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Newspapers, books? Internet offers people satisfying methods to get unlimited access to information

2 - Try to limit the presentation to 300 words. Keep track of how many words you can actually write within...

Writing FeedbackLENGUYENHONGPHUC - Aug 13, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
A topic of interest regarding the money for building the roads rather than new railways

2 - The prompt for this essay asks you to discuss "To what extent do you agree or disagree?" You are...

Writing Feedbackminh23102006 - Aug 13, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Advertising has become an inevitable part of our lives.

2 - You have used an incorrect discussion format in this instance. Since you opted to use the 3 opinion discussion...

Writing Feedbackjason hoang - Aug 11, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Consumers being overwhelmed with commercial advertisements since fierce competition among companies

2 - The promot restatement is acceptable but, the writer's opinion is not. You did not directly respond to the extent...

Writing Feedbackhaonhien15 - Aug 11, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
A controversial topic if governments should invest on railways rather than on roads

2 - The first sentence is unclear in reference. What is people's repair? It is a reference that does not connect...

Writing FeedbackNguyen Tan Hieu - Aug 11, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
IELTS Writing task 1 the number of people eating more than 5 portions of vegetables and fish per day

2 - The first major deductions to this essay will be applied to the GRA score. Please note that you are...

Writing FeedbackThanh John - Aug 10, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Students desire to study other courses beside their majors

2 - The prompt restatement is a bit confusing. If there are only some students claiming something, then why is there...

Writing Feedbackmolisa - Aug 10, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Writing IELTS Task 2: These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries

2 - While I do commend your effort in writing this essay, and you did do a good job in writing...

Writing Feedbackmaiannh - Aug 10, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
The number of magazines sold per person

2 - You should have taken the time to identify how the countries were enumerated in the presentation. That way...

Writing Feedbacktradauvantue - Aug 10, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
The two maps below describe a number of alterations which took place on a small offshore island

2 - You should not be referring to the positioning of the images on the screen. The examiner is assumed...

Writing Feedbacktrytoget7score - Aug 9, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Traffic and accommodation problems increasing, the government encourage some businesses move rural

2 - This is an advantage and disadvantage comparison essay. When writing such an essay, you are not asked to...

Writing FeedbackThuminh - Aug 9, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - The chart below shows the depth of snow (cm) in a particular ski resort

2 - This is a 20 minute writing task that should be allotted no more than 200 words for the full...

Writing Feedbackserebi2704 - Aug 9, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Some people think that schools should teach/enroll students according to their academic abilities

2 - Do not lose sight of the writing time allowance for the task. Your presentation is hyperfocused on vocabulary, which...

Writing Feedbackvuongthaolinh - Aug 8, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
CBEST WRITING: money available from the state budget for school districts

NEW - funds for school districts Question: The amount of money available from the state budget for school district X...

Writing FeedbackCbestcset - Aug 19, 2023 / — -
Juveniles should receive the same punishments as the adults. To what extend do you agree or not?

3 - The number of crimes in recent years has become more and more young, which poses a serious threat to...

Writing FeedbackMaeve111 - Aug 7, 2023 / Maeve111 - Aug 18, 2023
Some people say that aging population cause problems, others see benefits of it. Discuss both views

3 - @roadto8writing The writing is also a bit too passive. For an argumentative essay, I think you need to present...

Writing Feedbackroadto8writing - Aug 8, 2023 / kokosi - Aug 17, 2023
Are advertisement directed children?? (IELTS task 2)

4 - @thaoly2007 Your paraphrasing in the introduction part is good, but there is not your opinion. That is a crucial...

Writing Feedbackthaoly2007 - Aug 8, 2023 / thanhbui64 - Aug 17, 2023
Respect for educators and criticism for their teaching methods

3 - @Ta Nhi I think you should talk more specifically about the meaning of "two-way communication". The best method is...

Writing FeedbackTa Nhi - Aug 8, 2023 / thanhbui64 - Aug 17, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] The news media should show equal amount of good and bad news

2 - You have failed to justify your opinion in this essay so it will not get a passing score. The...

Writing Feedbackhinam74 - Aug 7, 2023 / Holt - Aug 16, 2023
[ IELTS WRITING TASK 1] The percentage of people going to the cinema once a month according to ages

2 - You failed to do a complete identification of the image for the summary overview. You need to specify the...

Writing Feedbackhaibinh20 - Aug 7, 2023 / Holt - Aug 16, 2023
Not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. Why? Effects on society

2 - This is an empty thesis statement. There is no basis for this discussion presentation. What reasons relate to...

