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|Do you think that one aims of the Olympic Games is to improve relationships among countries.
2 - 207 words is far less than the 250 word minimum. The essay preliminary score will be reduced to a...
Writing Feedbackngan410 - Aug 15, 2021 / Holt - Aug 16, 2021
|Should government impose higher price on fuel for vehicles to curb environmental problems?
Writing FeedbackHpvpho - Aug 15, 2021 / Holt - Aug 16, 2021
|The optimal way to alleviate youth crimes is to instruct their parents with parental techniques
2 - To what extent is that? The word "extent" refers to a degree a certain thing is referred to. Using...
Writing Feedbackvgngocanh - Aug 15, 2021 / Holt - Aug 16, 2021
|IELTS Task 1 The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production
Writing Feedbackbhhazie - Aug 14, 2021 / ieywa - Aug 16, 2021
|Nowadays, both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care. This was not so in the past.
2 - The thesis statement is incomplete. It offers a reason but not a result. So that introduction is not as...
Writing Feedbacksoulmate_nj94 - Aug 14, 2021 / Holt - Aug 15, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of elderly citizens in three countries...
2 - The analytical presentations are to summarized in every paragraph, except for the summary overview and tending presentation paragraph. I...
Writing FeedbackT007 - Aug 14, 2021 / Holt - Aug 15, 2021
|WRITING TASK 1:The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK.
2 - The writer's analysis could be better presented. Right now, it does not fully utilize the percentage measurements in the...
Writing FeedbackVungZ - Aug 14, 2021 / Holt - Aug 15, 2021
|Parents wonder whether it is better to send their children to single-sex school than to mixed school
2 - The writer is responding to a different prompt question, perhaps of his own creation. The topic being referred to...
Writing FeedbackDuong Trach - Aug 14, 2021 / Holt - Aug 15, 2021
|Learning english at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. IELTSTask2
3 - Thanks, for the feedback, I realise the errors, and that they were quite obvious in the first place. I'll...
Writing Feedbackanbilli42 - Aug 13, 2021 / anbilli42 - Aug 14, 2021
|It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo...)
2 - This is only an extent essay. It is not a cause and effect discussion. Therefore, the first reasoning paragraph...
Writing Feedbackvqwanttolearn02 - Aug 13, 2021 / Holt - Aug 14, 2021
|Percentage of daily intake of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar consumed in meals and snacks
2 - The writer ensured that this essay will be awarded a failing score based on lack of word count at...
Writing FeedbackViNguyeenx - Aug 13, 2021 / Holt - Aug 14, 2021
|Enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period
2 - The summary overview goes at a confusing rate. Scoring is not only based on thought clarity, but sentence clarity...
Writing Feedbackhumunukuapuaa - Aug 13, 2021 / Holt - Aug 14, 2021
|The question of whether investors should focus more on railways rather than roadways
3 - Can anyone explain to me why this structure is wrong and what exactly I can adjust? Thank you for...
Writing Feedbackember112 - Aug 12, 2021 / ember112 - Aug 13, 2021
|Whether convenience food is increasing low-priced and more popular in a number of nations
NEW - In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more available. Do you think the advantages of this development...
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|Is it not possible nor useful to provide tertiary education for the majority of young people
2 - The writer offers a basic disagreement rather than the required emotional extent response As asked by the discussion prompt....
Writing FeedbackPham Thu Thuy - Aug 12, 2021 / Holt - Aug 13, 2021
|The line graph represents the amount of electricity generated in France by four forms of sources
2 - The measurement reference should have been mentioned in the summary overview. It was, afterall, mentioned specifically in the report...
Writing Feedbackxuantung123 - Aug 12, 2021 / Holt - Aug 13, 2021
|IETLS WRITING TASK 2: The importance of teachers and parents in the development of children
2 - The writer has misled the reader into thinking that only his opinion should be presented in the discussion. Both...
Writing Feedbackimno - Aug 12, 2021 / Holt - Aug 13, 2021
|How to play a game (roles for each player, materials needed, game rules, step-by-step instruction..)
NEW - how to start being professional in the badminton? If you are suffering with do not know how to...
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|Is the extinction of individual plant and animal species the main environmental problem today?
4 - You makes some mistakes with grammar like "human health deteriorate"-"deteriorates" or one species die out -dies out...
Writing Feedbacklexuanhoa123 - Aug 9, 2021 / bebe123 - Aug 12, 2021
|The diagrams illustrate how the village of Stokeford had changed over an 80-year period, from 1930
Writing FeedbackNhatminh2110 - Aug 3, 2021 / Kita le - Aug 12, 2021
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1: The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers
2 - The summary is incorrect. It does not refer to the correct topic, proper nationality reference for people from Mauritius,...
