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1.Talk about benefits for Viet Nam as a member of international organizations.

4 - You should correct some mistakes. "Joining in different international" -> "Joining different international", "WTO" -> "the WTO", "made easier...

Writing Feedbackhuongthu - May 2, 2024 / Rosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024
Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations.

4 - I think you should only focus on the shouldn't or should side. Choosing both will make your article generate...

Writing Feedbackpnib - Apr 25, 2024 / Rosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024
All university students should do some voluntary work to help the local community

3 - i think your second body paragraph is not really convincing that in my opinion, introverts also should take part...

Writing FeedbackZenpix_loan - Apr 30, 2024 / an68 - May 10, 2024
Information technology is changing many aspects of lives and now dominates our home, leisure, work

2 - Even though you successfully wrote more than 300 words, the essay itself is empty of useful reasoning and convincing...

Writing Feedbackan68 - May 5, 2024 / Holt - May 9, 2024
The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library

2 - This is not really necessary to the discussion. Your previous sentence already informed the reader about the services...

Writing FeedbackTeresa_sssa - May 5, 2024 / Holt - May 9, 2024
Imprisonment is the best solution to crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

3 - I believe that quality assurance is the factor that went missing in your writing process as you have made...

Writing Feedbackchanpu - Apr 17, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 4, 2024
Do you think people in your community are generally happy or unhappy?

3 - You may wish to consider this commonly used structure to improve the organization and quality of your writing: ...

Writing FeedbackRozalin - Apr 25, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 4, 2024
Good ratings for five main fields of a college - IELTS essay

2 - The summary overview should be composed of 2-3 sentences. You provided only 1 sentence. That will result in a...

Writing FeedbackNgo Dang Viet - May 4, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Some think that the government should support retired people financially.

2 - This sort of essay requires you to present varied justifications in the reasoning paragraphs. You need to support your...

Writing FeedbackLearn2rite - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Having emotions makes me human -

2 - There are a few errors in grammar here: This should be written as "Why am I crying?"...

Writing Feedbackkleo - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
IELTS QUESTION: People should only buy locally grown food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - Do not leave the thesis statement this vague. Make specific mention of each reason. That way you establish...

Writing FeedbackSakuradesu - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
agree or disagree with people have forgotten the meaning of tradition festivals

2 - You cannot stand with both opinions in this case. The instruction requires you to choose one opinion and defend...

Writing Feedbackjimmy2305 - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
TASK 2: it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems

2 - This is an incorrect claim that has affected the original discussion topic. There is no debate being presented....

Writing Feedbackngochuyen312 - May 2, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
ielts writing essay about Should governments give more financial support to local film industries

2 - You are not very skilled at creating sentences and paragraphs in the English language yet. Your prompt restatement and...

Writing Feedbackalieee - Apr 30, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Some people think that shopping has become easier because of modern technology

2 - This is an essay that comes with a "discuss both views and give an opinion" writing instruction. You did...

Writing FeedbackCandyShays - Apr 27, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employee

2 - The prompt restatement and writer's opinion is good enough to get a passing preliminary score. The problem is that...

Writing FeedbackHuongdang - Apr 26, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Young people commit crimes should be treated same as adults by authorities. Agree or disagree

2 - The prompt restatement is highly confusing. It does not properly restate the original topic. It indicates a totally different...

Writing FeedbackAbby210 - Apr 25, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Newspapers are having enormous influence on people ideas and opinions. Why is this the case?

2 - This does not respond directly to the writing prompt guide so your writer's opinion is incomplete. Always provide...

Writing Feedbackthuylinh2310 - Apr 24, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative?

3 - To improve the academic tone of your essay, the usage of pronouns like "we" should be avoided. You can...

Writing FeedbackHuyenle232 - Apr 22, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 3, 2024
Many people living in cities these days do not get enough physical exercise.

5 - The use of "..." to present a list of items is not standard in English. Instead, you could use...

Writing Feedbackkevintuankiet - Apr 21, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 3, 2024
Being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers

2 - This empty sentence will cost deductions in the Task Accuracy score. Your paragraph fails to meet the writer's...

