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Students should learn all subjects at school, not the ones they like. Do you agree or disagree?

3 - Like Holt said, you should aim to be as close to 250 words as possible. Additionally, you should separate...

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Development in urbanization - TASK 2 - ACADEMIC

3 - I will recommend proofreading the response multiple times. For example, change "hazzard circumstances" to hazardous circumstances as it is...

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The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language

2 - The definition of a paragraph is a block of writing comprised of at least 3 sentences. For an English...

Writing Feedbackhoatrongvuonca - May 16, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Many people now like living in the countryside because they think there are many good things there.

2 - The essay has too many words in it. You cannot write more than 300 words during the actual test....

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Write an essay about advantages and disadvantages of the Internet on teenagers in modern life.

2 - You must avoid using Vietnamese words in your English writing. That is not going to help you get a...

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( WRITING TASK 1 DOUBLE CHARTS) THE NUMBER OF FOREIGN TOURISTS VISITING XCOUNTRY IN 2019 AND 2020:..

2 - The task has too many words written. You might be able to complete this during the actual test, but...

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There are more challenges and risks than benefits to new technology.

2 - You weakened your own opinion and evidence presentation in the essay when you agreed in the first reasoning paragraph...

Writing FeedbackNghian - May 14, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
[WRITING TASK 1] The map below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010

2 - This is too formal for the task 1 presentation. Also, you misidentified the drawing. It is a map,...

Writing FeedbackEcec243 - May 13, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
In many countries, people decide to have children at a later age than in the past. Why?

2 - Your writer's opinion presentation is incomplete. You have only answered 1 out of 2 opinion questions. Therefore, your opinion...

Writing Feedbacknpaa11k27 - May 12, 2024 / Holt - May 17, 2024
Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries

2 - For this type of question, you should have used the disproving style of opinion presentation. A discussion based on...

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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later

2 - The writing format for this essay is that of a single opinion presentation. That is why you were asked...

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Some countries have more youngsters than older ones.

2 - Your prompt restatement is improperly presented. The restatement and your opinion should be located in the same paragraph. The...

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Research paper regarding AI-generated art

2 - The paragraphs are closing using a citation. It lacks a proper transitional discussion from one paragraph to the next....

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Asian countries in terms of the proportion of population living in cities - [Ielts cambridge 18]

2 - When you write the summary overview, always remember that you will tend to gain more points when you create...

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Cinema attendance : by age group in Great Britain

2 - You have misidentified the image. It is not a diagram. It is a line graph. This error has created...

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How can an organization effectively address a major employee relations issue?

2 - Where is the paper that you wrote for editing or comments? We do not write the essays for you...

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Women who were employed in four countries - A REPORT DESCRIBING THE INFORMATION

2 - Your efforts in writing this analysis paper is commendable. However, that does not mean that you did it properly....

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Students' evaluating teachers

2 - What is missing for your presentation is the comparison point between the public and your personal opinion. For each...

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Some old buildings are more worth preserving than others?

2 - There are 2 main things you have to change when you write your next practice essay. The first thing...

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1.Talk about benefits for Viet Nam as a member of international organizations.

4 - You should correct some mistakes. "Joining in different international" -> "Joining different international", "WTO" -> "the WTO", "made easier...

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Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations.

4 - I think you should only focus on the shouldn't or should side. Choosing both will make your article generate...

Writing Feedbackpnib - Apr 25, 2024 / Rosecute2k10 - May 16, 2024
All university students should do some voluntary work to help the local community

3 - i think your second body paragraph is not really convincing that in my opinion, introverts also should take part...

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Information technology is changing many aspects of lives and now dominates our home, leisure, work

2 - Even though you successfully wrote more than 300 words, the essay itself is empty of useful reasoning and convincing...

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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library

2 - This is not really necessary to the discussion. Your previous sentence already informed the reader about the services...

Writing FeedbackTeresa_sssa - May 5, 2024 / Holt - May 9, 2024
Imprisonment is the best solution to crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

3 - I believe that quality assurance is the factor that went missing in your writing process as you have made...

Writing Feedbackchanpu - Apr 17, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 4, 2024
Do you think people in your community are generally happy or unhappy?

3 - You may wish to consider this commonly used structure to improve the organization and quality of your writing: ...

Writing FeedbackRozalin - Apr 25, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 4, 2024
Good ratings for five main fields of a college - IELTS essay

2 - The summary overview should be composed of 2-3 sentences. You provided only 1 sentence. That will result in a...

Writing FeedbackNgo Dang Viet - May 4, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Some think that the government should support retired people financially.

2 - This sort of essay requires you to present varied justifications in the reasoning paragraphs. You need to support your...

Writing FeedbackLearn2rite - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Having emotions makes me human -

2 - There are a few errors in grammar here: This should be written as "Why am I crying?"...

Writing Feedbackkleo - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
IELTS QUESTION: People should only buy locally grown food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - Do not leave the thesis statement this vague. Make specific mention of each reason. That way you establish...

Writing FeedbackSakuradesu - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
agree or disagree with people have forgotten the meaning of tradition festivals

2 - You cannot stand with both opinions in this case. The instruction requires you to choose one opinion and defend...

Writing Feedbackjimmy2305 - May 3, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
TASK 2: it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems

2 - This is an incorrect claim that has affected the original discussion topic. There is no debate being presented....

Writing Feedbackngochuyen312 - May 2, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
ielts writing essay about Should governments give more financial support to local film industries

2 - You are not very skilled at creating sentences and paragraphs in the English language yet. Your prompt restatement and...

Writing Feedbackalieee - Apr 30, 2024 / Holt - May 4, 2024
Some people think that shopping has become easier because of modern technology

2 - This is an essay that comes with a "discuss both views and give an opinion" writing instruction. You did...

Writing FeedbackCandyShays - Apr 27, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employee

2 - The prompt restatement and writer's opinion is good enough to get a passing preliminary score. The problem is that...

Writing FeedbackHuongdang - Apr 26, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Young people commit crimes should be treated same as adults by authorities. Agree or disagree

2 - The prompt restatement is highly confusing. It does not properly restate the original topic. It indicates a totally different...

Writing FeedbackAbby210 - Apr 25, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Newspapers are having enormous influence on people ideas and opinions. Why is this the case?

2 - This does not respond directly to the writing prompt guide so your writer's opinion is incomplete. Always provide...

Writing Feedbackthuylinh2310 - Apr 24, 2024 / Holt - May 3, 2024
Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative?

3 - To improve the academic tone of your essay, the usage of pronouns like "we" should be avoided. You can...

Writing FeedbackHuyenle232 - Apr 22, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 3, 2024
Many people living in cities these days do not get enough physical exercise.

5 - The use of "..." to present a list of items is not standard in English. Instead, you could use...

Writing Feedbackkevintuankiet - Apr 21, 2024 / Sakuradesu - May 3, 2024
Being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers

2 - This empty sentence will cost deductions in the Task Accuracy score. Your paragraph fails to meet the writer's...

Writing Feedbacklucy8888 - Apr 23, 2024 / Holt - Apr 28, 2024
What skills should the teenagers have to face stress and pressure?

2 - The format of the essay is not properly presented even though it meets the word count requirement. I am...

Writing FeedbackLinhfgk - Apr 21, 2024 / Holt - Apr 28, 2024
Being dependend in the modern world

3 - @Anh_65 Introduce the topic in a neutral tone, that is don't state your opinion first, then allow the...

Writing FeedbackAnh_65 - Apr 21, 2024 / Layson Manga - Apr 22, 2024
Essay on the importance of use of force.

2 - Make sure to reference the author before the quotation int he paragraph. That way when you reference the...

Writing FeedbackJorge74 - Apr 19, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
IELTS writing: Reasons and solutions for teenagers prefering socializing online to meeting in person

2 - The essay is overwritten. You should not write more than 300 words for the task 2 essay. That is...

Writing FeedbackNnop - Apr 17, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types from 2000 and 2009

2 - It is not enough to simply repeat the first part of the directions in the summary overview. You have...

Writing FeedbackQuien - Apr 17, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Some people think that in modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other.

2 - Nobody is asking if the statement is true or not. So you do not have to indicate that...

Writing Feedbackjasanh - Apr 17, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
People are living longer lives now than they did in the past.

2 - Nobody is arguing this information with you. There is no need to provide an attestation in the paragraph....

Writing FeedbackLy Ly - Apr 15, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 1 - national consumer spending

2 - The essay is incomplete. The summary overview does not state several considerations such as : 1. What is...

Writing Feedbackhttra - Apr 15, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
News plays an important part in most people's lives

2 - The essay is due to receive an immediate failing score. Kindly look at the guide writing question again. It...

Writing Feedbackhanahahaha - Apr 15, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Abstract: Relationship between customers and supermarkets

2 - I think that you should avoid the mention of the Post Covid 19-era in the paper. It is not...

Writing Feedbackecho5016 - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it

2 - The first paragraph is not well developed. The idea behind the original topic got lost in the paraphrasing. The...

Writing FeedbackBAONGOC030815 - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Many women now have children later in life. What are the causes? What are the pros and cons?

2 - Avoid the use of over used and exaggerated English reference phrases such as this one. Examiners consider its...

Writing Feedbackhvnnnn - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Online classes make conventional classrooms unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2 - The essay is going to receive an immediate failing score. A quick review of the given statement shows that...

Writing Feedbackmikeelenka23 - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Preventing foreign companies from opening businesses to protect the local companies

2 - All IELTS Task 2 essays are single opinion essays unless otherwise specified as a comparative discussion. Since this...

Writing Feedbackitsismeafighter - Apr 14, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
The Impact of Social Media on Mental Health

2 - The introduction paragraph needs more clarity. You cannot go from social media to virtual reality (VR) without first establishing...

Writing Feedbackjasminali123 - Apr 13, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
(WRITING TASK 2) Cosmetic surgery

2 - There is no need to say this. You already established the discussion parameters within the prompt restatement and...

Writing Feedbackthuyanh1910 - Apr 12, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
In some countries, many children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.

2 - One of the immediate noticeable problems that will reduce your score is the way you have disregarded the English...

Writing Feedbacknguyenthuyha2001 - Apr 11, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
a huge money and time should be spent on wild animals or human population

2 - The prompt restatement is not clear. I am not sure if it is because the word choices are incorrect...

Writing Feedbackkhanhhuyen48936 - Apr 10, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Do you think it is better to do schoolwork with other students or to work alone?

2 - I do not know where to start with the review of this essay. It is simply not well written,...

Writing Feedbackhoangokkk205 - Apr 10, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024
Living away from home during university? - Ielts writing task 2

2 - Unfortunately, the way this essay is written is quite incoherent. It will definitely get the lowest marks possible in...

Writing FeedbackDeverX - Apr 9, 2024 / Holt - Apr 20, 2024

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