Writing FeedbackKiu1007 - Aug 3, 2021 / Holt - Aug 12, 2021
|The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015
2 - The writer is showing an unfamiliarity with writing rules by being disrespectful to the reader. Caps lock writing in...
Writing FeedbackKatherine2405 - Aug 11, 2021 / Holt - Aug 12, 2021
|Environmental Problems and solutions. In which ways humans are damaging the environment?
2 - Based on the original prompt, this discussion must be composed of 3 discussion and reasoning paragraphs. The individual paragraph...
Writing Feedbacknttd178 - Aug 11, 2021 / Holt - Aug 12, 2021
|THE EXPECTION FOR LENGTHS OF STAY NOW AND IN FIVE YEARS
2 - The essay does not meet the necessary analytical, reporting, and comparison discussion requirements. There should be at least 150...
Writing FeedbackOlivian - Aug 11, 2021 / Holt - Aug 12, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Gaining knowledge of history of house and building
2 - This is one of the most confusing essays ever to be posted at this forum. The obvious transliteration of...
Writing Feedbackimxuan - Aug 10, 2021 / Holt - Aug 11, 2021
|Employers should focus on personal qualities instead of qualifications and experience when hiring
2 - It is not the response of the writer is incorrect because, it is not. The writer understood the question...
Writing FeedbackBadieee - Aug 10, 2021 / Holt - Aug 11, 2021
|Task 2: outdoor activities benefit more than computer games
3 - leading to higher risk of... ->a higher risk/ higher risks exposure to screen may ->screen.. have...
Writing FeedbackCaroline23vk - Aug 8, 2021 / heyima - Aug 10, 2021
|Many consider that history subject cannot bring any practical use - Ielts 2
Writing Feedbackchaungan1714 - Aug 9, 2021 / heyima - Aug 10, 2021
|W task 1: The graph below shows average yearly rainfall in Moscow and San Francisco
2 - The writer has done a good job of comparing rainfall data and comparing the figures. The information is concise...
Writing FeedbackThnggg - Aug 7, 2021 / Holt - Aug 10, 2021
|Technology leads to the unavoidable shifting of the interactions between people - writing task 2
2 - The writer has taken a wrong and failing score discussion approach.The writer cannot use a "safe" answer by agreeing...
Writing FeedbackAnh Cao - Aug 9, 2021 / Holt - Aug 10, 2021
|Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others...
2 - The writers opinion in response to the question lacks a basis and therefore, has no merit for consideration. Without...
Writing Feedbackngominhkhoa - Aug 9, 2021 / Holt - Aug 10, 2021
|[writing task 1] The graph below shows the polulation of Chile by age group between 1975 and 2035.
2 - The writer will recieve a preliminary failing GRA score for the summary overview. It is confusing and represents a...
Writing Feedbackhlinh1555 - Aug 8, 2021 / Holt - Aug 9, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 2 Online meetings or offline meetings for teenagers?
2 - Social media interaction is a passive activity.The writer was in evor when referring to this as "encourage activeness of...
Writing Feedbackphamtran - Aug 8, 2021 / Holt - Aug 9, 2021
|The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel
2 - The writer needs to provide a more specific image identification to help fulfill the summary requirement. The type and...
Writing FeedbackElysnguyen - Aug 8, 2021 / Holt - Aug 9, 2021
|The bar chart shows the proportion of British people who give money to charity in five age groups
2 - The writer wrote the report based on active timeline presentation. This means the activities are ongoing. However, the image...
Writing Feedbacklynrd - Aug 8, 2021 / Holt - Aug 9, 2021
|IELTS TASK 2 - SHORTER WORKING HOURS
2 - The prompt paraphrase is incomplete. It must reference the original 35 hours work week consideration as originally mentioned in...
Writing Feedbackmingyingggg - Aug 8, 2021 / Holt - Aug 9, 2021
|Topic: outdoor activites and children
2 - The writer did a good job of offering a prompt restatement and question response. The reasoning is also based...
Writing Feedbacktrieutung - Aug 7, 2021 / Holt - Aug 8, 2021
|IELTS Writing task 2 | Topic: Culture and cultural identity | Words: 275
2 - The writer provided general discussion points in each paragraph. The assumption will now be that the writer did not...
Writing FeedbackThuc Vi - Aug 7, 2021 / Holt - Aug 8, 2021
|Thee days the communication between people has been revolutionised by technology
2 - The way relationships have been changed could have been more properly addressed by the writer had he avoided 2...