Writing Feedbacklucy8888 - Apr 23, 2024 / Holt - Apr 28, 2024
What skills should the teenagers have to face stress and pressure?

2 - The format of the essay is not properly presented even though it meets the word count requirement. I am...

Writing FeedbackLinhfgk - Apr 21, 2024 / Holt - Apr 28, 2024
Being dependend in the modern world

3 - @Anh_65 Introduce the topic in a neutral tone, that is don't state your opinion first, then allow the...

Writing FeedbackAnh_65 - Apr 21, 2024 / Layson Manga - Apr 22, 2024
Essay on the importance of use of force.

2 - Make sure to reference the author before the quotation int he paragraph. That way when you reference the...

Writing FeedbackJorge74 - Apr 19, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
IELTS writing: Reasons and solutions for teenagers prefering socializing online to meeting in person

2 - The essay is overwritten. You should not write more than 300 words for the task 2 essay. That is...

Writing FeedbackNnop - Apr 17, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types from 2000 and 2009

2 - It is not enough to simply repeat the first part of the directions in the summary overview. You have...

Writing FeedbackQuien - Apr 17, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Some people think that in modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other.

2 - Nobody is asking if the statement is true or not. So you do not have to indicate that...

Writing Feedbackjasanh - Apr 17, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
People are living longer lives now than they did in the past.

2 - Nobody is arguing this information with you. There is no need to provide an attestation in the paragraph....

Writing FeedbackLy Ly - Apr 15, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 1 - national consumer spending

2 - The essay is incomplete. The summary overview does not state several considerations such as : 1. What is...

Writing Feedbackhttra - Apr 15, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
News plays an important part in most people's lives

2 - The essay is due to receive an immediate failing score. Kindly look at the guide writing question again. It...

Writing Feedbackhanahahaha - Apr 15, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Abstract: Relationship between customers and supermarkets

2 - I think that you should avoid the mention of the Post Covid 19-era in the paper. It is not...

Writing Feedbackecho5016 - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it

2 - The first paragraph is not well developed. The idea behind the original topic got lost in the paraphrasing. The...

Writing FeedbackBAONGOC030815 - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Many women now have children later in life. What are the causes? What are the pros and cons?

2 - Avoid the use of over used and exaggerated English reference phrases such as this one. Examiners consider its...

Writing Feedbackhvnnnn - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Online classes make conventional classrooms unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - The essay is going to receive an immediate failing score. A quick review of the given statement shows that...

Writing Feedbackmikeelenka23 - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Preventing foreign companies from opening businesses to protect the local companies

2 - All IELTS Task 2 essays are single opinion essays unless otherwise specified as a comparative discussion. Since this...

Writing Feedbackitsismeafighter - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
The Impact of Social Media on Mental Health

2 - The introduction paragraph needs more clarity. You cannot go from social media to virtual reality (VR) without first establishing...

Writing Feedbackjasminali123 - Apr 13, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
(WRITING TASK 2) Cosmetic surgery

2 - There is no need to say this. You already established the discussion parameters within the prompt restatement and...

Writing Feedbackthuyanh1910 - Apr 12, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
In some countries, many children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.

2 - One of the immediate noticeable problems that will reduce your score is the way you have disregarded the English...

Writing Feedbacknguyenthuyha2001 - Apr 11, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
a huge money and time should be spent on wild animals or human population

2 - The prompt restatement is not clear. I am not sure if it is because the word choices are incorrect...

Writing Feedbackkhanhhuyen48936 - Apr 10, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Do you think it is better to do schoolwork with other students or to work alone?

2 - I do not know where to start with the review of this essay. It is simply not well written,...

Writing Feedbackhoangokkk205 - Apr 10, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Living away from home during university? - Ielts writing task 2

2 - Unfortunately, the way this essay is written is quite incoherent. It will definitely get the lowest marks possible in...

Writing FeedbackDeverX - Apr 9, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK.

2 - The summary overview and analytical paragraphs do not feel complete. It comes across as having missing information. There is...

Writing FeedbackHoaitam123 - Apr 9, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Writing task 1: online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

2 - It is always best to indicate the number of images provided in the summary overview. That way the reader...

