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The opinion that teamwork spirit can be honed through team sports

2 - The actual discussion of the topic should not be done in the first paragraph as you did here. Any...

Writing Feedbacksplitude198 - Feb 2, 2023 / Holt - Feb 2, 2023
Scientists predict that in the future cars will be driven by computers - IELTS Writing Task 2

2 - While the essay is extremely wordy and actually shows off your vast English vocabulary, the focus on word exercise...

Writing Feedbacknguyenana611 - Feb 1, 2023 / Holt - Feb 1, 2023
Task 1: The rate of vehicle registrations (1970-2010) of three common commercial types...

2 - There are actually 2 graph images to be identified in this image. In no particular order, the presentation contains...

Writing Feedbackruy - Jan 30, 2023 / Holt - Jan 31, 2023
[IELTS WTITING 1] The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year

2 - The essay is too long to be completed within 20 minutes. Aim to write only 200 words as this...

Writing Feedbackdynamite101 - Jan 29, 2023 / Holt - Jan 30, 2023
The graph gives information about the percentage of people living in Australia born in UK

3 - @Holt thank you for correcting my mistakes...

Writing Feedbackmillbucksgurl - Jan 28, 2023 / millbucksgurl - Jan 29, 2023
General writing task 1: A formal complaint to retaurant

3 - @Holt Thanks for your comment, your points are critical and I realized I do missunderstood the topic requirements on...

Writing Feedbackbbqguy - Jan 27, 2023 / bbqguy - Jan 29, 2023
Academic paper on abortion on demand

2 - The first two paragraphs that you have written are bordering on incoherent. The thoughts being presented are a jumbled...

Writing FeedbackDaisyJk - Jan 28, 2023 / Holt - Jan 29, 2023
Writing task 1: Percentage of adults of different age in the UK

3 - Thanks for your checking...

Writing Feedbacklethacquang - Jan 28, 2023 / lethacquang - Jan 28, 2023
The best way to teach children to cooperation is through team sports

2 - The response you have used in this presentation is incorrect. While it appears that you are giving a degree...

Writing Feedbacktrinhxuanbach - Jan 25, 2023 / Holt - Jan 25, 2023
Writing task 2 : Working from home is more efficient than travelling

3 - Thanks for replying my writing task...

Writing Feedbackdjjockey1205 - Jan 24, 2023 / djjockey1205 - Jan 25, 2023
WRITING IELTS TASK 2: oral communication is more effective than written word

2 - Your prompt restatement is accurate as it refers to an opinion stated by someone else as a fact, rather...

Writing FeedbackCamtu25 - Jan 17, 2023 / Holt - Jan 18, 2023
TASK 2: Benefits of the use of technology at school (only body)

2 - The task 2 essay requires a 2-3 body paragraph depending upon the writing instructions. It appears to me that...

Writing FeedbackConann - Jan 17, 2023 / Holt - Jan 18, 2023
UBC ACTIVITIES AND ACCOMPLISHMENTS part

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. Actually, I wrote a pretty long explanation but had cut down thinking it...

Writing Feedbackjkarmie - Jan 13, 2023 / jkarmie - Jan 13, 2023
Research essay on the Federal Reserve- Feed Back

3 - I think the introduction could use a bit of work as it goes too much into detail and does...

Writing Feedbackjos2250 - Jan 8, 2023 / nataliasadhwani - Jan 12, 2023
IELTS writing task 2 Why women's sports receive less attention than men's sports

2 - The topic interpretation and your point of view should stand alone in the paragraph. You will automatically receive a...

Writing FeedbackSunny0629 - Jan 6, 2023 / Holt - Jan 12, 2023
Writing task: Learning right or wrong and punishment of the children

3 - @Holt Thank you so much ! I'll improve it !...

Writing Feedbacknerdypmns - Jan 11, 2023 / nerdypmns - Jan 12, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - The salary is not the only key thing to consider when choosing a job

2 - The prompt itself does not ask you to consider the truth behind the presented discussion point. Therefore, to do...

Writing FeedbackJohndavisvu - Jan 11, 2023 / Holt - Jan 12, 2023
IELTS writing task 2: The causes and solutions of reoffending

2 - Contact me privately for comprehensive scoring services. It is not part of our free review offering anymore. ...

Writing FeedbackSunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023 / Holt - Jan 11, 2023
IELTS writing task 1: Demographic change in Japan

3 - @Holt Thanks for you help, that's really helpful for me. Have a nice day!...

Writing FeedbackSunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 11, 2023
IELTS Task 1: The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas

3 - @Holt thank you for your advice, I will try to read more and do better next time....

Writing Feedbackcalicoshafira - Jan 9, 2023 / calicoshafira - Jan 9, 2023
Should children be banned from using their phones during the school day?

5 - This essay presents a balanced view on the use of phones in schools. it acknowledges the potential distractions and...

