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|Should people travel to other places to learn about the culture and live there?
3 - I rewrote your ending as: To summarize, traveling to other countries which are no involved in wars to gain...
Writing Feedbackyuxian719 - May 14, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 22, 2019
|IELTS task 2: problems in big citties/ main problems and solutions
3 - Your Opening is quite vague as you mentioned "some factors" and "some solutions". The same with your Ending "some...
Writing FeedbackTaylor 098 - May 21, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 22, 2019
|IELTS Task 1: The bar chart show the petroleum production and consumption among 7 regions in 2002
Writing Feedbackgrace412 - May 21, 2019 / grace412 - May 22, 2019
|Ielts Essay task 2 - young children play video games - problems and solutions
Writing Feedbacksuruku - May 16, 2019 / dacvuong11a1hoa - May 21, 2019
|Forested land in six continents over the world throughout a 15-year period
Writing Feedbackltdung0612 - May 16, 2019 / ltdung0612 - May 20, 2019
|The line graph of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city
2 - @Chau Nguyen Hello! First and foremost, I think you should focus on optimizing the word count through removing...
Writing FeedbackChau Nguyen - May 19, 2019 / Maria - May 19, 2019
|The statistics of tourists to Scotland who visited went to the various attractions
Writing FeedbackThulai1304 - May 18, 2019 / Thulai1304 - May 19, 2019
|IELTS 2- Language study / online courses offered by universities
4 - @Writer07 Thank you for your comment. But I am quite certain that each paragraph in my essay contains only...
Writing Feedbackmnhc - May 18, 2019 / mnhc - May 19, 2019
|After high school, students decide whether to continue studying in an university or getting a job
2 - @opaki123 Hi there! Let's look through your essay; I do have a couple of key recommendations. First...
Writing Feedbackopaki123 - May 19, 2019 / Maria - May 19, 2019
|The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011
Writing Feedbackhuynhtien2407 - May 17, 2019 / huynhtien2407 - May 18, 2019
|Summerize the information from the diagram to describe the production of milk
Writing Feedbackyenchauhoang - May 12, 2019 / yenchauhoang - May 18, 2019
|Personality and High Grades - What is the most important thing to succeed in life?
2 - @Krystal318 Hi there! Let's divide this response into two portions: technicalities and content-wise. In terms of the...
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - May 17, 2019 / Maria - May 17, 2019
|IELTS Task 2- schools' or parents' responsibility to teach children be healthy.
Writing Feedbackbuzzlin - May 16, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 17, 2019
|Students study in group is better than them to study alone
3 - @Trinh Duy Hung Hi there! Be cautious of the construction of your sentences because the forms of the...
Writing FeedbackTrinh Duy Hung - May 13, 2019 / Maria - May 16, 2019
|IETLS Task 2_ Pollution and environment damage result from developing and making the country richer.
2 - @AnhVu Try to omit unnecessary words that do not contribute anything substantial to your essay. Instead, try a...
Writing FeedbackAnhVu - May 14, 2019 / Maria - May 16, 2019
|Olympic Foods - My GMAT Analytical Writing Practice
2 - @PIYOPIYO First and foremost, I recommend revising portions that have unnecessary wordings in them. These parts are not supposed...
Writing FeedbackPIYOPIYO - May 15, 2019 / Maria - May 15, 2019
|The extinction of particular species of animals and plants lead to the main problem of environment
Writing Feedbackpro123 - May 15, 2019 / pro123 - May 15, 2019
|To improve road safety, it is not enough to punish more harshly those who violate the law
3 - thank u...
Writing Feedbackvietable - May 15, 2019 / vietable - May 15, 2019
|Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary?
2 - @Brenna Vo Watch out for the formatting of the structure of your sentences. I have noticed that you have...
Writing FeedbackBrenna Vo - May 15, 2019 / Maria - May 15, 2019
|Should secondary students learn international news as one of their subjects
5 - @Maria thank you very much for your strong support. I will keep practising and trying my best...
Writing FeedbackShaha1511 - May 14, 2019 / Shaha1511 - May 15, 2019
|IELTS 2: TOPIC Education for 18+ years
5 - @Brenna Vo Thank you very much But you know, when I search on Google, there are some articles that...
Writing FeedbackDuong Duc Minh - May 13, 2019 / Duong Duc Minh - May 15, 2019
|Humans today kill the Earth through garbage - it is a worldwide problem.
