This is my Yale supplemental essay, in progress. Please help me out and I'll return the favor to you if you tell me which essay to look at! Thanks so much!
(Also, I'm having some trouble transitioning to the last paragraph, any suggestions?)
The prompt is: You have already told us about yourself in the Common Application, with its list of activities, Short Answer, and Personal Essay. In this required second essay, tell us something that you would like us to know about you that we might not get from the rest of your application - or something that you would like a chance to say more about. (~500 words)
When I was young, my mother would look through her jewelry collection and I'd go through her perfume samples. Creed's Silver Mountain Water called to me one day and though I tried to gently open the small bottle, I poured the fragrance all over my hands and wrists. Later that day we went to the synagogue to help with some baking and all of the older women complemented my mother on her perfume. "What are you wearing?" they asked, "It smells delightful." I blushed and giggled as I shied away behind my mom's legs. My fascination with the fragrance of each woman began, although I was told to wait several years before I could begin my own experimentation.
My search began in middle school, when wearing a fragrance became more common. I tried body sprays and scented lotions from Bath and Body Works. I always liked the sweetest scents: Coconut Lime Verbena, Sun Ripened Raspberry and Warm Vanilla Sugar. Soon, I bought my first real perfume, Hanae Mori Butterfly, a sugar sweet bright scent. Over the next few years, I limited myself to one perfume at a time as I soon became addicted to the beautiful scents. To satisfy my desire to smell and purchase perfumes, I started giving them as gifts, only to realize that buying perfume is a very personal purchase.
A scent reflects who you see yourself as and how you want to present yourself. Are you a Chanel Chance Eau Tendre? A spring flowery fragrance with bright hints of grapefruit and quince: "intoxicatingly innocent" as Sephora says. Or maybe you're a Viktor and Rolf Eau Mega? A warm sweet fruity perfume with hints of pear and basil: "glamorous, chic and sophisticated" says Nordstrom. Perhaps you're a Miss Dior Cherie, one of my favorite scents? A modern luxurious blend of mandarin, caramel popcorn, patchouli, and musk: "chic and youthful", Ulta describes.
I'm all of these... and many more. My collection lives within several rooms of my house: my bathroom, the kitchen bathroom and even the dining room. Perfume is my drug and when I feel drab, I need a spritz. As I've grown older, my perfume preferences have changed. I like less sugary sweet, and more depth and complexity. I go crazy over perfumes with many layers that change as the day wears on.
My perfume preferences show other aspects of me, too. When I was younger, I liked more clear, precise things -- especially those that were "sugary sweet" or happy. Now, I love complex ideas with many layers. Sometimes I'll sit and get lost in my thoughts for hours, using Wikipedia as an easy tool to further my understandings. I get lost in what I call, wikiloops, endless circles of clicking and following new links.
Each of my perfumes reflects me. Each in a different way. Sometimes I layer the scents, mixing two familiar perfumes into a new one, while other days I like to wear the pure perfume, uninterrupted. My fragrance is a part of me reflecting who I am and who I want to be seen as. I have serious scents and fun scents, intriguing scents and simpler scents. After all, Christian Dior once said, "A woman's perfume tells more about her than her handwriting," and I wholeheartedly agree.
(Also, I'm having some trouble transitioning to the last paragraph, any suggestions?)
The prompt is: You have already told us about yourself in the Common Application, with its list of activities, Short Answer, and Personal Essay. In this required second essay, tell us something that you would like us to know about you that we might not get from the rest of your application - or something that you would like a chance to say more about. (~500 words)
When I was young, my mother would look through her jewelry collection and I'd go through her perfume samples. Creed's Silver Mountain Water called to me one day and though I tried to gently open the small bottle, I poured the fragrance all over my hands and wrists. Later that day we went to the synagogue to help with some baking and all of the older women complemented my mother on her perfume. "What are you wearing?" they asked, "It smells delightful." I blushed and giggled as I shied away behind my mom's legs. My fascination with the fragrance of each woman began, although I was told to wait several years before I could begin my own experimentation.
My search began in middle school, when wearing a fragrance became more common. I tried body sprays and scented lotions from Bath and Body Works. I always liked the sweetest scents: Coconut Lime Verbena, Sun Ripened Raspberry and Warm Vanilla Sugar. Soon, I bought my first real perfume, Hanae Mori Butterfly, a sugar sweet bright scent. Over the next few years, I limited myself to one perfume at a time as I soon became addicted to the beautiful scents. To satisfy my desire to smell and purchase perfumes, I started giving them as gifts, only to realize that buying perfume is a very personal purchase.
A scent reflects who you see yourself as and how you want to present yourself. Are you a Chanel Chance Eau Tendre? A spring flowery fragrance with bright hints of grapefruit and quince: "intoxicatingly innocent" as Sephora says. Or maybe you're a Viktor and Rolf Eau Mega? A warm sweet fruity perfume with hints of pear and basil: "glamorous, chic and sophisticated" says Nordstrom. Perhaps you're a Miss Dior Cherie, one of my favorite scents? A modern luxurious blend of mandarin, caramel popcorn, patchouli, and musk: "chic and youthful", Ulta describes.
I'm all of these... and many more. My collection lives within several rooms of my house: my bathroom, the kitchen bathroom and even the dining room. Perfume is my drug and when I feel drab, I need a spritz. As I've grown older, my perfume preferences have changed. I like less sugary sweet, and more depth and complexity. I go crazy over perfumes with many layers that change as the day wears on.
My perfume preferences show other aspects of me, too. When I was younger, I liked more clear, precise things -- especially those that were "sugary sweet" or happy. Now, I love complex ideas with many layers. Sometimes I'll sit and get lost in my thoughts for hours, using Wikipedia as an easy tool to further my understandings. I get lost in what I call, wikiloops, endless circles of clicking and following new links.
Each of my perfumes reflects me. Each in a different way. Sometimes I layer the scents, mixing two familiar perfumes into a new one, while other days I like to wear the pure perfume, uninterrupted. My fragrance is a part of me reflecting who I am and who I want to be seen as. I have serious scents and fun scents, intriguing scents and simpler scents. After all, Christian Dior once said, "A woman's perfume tells more about her than her handwriting," and I wholeheartedly agree.