Writing Feedbackchipper269 - Aug 7, 2021 / Holt - Aug 8, 2021
|Writing task 2: students have the right to university education
2 - The prompt paraphrase was near perfect but, the question response was incorrect. The student altered the discussion concept and...
Writing FeedbackMinhminh777 - Aug 7, 2021 / Holt - Aug 8, 2021
|The proportion of male and female in an Asian country who got the driver license from 1980 to 2010
2 - The trending statement would have been more / completely informative if it had "included the measurement trend as well:...
Writing FeedbackChau Anh Hoang - Aug 7, 2021 / Holt - Aug 8, 2021
|[ IELTS ] The line graph illustrates the number of cars that were owned by households in Britain
Writing Feedbackskinnypeter - Aug 4, 2021 / skinnypeter - Aug 8, 2021
|Consumption of 6 different kinds of energy in USA
2 - Writing the summary report is not a marathon. A summary is defined as," a comprehensive and usually brief abstract,...
Writing FeedbackJunilina - Aug 6, 2021 / Holt - Aug 7, 2021
|Fewer and fewer young people are choosing to become teachers. How could this be changed?
4 - receive higher career prospect? Sounds like the verb "receive" not making any sense. You can use "improve" instead...
Writing FeedbackTom8X - Jul 30, 2021 / chipper269 - Aug 7, 2021
|WRITING TASK 2: LEISURE TIME; activities that improve the mind, or another - to rest the mind
3 - @aestheticluv i think your essay should focus more on the object mentioned in the topic question. In your essay,...
Writing Feedbackaestheticluv - Jul 26, 2021 / Nhatminh2110 - Aug 7, 2021
|The ratio of men and women teachers in six distinct levels of educational institutions in the UK
4 - @volevy02009 a problem that I could see from your essay is the repetition of words. For example, in the...
Writing Feedbackvolevy02009 - Jul 26, 2021 / Nhatminh2110 - Aug 7, 2021
|SHOULD ALL WILD ANIMAL BE PROTECTED OR ONLY SOME
4 - Your opinions are not enough explicit and legible in this essay. Maybe adding more ideas to the third paragraph...
Writing Feedbackjmewach - Jul 30, 2021 / chipper269 - Aug 7, 2021
|The given map illustrate the redevelopment process of the island and their facilities.
Writing FeedbackRocky_Learn - Aug 5, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years.
2 - The summary overview does not present a clear restatement. Since the writer did not upload the image , I...
Writing FeedbackFlareon - Aug 5, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|Over the past few decades, the world has been morphing into the era of globalisation
2 - In the restatement paragraph, the original words trade and communication were not replaced by the writer. Synonyms should have...
Writing FeedbackNguyenLinh - Aug 5, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|The graph details the proportion of Internet users in three different nations from 1999 to 2009
2 - In the summary overview, the writer mistakenly used a comma instead of a period whe presenting his trending sentence....
Writing Feedbackmainguyen2906 - Aug 5, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|Wheat Exports from 1985 to 1990 (in million tonnes)
Writing Feedbackjadon - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|Ielts Writing Task 2: Whether people should possess a home or rent one
2 - The essay will immediately start with a failing score. While the topic paraphrase is related to the original one,...
Writing FeedbackTurbo - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|The amount of money which was earned by three different products over three years, starting in 2000
2 - The writer neglected to give a complete rundown of the chart items in the summary presentation. There is also...
Writing FeedbackKita le - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 6, 2021
|Young people work or take long journeys between graduating from high school and entering tertiary
2 - Overwriting an essay is just as bad as underwriting one. When an essay is overwritten , in terms of...
Writing Feedbackgihuyho - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 5, 2021
|Choosing university or a job straight after school?
2 - The writer was not informed of the repercussions connected with writing an essay comprised of less than 250 words....
Writing Feedbackmaianh - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 5, 2021
|Media focus far too much on the personal lives and relationships of different celebrities
2 - The first reasoning paragraph should be leased on the topic provided. The writer should have used the current 2nd...
Writing Feedbackuyennhi2006 - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 5, 2021
|The percentage of people aged 65 and over in 3 distinctive nations during 100 years period - IELTS 1
2 - The summary overview should list all 3 countries to give clarity to the trending presentation. The reader will wonder...
Writing Feedbackthanhtra49 - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 5, 2021
|Do you agree that the problems (what forms do they take?) outweigh the benefits of mobile phones?
2 - The writer cannot offer selective responses in the restatement + opinion paragraph. Both questions must have representative response topics....
Writing Feedbackchipper269 - Aug 4, 2021 / Holt - Aug 5, 2021
|Electrical equipment changes in ownership and the amount of time expended on doing household chores
2 - The summary should indicate the end of the measurement period. The summary requires precise highlighted data for the benefit...
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