Writing Feedbacka pearl - Apr 7, 2024 / Holt - Apr 19, 2024
IELTS WT2: spoken communication is more powerful than written communication.

2 - There is a problem in the opening paragraph. There is no real restatement. as required by the task accuracy...

Writing Feedbacktanquocnguyen - Apr 7, 2024 / Holt - Apr 19, 2024
In order to learn a language well, we should also learn about cultures. Do you agree or disagree?

4 - Hi there, Your essay is well-written in my opinion, the idea is fully developed and some advanced words are...

Writing Feedbackhuong186 - Mar 31, 2024 / chloepham - Apr 16, 2024
Pros and cons of developing tourism industry

4 - i think you can give further explanation on the main idea of body1, like why "The tourist industry is...

Writing FeedbackIxora Ho - Apr 6, 2024 / chloepham - Apr 16, 2024
Is technology (television, computers, cell phones, tablet devices, MP3 players) beneficial for child

3 - Do not ramble and try to inflate the word count. It will only confuse the reader. Try to cut...

Writing FeedbackUrie - Apr 6, 2024 / akmaster101 - Apr 14, 2024
Some people believe that traveling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture.

4 - On the one hand, it is seemingly understandable why people subscribe to the view that traveling alone is the...

Writing Feedbackalicean242 - Apr 3, 2024 / echo5016 - Apr 14, 2024
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing

3 - Yes, like Holt said, use a space after any punctuation used, such as a period or comma. Additionally, I...

Writing FeedbackNguyenVanHung24 - Apr 3, 2024 / akmaster101 - Apr 13, 2024
How many migrants worked temporarily in 4 different countries

2 - The task 1 essay should only be composed of 200 words at the most. You have over analyzed the...

Writing FeedbackANCUTO - Apr 6, 2024 / Holt - Apr 13, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 1- Households owning electronic devices

2 - Do not overwrite in the task 1 essay. Stay within the 200 maximum word count. Writing more than that...

Writing FeedbackJennieaufif - Apr 4, 2024 / Holt - Apr 13, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - EDUCATION TOPIC

2 - The prompt restatement has 2 immediately seen mistakes. The first, is that the opening sentence is unrelated to the...

Writing FeedbackJennieaufif - Apr 3, 2024 / Holt - Apr 13, 2024
The only reason for learning a foreign language is to travel to or work in a foreign country

2 - There are 3 points of view that should be present in the first paragraph. The first public opinion and...

Writing FeedbackChuyen97 - Apr 2, 2024 / Holt - Apr 12, 2024
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and

2 - Sadly, the essay does not meet the minimum word requirement of 150 words. This will get an automatic failing...

Writing Feedbackwtfight - Apr 2, 2024 / Holt - Apr 12, 2024
Task 2: an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home

2 - Okay. This is a single opinion essay, not a comparison essay. Therefore, the response paragraph that does not relate...

Writing Feedbackjade126 - Mar 31, 2024 / Holt - Apr 12, 2024
Owned and rented accommodation - IELTS 1: Bar chart

4 - Data Accuracy: Double-check the percentages mentioned in your summary to ensure accuracy. Ensure that the percentages add up correctly...

Writing Feedbackffriendd - Mar 29, 2024 / DeverX - Apr 9, 2024
writing ielts task 1: The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were

5 - Clarity and Precision: Be precise with your descriptions. Instead of saying "the bar chart witnessed several changes," specify what...

Writing Feedbackpthu553 - Mar 29, 2024 / DeverX - Apr 9, 2024
Young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community

3 - Hi there, I'm a bit confused by your conjunction " granted", I assume that the previous sentence and the...

Writing FeedbackKhacHauPham - Mar 29, 2024 / Jennieaufif - Apr 4, 2024
Miles Morales and his Legacy as a New Spider-Man

2 - You could also consider including a discussion that relates to the comparison of the previous iterations of Spider-Man against...

Writing Feedbackanthonys455 - Mar 31, 2024 / Holt - Apr 3, 2024
The gaming industry - PS5 ENG102

2 - I believe that focusing your paper on specific problems early on in the research would also help. I do...

Writing FeedbackTolaDuressa - Mar 30, 2024 / Holt - Apr 3, 2024

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