Writing Feedbackhuongggtra - Jan 4, 2023 / glowstorm - Jan 9, 2023
Internally young forever (about the blue zone states and Dr. Sinclairs research)

2 - Some is a plural adjective so it cannot be used with a singular reference. Use the indefinite article...

Writing FeedbackDreamgirl01 - Jan 9, 2023 / Holt - Jan 9, 2023
The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

2 - Always remember that this report is written on the assumption that the reader does not have a copy of...

Writing Feedbackthuyne - Jan 8, 2023 / Holt - Jan 9, 2023
Discipline is a growing problem in modern schools. Some people think that parents should discipline

2 - Your restatement is confusing to read. To be honest, it is not even remotely close to the original discussion...

Writing Feedbackjimmy1104 - Jan 8, 2023 / Holt - Jan 8, 2023
The population of young adults has been far higher than that of elderly people in some countries

2 - There is a redundancy existing in your opinion statement. The double presentation of your openion in a single sentence...

Writing Feedbackghadtj - Jan 7, 2023 / Holt - Jan 8, 2023
[Writing Ielts Task 2] The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress.

3 - I am also studying for the IELTS, and I can hardly imagine a candidate who can write a 440...

Writing FeedbackABC2519 - Dec 25, 2022 / Sunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023
TASK II IELTS regarding of the world becoming popular to research the history of owns family

3 - I'm not going to judge your performance in TA, LR and CC. Holt has already made a comprehensive assessment,...

Writing FeedbackYETI YUNIARSIH - Jan 1, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023
Ielts task 2 _ using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor

3 - I didn't find any grammatical mistakes in your paper. Great! Your section structure is reasonable, but it should be...

Writing Feedbackhoaflth - Jan 2, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023
Ielts 2: Government supervised and handled by the authority rather than by private companies

3 - There are some grammatical mistakes in your paper: 1.the article before the noun cannot be omitted, so it is...

Writing FeedbackHuynguyen123232 - Jan 2, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 6, 2023
In recent days, shopping is not considered as a responsibility anymore

2 - The essay will immediately receive a failing preliminary score. The writer has not followed the writing instruction as provided....

Writing Feedbacklyphung - Jan 4, 2023 / Holt - Jan 4, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - More Men Dying of Covid-19 Than Women

2 - While the word count was properly met in the presentation, the correct page formatting was not applied so formatting...

Writing Feedbackzeed22 - Jan 1, 2023 / Holt - Jan 1, 2023
Guitar Makes a Comeback to Pop Music

2 - The essay would also benefit from more popular song mentions in relation to guitar use a rhythm basis. You...

Writing FeedbackEddward - Jan 1, 2023 / Holt - Jan 1, 2023
IETLS Writing Task 2: encouraging studying overseas?

3 - The structure of your writing is good. You have an argument and example in both paragraphs. However, you put...

Writing Feedbackchlyee - Dec 31, 2022 / tuanb2610 - Dec 31, 2022
Oman and Spain population age ratios in 2005 and predictions for 2055 - IELTS Writing Task 1

3 - - "Predictive data accurately half a century later " this phrase is so long and vague => You should...

Writing FeedbackHanNguyen4869 - Dec 19, 2022 / nataliely - Dec 29, 2022
The percentage of population in cities IELTS Writing task 1

4 - - You use some words many time. + increase : rise / a rise, climb/ a climb, grow/ a...

Writing Feedbackyenvoo - Dec 22, 2022 / nataliely - Dec 29, 2022
Life today is unhealthier than in the past century. Do you agree or disagree? (IELTS)

3 - Grammatical errors and wrong word usage No defined thesis statement The point in your paragraph three is not well...

Writing FeedbackZhani - Dec 23, 2022 / Exceptional - Dec 26, 2022
Loss of plants and animals vs other major environmental issues

3 - Thank you for the feedback. Will definitely work on identified mistakes. Could you please provide me with a band...

Writing Feedbackumers - Dec 25, 2022 / umers - Dec 26, 2022
New experiences versus daily routines

2 - Good work on the restatement using 2 topic sentences. These were very clear reinterpretations that showed accurate English comprehension...

Writing Feedbacklong_hoangeiu - Dec 24, 2022 / Holt - Dec 24, 2022
[Writing Task 1] Statistics about branches of banks and financial institutions in Nepal in 2019

2 - I must point out an evident error that has appeared twice now in your task 1 writing presentations. You...

Writing Feedbackhanablaaaa - Dec 22, 2022 / Holt - Dec 23, 2022
[IELTS Writing Task 2] Parents with good careers now spend less time with their kids

5 - Your word choice is advanced, but the way you build sentences is not clear enough. Besides, the redundancy of...

Writing Feedbacknguyenlehalinh - Dec 14, 2022 / hanablaaaa - Dec 22, 2022
Concentrate on only a single skill - IELTS Wrtiting TASK 2

3 - they had no income from offline classes for several weeks, and the reason is that the only job they...

