Yale paraphernalia (free afternoon, a compliment, history, being more spontaneus)

Please help! I always help in return!

What would you do with a free afternoon tomorrow?
I would spend it with one of my oldest friends, my cello. We haven't been playing together lately because of all my college applications.

Recall a compliment you received that you especially value. What was it? From whom did it come?
"You're going places, Alex. You're going to make a difference one day." - My anatomy teacher

If you could witness one moment in history, what would it be and why?
I would love to see the miraculous landing of Flight 1549 on the Hudson River, to behold the incredible skill and heroism of Pilot Chelsey Sullenberger.

What do you wish you were better at being or doing?
I wish I were more spontaneous. Beauty exists in the unstructured nature of life-not in the notes on my calendar.

If you were choosing students to form a Yale class, what question would you ask here that we have not?
What on earth are you doing?

What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? Please limit your response to the space provided. (LIMIT- 500 CHARACTERS!!!!)

My room is covered with Yale paraphernalia: banners, bulldogs, photographs, you name it-I own it. In fact, the expanse of my collection represents Yale's endless opportunities to explore, experiment, and develop as a student. For instance, I am excited about shopping for classes geared toward medicine and other interests, living in a close-knit residential college, attending Master's Teas, and researching stem cells with Dr. Horsley. Like my collection, Yale has no boundaries.

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Laconic. Precise. Imaginative. I think it is complete. Say hello to my cello.
If you do decide to review one of my essays, let it not be the latter: pick "transferring objectives".

If you were choosing students to form a Yale class, what question would you ask here that we have not?
What on earth are you doing?
Hey, I don't know if this is a good answer or not so think more before you are going to use this answer...

Yale's endless opportunities to explore, experiment, and develop as a student.
This is a pretty big description that you can explain in 500 characters.

I am excited about shopping for classes geared toward medicine and other interests, living in a close-knit residential college, attending Master's Teas, and researching stem cells with Dr. Horsley: how is this affect you? Link it with the previous sentence. You don't need to mention abundant of things. I think it's better to focus on 1 or 2 things and explain how it helps you to develop as a student. Something like that..

Overall, good stuffs and good luck with your admission... I will check it if you decide to make any revisions, Love.
It would be nice if you could check my common app essay, thanks

I think yours is wonderful. maybe consider writing about what that difference might be.

"Beauty exists in the unstructured nature of life-not in the notes on my calendar" sounds good!

"What on earth are you doing?" might be surprising to the admission, but doesn't sound too constructive as to why that particular question is that important.

Other than those, your responses are glittering.

I also need a help in my essay and hope you could help me with it.

I have one supplement essay on the following topic: "Unusual circumstances in your life" to let the admission know more about me. Since your expressions are beautiful, I beg you to maybe point out where I can put more effective phrase or get rid of unnecessarily complicated ideas. Thanks beforehand.

i love the last question but the why yale answer should be more specific about the college ( can you please ediit my yale engineering supplement)