2 - hi @phamhaitb there are some mistakes you should pay more attention to such as: ... of reasons for this...
Writing Feedbackphamhaitb - May 15, 2019 / Brenna Vo - May 15, 2019
|Sifting Multi-task Learning for Fake News Detection
3 - Can you give more details about this essay? Especially, grammar and logic. Can you check the paragraph before section...
Writing Feedbackstayhungry - May 14, 2019 / stayhungry - May 15, 2019
|Should sports and social activities be supported at colleges and universities? - TOEFL
2 - @lelett Try to avoid repetitive language when you are writing. When you find yourself having excessive sentences, always read...
Writing Feedbacklelett - May 14, 2019 / Maria - May 14, 2019
|The two charts reveals the issue of nutritional value of the two selected meals
2 - @duongduong_tran When doing technical/analytical writing, always evade using unnecessary terms that prolong the sentence. Remember that your understanding of...
Writing Feedbackduongduong_tran - May 14, 2019 / Maria - May 14, 2019
|Writing Task 1 : The number of new graduates and their employment in the UK from 1992 to 2002.
2 - @ledidan Watch out for the forms of your words. Ensure that you always use the appropriate ones. Doing this...
Writing Feedbackledidan - May 13, 2019 / Maria - May 13, 2019
|Not only older people can be good company leaders - IELTS 2
2 - @trannhutoan2002 Be wary of using forms that are more appropriate in the structure of your sentences. Always be consistent...
Writing Feedbacktrannhutoan2002 - May 13, 2019 / Maria - May 13, 2019
|Spending too much time on video games than sports - IELTS
2 - There are is a myriad of grounds for spend spending excessive amounts of time on computer-based games. There +...
Writing FeedbackBrenna Vo - May 13, 2019 / HuongT - May 13, 2019
|Essay on the economy and environment
Writing FeedbackAshleyNg - May 12, 2019 / AshleyNg - May 13, 2019
|The best holiday ever (Say where you went and what you saw, and explain why it was the best holiday)
2 - @HuongT Be cautious of the forms of the words that you use in your essay. I have noticed that...
Writing FeedbackHuongT - May 12, 2019 / Maria - May 12, 2019
|Countres becoming similar / same products - comments and evaluation
2 - @tlyphuong1 Ensure that you have consistency in the forms of words that you use. Doing this will greatly improve...
Writing Feedbacktlyphuong1 - May 12, 2019 / Maria - May 12, 2019
|What causes someone to leave his or her country to look for opportunities in a different place.
Writing Feedbackviho0970 - May 11, 2019 / viho0970 - May 12, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Purposes of films
4 - @greynd Make concise sentences through merging your thoughts and not needing to create separate lines for them. Doing this...
Writing Feedbackgreynd - May 10, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|Study in the past and present
2 - @Buinganhieu Try to implement a more academic/informative tone to your essay. Doing this will greatly improve the overall structure...
Writing FeedbackBuinganhieu - May 11, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|Forming a Learning Group - Help me correct this short essay !!
2 - @MokNguyen Try to be more precise with your sentence construction. What this means is that you should try to...
Writing FeedbackMokNguyen - May 11, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|Essay about wiretap authorisations-need your corrections
2 - @Menurulilmi Watch out for your usage of punctuation, preposition, and appropriate grammar. To ensure that you have the appropriate...
Writing FeedbackMenurulilmi - May 11, 2019 / Maria - May 11, 2019
|Today some people have to work away from their family. What are the advantages and disadvantages?
4 - Dear Maria, thank you very much for your helpful comments. I have read them very carefully. Best regards, Hoa...
Writing Feedbackdohoa - Apr 27, 2019 / dohoa - May 11, 2019
|Seeking early independence from parents - TOEFL
Writing FeedbackDK23 - May 10, 2019 / DK23 - May 10, 2019
|Bigger benefits of learning a new language in primary school instead of waiting until middle school?
2 - @sillyman2000 A couple of notes to consider: 1. Be wary of your sentence construction. 2. When you're mentioning numbers,...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - May 10, 2019 / Maria - May 10, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1: NEW RESIDENTIAL CONSTRUCTION
3 - Hi hellomango, 1. Always include the original question. You are likely to be judged on how properly you...
Writing Feedbackhellomango - May 10, 2019 / greynd - May 10, 2019
|Is it better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school?
