sweated worse.
Here came the most exciting round of the debate-the free debate. In this round, leading roles are the second and the third debater whose job was to lauch intense bombardment on our opponents. At first, things went pretty well. But a few minutes later, my teammate sitting next to me was attacked by our opponents for she had an obvious loophole in her previous statement. She got a little agitated and wanted to fight back. Being the captain of the school debate team, I was supposed to control the situation when my teammates got unstable. So I gently patted her on shoulder, telling her not to panic but calm down. She was appeased. Then I stood up to help defend her point and counteract my opponent. In fact, that was what I and the fouth debater did in this round--to complement our arguments and make them water-tight with the statistics, examples that we had been collecting for weeks. Since our speed and tone of speaking varied, our speeches sounded perfectly cadent.
20 minutes slipped away fast. Luckily, our opponents used up their time before us, and we got one more minute to keep delivering our speeches. Each of my teammates made the final statement in order, then it was my turn. Only six seconds left. I grabbed the microphone and uttered a few resounding words "So internet addiction is an individual issue rather than a social issue."to restate our position and perfect our performance. The alarm of the countdown rhymed with the end of my voice. I sat down and lost breath. As astounding as it was, the audience bursted into applause.
We finally won the competition. Although I was not the "main force" of the team, our division of labor and cooperation helped me realize my own value. I learned that you don't necessarily need to be the main force in a team. Leading the team and controling the situations can also attribute to your group.
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