Writing FeedbackDuyPham - Dec 19, 2022 / Thaithao47 - Dec 21, 2022
Power generation (IELTS writing task2 2 part question)

2 - Incorrect statement. It is not implied but rather stated as a fact in the original prompt. Try to...

Writing FeedbackThaithao47 - Dec 19, 2022 / Holt - Dec 20, 2022
Advantages of reading books

4 - You could proofread with a grammar checker online to frame your sentence structure correctly. Would also suggest paragraphing your...

Writing FeedbackChouchou292 - Dec 18, 2022 / Exceptional - Dec 20, 2022
[Writing Task 2] Social health care for the old and reasons

5 - I think you should increase the confidence in your essay. Words like "In my opinion" are unnecessary. Overall, I...

Writing Feedbackhanablaaaa - Dec 14, 2022 / chelseaanasts - Dec 17, 2022
The consumption of fish - Writing task 1 ; line graph

5 - I think you need to enrich your vocabularies so you can use a lot of non-repetitive vocabularies in your...

Writing Feedbacknhomnhi - Dec 15, 2022 / chelseaanasts - Dec 17, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Computer Programmes for Teaching Purposes

2 - The total discussion approach to the given prompt is not based on the expected discussion format. For starters, the...

Writing Feedbackadriennguyen - Dec 17, 2022 / Holt - Dec 17, 2022
The primary means of travelling adopted - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 PIE CHARTS

2 - The summary overview is confusing when it comes to describing the provided images. The images do not compare data...

Writing Feedbackbinhminhtran24 - Dec 16, 2022 / Holt - Dec 17, 2022
Culcure - the arts should be replaced by science, technology or business - Ielts writing task 2

2 - The writer did an acceptable job in his restatement and opinion presentation. However, his discussion fell short of the...

Writing Feedbackthuyhang2004 - Dec 13, 2022 / Holt - Dec 14, 2022
[TASK 1] How many Vietnamese students studied in three different countries over a 15 years period

2 - Writing 201 words is stretching the writing time too close. With only 20 minutes to complete this task the...

Writing Feedbackmamoru22 - Dec 13, 2022 / Holt - Dec 14, 2022
Air contamination in urban areas - causes and solutions

2 - The writer has composed a non scorable restatement + writers opinion. Rather than paraphrasing the topic, the writer offered...

Writing FeedbackAmykute - Dec 12, 2022 / Holt - Dec 13, 2022
Is money a true indicator of the success of a business?

3 - From my understanding of the question, I think it's asking whether money is a true indicator of the success...

Writing Feedbacklinat1312 - Dec 8, 2022 / Pettypet - Dec 12, 2022
Pros and cons of writing language in informal way_IELTS part 2

3 - The first paragraph doesn't do much. Instead you announcing you are going to give the pros and cons, just...

Writing Feedbackhanablaaaa - Dec 4, 2022 / Annie97 - Dec 12, 2022
Fashion industry's impact on society

7 - First of all, you might need to explain first why buying a lot of cloths is a bad habit....

Writing Feedbackhehehehe345 - Dec 1, 2022 / Annie97 - Dec 12, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2: Digital technology enables anyone to produce films

3 - The two reasons of people being able to make films should be connected to why you consider this phenomenon...

Writing Feedbackxinhaylagiacmo - Dec 9, 2022 / Annie97 - Dec 12, 2022
IElTS Writing Task 2: Plastic shopping bags are used widely and caused many environmental problems.

6 - If you are to compare plastic bags to paper bags, you should illustrate this point in the very beginning....

Writing Feedbackminhhoangvn - Nov 16, 2022 / Annie97 - Dec 12, 2022
Many people argue that social media makes individuals do not have to directly communicate together

2 - While the grammar of the essay leans more on the incorrect sentence structure and word usage side, the writer...

Writing Feedbackdungqndt - Dec 8, 2022 / Holt - Dec 8, 2022
Explain the benefits or inconveniences of travel

5 - You should connect your sentences to be more coherent. The first step is focus on your main idea and...

Writing FeedbackBun cha - Nov 20, 2022 / dungqndt - Dec 8, 2022
Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case?

4 - Your conclusion is quite short, you should enlarge it to around 5 sentences while summarizing the requirement. By splitting...

Writing FeedbackKhaiHuuNguyen - Dec 2, 2022 / hanablaaaa - Dec 4, 2022
People with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments

3 - I liked the content of your essay however the prompt was about your opinion and you, I could not...

Writing Feedbackjenny0601 - Nov 28, 2022 / Meriem slimani - Dec 2, 2022
Should universities only accept top students? - Writing Task 2

2 - This phrase indicates that you already have an opinion that you will be sharing with the reader. Therefore,...

Writing Feedbacksuhihi - Dec 1, 2022 / Holt - Dec 2, 2022

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