5 - I think you should do more writing practice because you did not even meet the word requirement. In addtion...
Writing FeedbackDang Ngoc - May 7, 2019 / sillyman2000 - May 10, 2019
|Tax increase on fast-food industry - IELTS task 2 - evaluation and grading
2 - @anchen259 Evade unclear sentence construction. This creates unnecessary wordings in your essay that would cloud its overall meaning. What...
Writing Feedbackanchen259 - May 9, 2019 / Maria - May 9, 2019
|The Pros And Cons of Social Media and Digital Communication to People
2 - @KeithSun I commend your writing skills. It's appreciated how you are able to merge together short and lengthy sentences...
Writing FeedbackKeithSun - May 9, 2019 / Maria - May 9, 2019
|Ielts-Writing-Task2-divorce rates skyrocketing recently
Writing Feedbacktonyleekakit - May 1, 2019 / tonyleekakit - May 9, 2019
|An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own country
2 - @sappi Avoid redundant words. When you are writing within word counts, being precise is vital because it will determine...
Writing Feedbacksappi - May 7, 2019 / Maria - May 7, 2019
|Living in a foreign country where you speak with non-local language would make communication problem
3 - I rewrited one of your sentence as: "The immigrants would also lost their old friends in their homeland...
Writing Feedbackcocococco123 - May 5, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 7, 2019
|WHAT IS THE REASON FOR PARENTS PUTTING TOO MUCH PRESSURE ON THEIR CHILDREN TO SUCCEED.
Writing FeedbackKrystal318 - May 6, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 7, 2019
|Rising the fee of petrol as the best approach to solve traffic and pollution problem?
Writing Feedbackquynhuyen1012 - May 6, 2019 / quynhuyen1012 - May 7, 2019
|Ielts writing task 2: Should media focus on lives of famous people.
Writing Feedbacktrangnguyen02 - May 5, 2019 / trangnguyen02 - May 6, 2019
|Midnight exam - write story. story in 150 words.
2 - Watch out for the lack of preposition in your essay. This can affect the flow of your content. Make...
Writing Feedbacklethixuantrinh - May 6, 2019 / Maria - May 6, 2019
|Short essay, topic: what can you do to make the school greener?
4 - You should remember to add a comma after your transitional words (First, Second,...) I rewrite one of your...
Writing Feedbackposoohyun - May 5, 2019 / Krystal318 - May 6, 2019
|Parents' responsibility in children caring_ Argumentative essay
4 - @puppy1111 @Maria Thank you so much for giving constructive feedback. I will try my utmost :) :) :)...
Writing FeedbackVan_Anh_Meo - May 4, 2019 / Van_Anh_Meo - May 6, 2019
|Statistics of underground station passengers in London during the period from 6am to 10pm.
Writing FeedbackChristinaduong - May 3, 2019 / Christinaduong - May 6, 2019
|The hardware implementation and software design of the collector based on STM32; Bridge Monitoring
Writing Feedbackzzz185369 - May 5, 2019 / zzz185369 - May 5, 2019
|ielts task 2 Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists only
2 - A few key terms I want you to work on: punctuation, grammar, and preposition. In terms of substantiation...
Writing Feedbackgianglt98 - May 5, 2019 / Maria - May 5, 2019
|Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables between countries. IELTS TASK 2
3 - Hi, Eddy Suaib Thank you so much for your valuable feedback and mentioned my weak points that I need...
Writing FeedbackHassan91 - May 5, 2019 / Hassan91 - May 5, 2019
|Short essay on immigration (IELTS task 2)
4 - Are you trying to write an IELTS essay task 2? This essay is good. However, it seems that you...
Writing Feedbacklouisepham - May 3, 2019 / eddies - May 5, 2019
|Write a paragraph with 140 words about anything that you are interested in life, work, school, etc.
3 - @thach102 I think that the direction of your essay would be dependent on what you would want your essay...
Writing Feedbackthach102 - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|Teaching a foreign language at primary school is better than secondary school. Discuss pros and cons
3 - Try to use words that are more academic by nature. These are words that do not create a casual...
Writing FeedbackKenvin Do - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
|IELTS: Some people prefer team sports rather than those which can be played individually
2 - Watch out for your usage of preposition. I would also recommend looking into using alternatives that are more appropriate...
Writing Feedbackchauking09 - May 4, 2019 / Maria - May 4, 2019
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