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|BAR & LINE GRAPH - three dimensions on the screens
3 - Gigih, I believe that there was a better way to write this essay which would have improved your overall...
Writing Feedbackgigihes - Feb 7, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
|As the proverb goes "Union is strength", we owe to co-operating for our existence.
5 - Hai adam. The main point of the question is about children. Yet, your idea in the first and...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Jan 30, 2017 / ainunazwaria - Feb 7, 2017
|Journey of learning English
6 - @Holt @ichanpants89 @thuy_nguyet I will make opinion about creative industrys role in the world. As modern generation We should...
Writing FeedbackKing_mif - Feb 7, 2017 / King_mif - Feb 7, 2017
|PTE: Over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco. The long term health costs are high - for smokers
8 - Thank you @Holt, without your comments I could not realize how bad my essay was. I will keep practice...
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 1, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 7, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 - the reason why do fewer and fewer people appreciate art and how to solve it
4 - @gayan1991 This is actually a wrong thing to do. You can see the rules of the forum. You...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 25, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 7, 2017
|IELTS Practice task 2 - History education and its importance
4 - As an additional feedback to improve your band score later on, you can write a more appropriate introduction paragraph....
Writing FeedbackJane N - Feb 3, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 7, 2017
|The crucial part of being happy lies in one's everyday attitude towards life.
5 - @Ssakshijain Thank you for reading my writing. As I am more familiar with verbal english, I have difficult with...
Writing Feedbackchikachika - Feb 5, 2017 / chikachika - Feb 6, 2017
|The percentage of Australians from six different household types struggling with poverty in 1999
4 - There are many ways that you can help others here at the forum even if you do not have...
Writing Feedbackyennhihoang2712 - Feb 6, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Pie Chart Task 1 IELTS Sample: typical house spendings in Japan and Malaysia
9 - Hi Baso, Despite those grammatical mistakes, I think you essay is not solid enough. The way you compare two...
Writing Feedbackbasohamdanianis - Jan 4, 2017 / MH_tw - Feb 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Punishment for Children and impact on their development
6 - Hi Janice. I think your essay is very clear and well paragraphed. Though you could use more vocabularies, your...
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 3, 2017 / MH_tw - Feb 6, 2017
|"You can learn about the character of a country from the way that treat animal" - Practice again
5 - @Holt Thanks for your advice. I will limit the first pronoun....
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Feb 5, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Feb 6, 2017
|Task 2 ielts People often wonder whether money brings happiness or not
8 - Hi To, I think your essay is really good, the arguments are supported by a series of evidences and...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 3, 2017 / Janicelo - Feb 6, 2017
|IELTS Task 1. Six pie charts about water usage worldwide
7 - hello. here my advice for your writing .. (: 1. as far as i concern, a good paragraph consists...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 1, 2017 / Pramudia27 - Feb 6, 2017
|The bar chart compares the projected and actual criminal incidents in 2009 and 2018.
4 - Hi Daniette, I am gonna try offering advice for improvement of your writing. I appreciate your effort to present...
Writing Feedbackforbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 6, 2017
|First college essay, 10 years since high school. Descriptive essay for basic English 101
4 - Yes, the presentation of the "Here we go." statement is exactly what I meant. The same goes for the...
Writing Feedbackjmack3d - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Gender equality has been achieved? Unlikely.
3 - Daniette, while your paraphrasing an opinion in the opening statement is commendable, it is a bit faulty because you...
Writing Feedbackforbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete
2 - You have good skill of paraphrasing. Your position in introduction is clear enough. However, you need to improve the...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna12 - Feb 5, 2017 / forbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017
|Wrtiting Task 1 IELTS The title of population in developed countries and developing countries
9 - Hai Dayat! You have already written about 155 words on your writing but the content of your essay...
Writing FeedbackDayat - Dec 30, 2016 / ainunazwaria - Feb 5, 2017
|Teaching foreign languages at primary school should be optional rather than compulsory. Ielts task 2
9 - @Holt Thanks again for your time and explainations which are very important for me :)...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 5, 2017 / adamrahimov - Feb 5, 2017
|Investing more on railways means investing in a safer future for us and our children
3 - Thanks for your advice @Holt...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 2, 2017 / mariana13 - Feb 3, 2017
|Percentage of different types of energy used and their greenhouse emission in Australian household
3 - Holt, thank you for your comments and I will put more effort on my structure....
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 2, 2017 / Janicelo - Feb 3, 2017
|The Line graphs of how much people in UK and US to spend on Petrol
8 - Diaz, good work on presenting more than the minimum number of words in your essay. That said, you should...
Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 3, 2017
|Parents often wonder whether they ought to let their children spend time on TV, video and PC games
13 - To, you finally responded to the essay properly. This is the very discussion format that you should use for...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017 / