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|Marriages and divorces in the USA - Writing Task 1 for IELTS (Graph)
NEW - Hi Everyone! I need your feedback in term of writing ielts task 1 (Task Achievement, Lexical Resources, Cohesion and...
Writing Feedbackannisaelda13 - Oct 19, 2018 / — -
|IELTS Task 1: Geothermal Power Plant
NEW - Hai guys, I need your FEEDBACK IN TERM OF WRITTING TASK 1 (TASK ACHIEVEMENT, COHERENCE AND COHENSION, LEXICAL RESOURCE,...
Writing Feedbackerlanggaid - Oct 19, 2018 / — -
|Fish and meats consumption - Preparing to take IELTS for school requirement - Task 1 essay
4 - @Holt Thank you. I have noted your suggestion and will redo it again in next essay to get better...
Writing FeedbackKrystalCho89 - Oct 12, 2018 / KrystalCho89 - Oct 18, 2018
|Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer.
2 - Owning a business that means they could can follow their passion, find work motivation from interest be self-motivated, as...
Writing Feedbackzuzuzela - Oct 15, 2018 / rupsajina - Oct 18, 2018
|Today younger generations are getting married and have kids after the age of 30
2 - Kapil, you must learn to understand the different prompt discussion requirements of the Task 2 essays. All of these...
Writing Feedbackkapil098 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Living with your parents, the advantages
2 - Hi Faradina. It is a great essay with an apparent three reasons why people should live with their parents....
Writing FeedbackFaradina - Oct 16, 2018 / Elvin - Oct 18, 2018
|Composition 101 Informative Essay (no outside sources allowed - writing about stress management)
2 - Keyla, this is a very good topic for discussion and your approach is highly interesting. The problem that I...
Writing Feedbackeuphoric33 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others ...
2 - Jagpreet. your TA score for this essay will not be enough to help you get a passing score overall....
Writing FeedbackRandhawa294 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|A professional baseball player
2 - Rafiq, you are getting your English terms mixed up in this essay. The correct sentence is "Many people dream...
Writing FeedbackRafiq313 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Nha Trang - DESCRIBE A WELL-KNOWN DESTINATION YOU HAVE VISITED
5 - @lahoaithu I don't really find this essay interesting in a creative manner. You are just narrating your experience there,...
Writing Feedbacklahoaithu - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|Sports can be bridge to peace and understanding between countries and societes
2 - Tran, you have a good prompt paraphrase but your response to the question is missing. What is your measured...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|There is a different approach on how the organization gives promotion to their employees.
3 - Thank you @Holt! I always learn something valuable from your comments. Hopefully I can improve my score in the...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 16, 2018
|Problems with student behavior. What causes this and how to react.
2 - Nguyen, your approach to the prompt paraphrase / thesis statement is incorrect. The other problem, is that you added...
Writing Feedbacknguyenuyen450 - Oct 15, 2018 / Holt - Oct 16, 2018
|Motor use. Problems and solutions. IELTS task 2
3 - Dear @sillyman2000, I think in this kind of essay, you need to write properly the reasons completed with...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Oct 6, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018
|Some people prefer to live in horizontal cities, while others choose a high-rise buildings
Writing Feedbackleanh - Oct 5, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 15, 2018
|Sources of energy - IELTS 2: Problems and Solutions Essay
3 - Dung, you are not being asked to justify the reasons for using alternative energy sources in this essay. The...
Writing Feedbacknhancau12345 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Social media and personal information (ielts)
3 - You did not provide the full prompt of this task, so it makes it difficult to see whether you...
Writing Feedbackjolin552039 - Oct 13, 2018 / Xti02 - Oct 13, 2018
|Practical intelligence or academic intelligence? IELTS writing task 2.
2 - Hoang, the best solution to your word count situation is to stop writing run on sentences as you are...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Family's closeness - IELTS 2: Problems and Solutions Essay
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Oct 12, 2018 / vietduccan - Oct 12, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2 - different perspectives on changes
2 - Zi Xuan, the reason that you failed this test is really simple. You failed to follow the discussion requirements...
Writing FeedbackAnn05 - Oct 10, 2018 / Holt - Oct 11, 2018
|Is it possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment? Ielts
3 - Trung, this is a failed Task 2 essay. The reason that this essay will receive a failing score is...
Writing FeedbackCentral6497 - Oct 9, 2018 / Holt - Oct 10, 2018
|How energy is used in Australia and the greenhouse gas emissions in total
3 - Tom, you need to learn to better separate you paragraphs in order to create a clear presentation of the...
Writing FeedbackTommyzuklin - Oct 8, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
|Writing Task 2 IELTS: Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history.
3 - Nguyen, you lost track of what the prompt is asking you to discuss which is the measurement of your...
Writing Feedbackthanhnguyen2508 - Oct 8, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
|Opinions are divided on question whether noise should be restricted or not. Ielts - task2
4 - Vince, when writing the 2 POV + Personal POV essay, it is always important to highlight the ownership of...
Writing Feedbacklnan95 - Oct 6, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018
|By virtue of upgraded medical health care, individuals have longer longevity as a result...
3 - paragraph two develop their economic -> economy this modern system -> If I were you, I would use 'these...
Writing Feedbackmainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018 / lnan95 - Oct 6, 2018
|IELTS Writing task 1 - the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city
Writing FeedbackVuxlinh - Oct 6, 2018 / Vuxlinh - Oct 6, 2018
|In my opinion there is no need for immigrants to give up their living habits abroad
2 - Tseng, this is an unrealistic essay writing presentation for an English language writing test. Believe me, you do not...
Writing Feedbackfish5a4d - Oct 5, 2018 / Holt - Oct 6, 2018
|Essay about the reason for learning foreign language - for travel, work, what else?
4 - you should be more careful when writing essays because i have seen some grammatical mistakes in this essay. Moreover,...
Writing Feedbackj85619 - Oct 4, 2018 / minhxinh - Oct 5, 2018
|[TOEFL iBT Task 2]: Independency for young adults
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|The arguments for or against the freedom of information in science and academic world
3 - Jia, your response to the prompt is incorrect and will result in a failing score during the actual test....
Writing FeedbackZOU - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|Ielts aging population topic - the average life expectancy is increasing
3 - To, this is a direct question essay. As such, you must offer an immediate discussion based on the instructions...
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: the same organisation or different organisations?
Writing Feedbackmainguyengoc2908 - Oct 3, 2018 / mainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018
|My English reading (English as a second language)
2 - @liqiaoer This would have been a more profound essay on your part if you could have just remembered to...
Writing Feedbackliqiaoer - Oct 3, 2018 / Holt - Oct 3, 2018
|(IELTS Task 2) Discuss sport professionals' salaries
3 - Nguyen, In this type of essay, you should be looking to discuss both points of view from a public...
Writing Feedbacklonelyboyscc202 - Oct 2, 2018 / Holt - Oct 3, 2018
|Topic: A family has a great influence on children's development..
2 - This can could be written as: ... developed nowadays, so the kids access ... From the beginning of...
Writing FeedbackFanger2002 - Oct 2, 2018 / Teebest - Oct 2, 2018
|DISCUSS ABOUT DRAWBACKS OF FAST FOOD - it is a potential menace to our bodies
2 - Hello Nguyễn, There is a disconnect between your opening paragraph and the next one. In the first, you...
Writing Feedbackthanhhieu23 - Oct 2, 2018 / btoguntade - Oct 2, 2018
|The best way to reduce crime among young people is to teach parents good parenting skills - IELTS 2
3 - Dear @AsgardSheol Iam impressed with your good control of English. However, I have a few advise to your...
Writing FeedbackAsgardSheol - Sep 27, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 1, 2018
|IELTs Task1: The bar chart shows University subjects chosen
5 - @Dang Khoa I don't think "seem" is unusable in IELTS writing. - "seem" is an informal word: I suspect...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 29, 2018 / windmooc - Sep 30, 2018
|Nowadays, obesity is becoming a global disease, which cause many serious complications
2 - Thong, how much time did you spend researching your response to the given prompt? Your writing comes across as...
Writing Feedbackgodzlotus - Sep 29, 2018 / Holt - Sep 30, 2018
|A CASUAL GLANCE FROM MY LOVE (Cambridge Ordinary Level examinations of English)
4 - I am really grateful over your critical analysis over my piece of writing. i really needed this and i...
Writing FeedbackPeachy_Hag - Sep 20, 2018 / Peachy_Hag - Sep 29, 2018
|Some think that students should study mainly science and math in order to prepare them to job market
Writing FeedbackRana Alhawbani - Sep 15, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|Ielts task 2. Sense of competion or teamwork? Which one is better?
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Sep 20, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|There is a myriad of people who believe that physically harmful sports ought to be forbid - IELTS 2
Writing FeedbackDang Khoa - Sep 24, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|Essay writing about the benefits when people want to participate in team sports or individual sports
Writing FeedbackHongkhanh - Sep 28, 2018 / Hongkhanh - Sep 28, 2018
|Write an email to community picnic organizer
3 - Here some comment may help you: would like to form my appreciation Say to express in which no...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 18, 2018 / Rana Alhawbani - Sep 28, 2018
|The Birth Rates changes in two developed countries - US and China over the period of 1920-2000
3 - Tran, your analysis is a bit confusing to read. You need to focus on the clarity of the information...
Writing FeedbackTran Hung - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|Youngsters demanded to do social works in their leisure time in order to help the poor and disabled
2 - Nguyen, you have discussed a totally different topic from the one provided in the original discussion. You have created...
Writing Feedbackvanduc - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: How the greenhouse effect on the temperature of the earth
3 - Hang, word count wise, you have more than enough words to pass the word criteria but format and presentation...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years.
3 - thank you so much for your suggestion. Vocabulary is the big problem for me now. I will try as...
Writing FeedbackBui Chu Uyen - Sep 26, 2018 / Bui Chu Uyen - Sep 27, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas
Writing Feedbackfaluda - Sep 26, 2018 / faluda - Sep 27, 2018
|The map compares the structure of university sports center at the present and after the innovation
2 - Le, this 4 paragraph essay should have been presented in the following manner: 1. Summary overview with trending...
Writing FeedbackJohnlee94 - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018
|Describe your favorite form of transportation - bus has many benefits
3 - Tran, when writing an essay that has several topics for discussion, it is best for you to offer each...
Writing FeedbackTranduyen - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018
|Fashion is highly valued in people's choice of clothes. Why? Agree?
2 - @HuyenHung "the impact that fashion has on their life" [line 1] "clothes make contribution to increasing ..." I am...
Writing FeedbackHuyenHung - Sep 26, 2018 / terminal28 - Sep 26, 2018
|IELTS academic writing task 2 Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible
2 - Phoebe, while your opening paraphrase should be commended for its interesting prompt restatement and reproduction of the discussion instructions,...
Writing Feedbackhamie0218 - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 26, 2018
|Have you ever had this question in your mind: "Are you a saver or a spender?"
2 - Tran, is this for an English writing class? It reads like a routine writing exercise to me. One of...
Writing Feedbacktrancucphuong311 - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 26, 2018
|IELTS Essay Task 2 Public spending on arts is a waste of money, agree or not?
3 - Catherine, there are four ways to approach an extent essay: 1. I completely agree 2. I completely disagree 3....
Writing FeedbackCatherine88 - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 26, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: Pie charts about Oscar winners by genre in 2003 and 2008
2 - Hang, the first problem with this essay is the number of words that you have written. During the actual...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 25, 2018
|The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time - TASK 1
2 - Mai, while you wrote over the minimum required words, your essay shows a lack of analysis and proper summary...
Writing Feedbacktrung3110 - Sep 24, 2018 / Holt - Sep 25, 2018
|It is an argue whether businesses have to be responsible for their effect on society or not
4 - Nguyen, your essay will fail due to several formatting problems. The first is that you have a redundant opening...
Writing FeedbackSEN2403 - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|Solving environmental problems: international organization or local government ?
2 - @TrangDiem11 Your essay has a good coherence, but I would like to suggest that you can include a few...
Writing FeedbackTrangDiem11 - Sep 24, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 24, 2018
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