Writing Feedbacktieuthanh - Aug 7, 2023 / Holt - Aug 16, 2023
WRITING TASK 2: People are spending less time with their families. What are the reasons + effects?

2 - Part of the preliminary scoring process is based on your ability to present summary responses to the given...

Writing FeedbackAdamClaus - Aug 7, 2023 / Holt - Aug 16, 2023
Young people are required to work without pay in their free time to help the local community

2 - This is a comparison essay that is based on the advantages v. disadvantages of the given topic. The overall...

Writing FeedbackNhun - Aug 6, 2023 / Holt - Aug 16, 2023
Writing Task 1: Statistics of people who passed their driving exam in an Asian country in four years

3 - Here my opinion: - "it is clear that higher percentage of women who passed the test than men who...

Writing Feedbackrosiiieee12345 - Aug 4, 2023 / eya123456 - Aug 14, 2023
Task 1: The percentage for clothes, books, film, music and travel in online sales in New Zealand

4 - In my opinion, your essay is excellent! There is only one thing that could be improved to do better...

Writing Feedbacksemmast - Aug 5, 2023 / Tonynhan - Aug 14, 2023
In the chart the proportion of women employed in the USA, Korea, Afghanistan and France

4 - I love the way you describe the given data in the chart. But the final paragraph you connect the...

Writing FeedbackKbang - Aug 6, 2023 / selenakieu - Aug 14, 2023
Many museums, historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not by the locals - IELTS WRITING

2 - The writer's opinion could have used a clearer reference to the questions being asked instead of merely repeating the...

Writing Feedbackchauphan224 - Aug 6, 2023 / Holt - Aug 13, 2023
Who do you think should fund medicine and treatments researches: individuals or the government?

2 - It is nice to know how you plan to write the essay. The problem is, you were being...

Writing FeedbackZen - Aug 6, 2023 / Holt - Aug 13, 2023
Advertising in social media such as Facebook or Youtube

2 - Since you are self studying, Ic an understand why you will tend to write less than the minimum word...

Writing FeedbackNhatnotop - Aug 6, 2023 / Holt - Aug 13, 2023
The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries

2 - Use at least 2 sentences for the summary overview. You will get an impressive summary score if you use...

Writing Feedbackmmmphugn - Aug 5, 2023 / Holt - Aug 13, 2023
Financial support to poorer countries is not effective

2 - The summary overview does not need to be a social studies lesson. It should only be composed of 2-3...

Writing Feedbackurrachelbae - Aug 5, 2023 / Holt - Aug 13, 2023
WRITING TASK 1: The graph below shows the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004

2 - ther eis a conflict in this reference between the singular and plural words. 4 indicates a plural number...

Writing Feedbacktp123 - Aug 5, 2023 / Holt - Aug 13, 2023
The data about the volume of travelers who visited an island in the Caribbean between 2010 and 2017

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your evaluation. I will have some fixes and adjustments in my next test....

Writing FeedbackRTroMT - Aug 4, 2023 / RTroMT - Aug 11, 2023
Writing task 1: The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate it: This is the overview part I have...

Writing Feedbackeya123456 - Aug 4, 2023 / eya123456 - Aug 10, 2023
What brings more merits - getting an occupation or continuing studies after finishing school?

3 - @Holt that you mean those in body graph? sorry I dunno exactly what u mean to improve my writing...

Writing Feedbacknhim3607 - Aug 1, 2023 / nhim3607 - Aug 10, 2023
The pie charts show results of a survey of university about their part-time and full-time students.

3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice, I will note it down....

Writing Feedbackmyhelianthus - Aug 4, 2023 / myhelianthus - Aug 9, 2023
Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other

2 - Do not over emphasize your opinion statement. It is not necessary in this case since you were not...

Writing FeedbackStellalightfairy - Aug 5, 2023 / Holt - Aug 9, 2023
Writing task 1: The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry's sectors contribution

2 - You incorrectly interpreted the image. When you say between, that means there are years mentioned that connect the...

Writing FeedbackVivian Gia Linh - Aug 4, 2023 / Holt - Aug 9, 2023
Both views to indicate the impact of using phones by students in school

2 - It is fine that you told the reader what you will be discussing. However, you will not get...

Writing Feedbackmayanhshine1803 - Aug 4, 2023 / Holt - Aug 9, 2023
Both view when using smartphones.

2 - You atr trying to convince the examiner that you have a valid opinion regarding the subject based on...

Writing FeedbackQngiua - Aug 3, 2023 / Holt - Aug 9, 2023
Countries should not replace their traditional culture with modern culture.

3 - Thanks so much for your feedback! Maybe I write too much so that it made me digress on the...

Writing Feedbacktien_112 - Aug 1, 2023 / tien_112 - Aug 9, 2023
It is argued that parents should educate their kids to become a good person in society, not school

2 - This sentence will result in preliminary task accuracy score deductions. That is because you did not offer a...

Writing FeedbackLehau - Aug 3, 2023 / Holt - Aug 8, 2023
Learning history in school

2 - Try to write no more than 300 words with your next essay. You cannot write more than that during...

Writing Feedbackhayeon1402 - Aug 3, 2023 / Holt - Aug 8, 2023
Children should do organized activities or be free in their free time.

2 - There is a problem with the prompt restatement. You did not accurately restate both public opinions, standing aside from...

Writing Feedbackvantotet - Aug 3, 2023 / Holt - Aug 8, 2023
Convenient foods will replace traditional foods in the future... you agree or disagree?

2 - You showed that you understood the writing task. You also provided the correct response format for it. The word...

Writing FeedbackNgoc Ling - Aug 2, 2023 / Holt - Aug 8, 2023
IE Academic WT2 - The use of mobile phones does as much harm to the society as smoking does

2 - Wrong. You are directly being asked for your measured response as the writer of the essay. You cannot...

Writing Feedbackgobidea - Aug 2, 2023 / Holt - Aug 8, 2023
Nowadays, more and more people want to travel to remote areas such as the South Pole.

2 - The question asks you to write the essay based upon a comparison discussion format. That means, you must use...

Writing Feedbackphuogntr - Aug 2, 2023 / Holt - Aug 8, 2023
The bar charts show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in 2001

3 - @Holt Thank you so much, it helps me a lot....

Writing Feedbacktieuthanh - Jul 27, 2023 / tieuthanh - Aug 8, 2023
Discuss both view and give your opinion of whether the zoo should be closed due to cruelty (IELTS)

4 - your essay is too long for IELTS task 2 (576 words), you won't have enough time to complete in...

Writing Feedbackthaothu20003 - Jul 25, 2023 / thaoly2007 - Aug 8, 2023
WRITING TASK 2: DISCUSSION - The main environmental problem of our time

2 - There is no need for a measured response in this essay. That is not a requirement for the...

Writing FeedbackJadewestboston - Aug 1, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
The old and present look of Dubai

2 - I did not learn anything about the past and present look of Dubai from this paragraph. There was no...

Writing Feedbackaysnnn - Jul 31, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
WRITING 1 the proportion of new teachers having English and French degrees in Ontario (2001-2007)

2 - Okay. You have a definite problem when it comes to singular v. plura word usage. You are using a...

Writing Feedbackthulhp09 - Jul 31, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
Celebrities such as singers, actors or dancers can earn a significant amount of money

2 - This is an over discussed essay. You need to write only 4 paragraphs to explain your opinion in the...

Writing FeedbackNguynnn - Jul 31, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment in funds of four cate

2 - I cannot properly review the task 1 report that you provided because the image that you provided is incorrect....

Writing FeedbackHieuLeMU - Jul 31, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
An arguement that fashion may be harmful for human

2 - Your essay meets the word count requirement. That is a good start. At least you will not be receiving...

Writing Feedbackdht0 - Jul 30, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: LAND DEGRADATION - CAUSES AND EFFECTS

2 - The summary overview is good but needs to be corrected when it comes to the trending sentences. There should...

Writing Feedbackamurbleue - Jul 30, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
Exercising is said to be profoundly essential to human

2 - You did not answer the question being asked in the proper manner within the writer's opinion sentence. You were...

Writing Feedbacktus21 - Jul 30, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
WRT TASK 2: SEARCH ON FAMILY HISTORY

2 - The second line of reasoning is a deviation from the original topic. You did not discuss the importance of...

Writing Feedbackdthuph - Jul 30, 2023 / Holt - Aug 7, 2023
There have been more consumers using sugary beverages; it could be addressed by some viable measures

7 - @chloemarles I got it, thank you so much!...

Writing Feedbacktieuthanh - Jul 23, 2023 / tieuthanh - Aug 7, 2023
Should we take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience, or not?

3 - @Quynh Quynh Your thesis statement should be more directly, because it seems to be confusing. You should...

Writing FeedbackQuynh Quynh - Jul 28, 2023 / tieuthanh - Aug 7, 2023

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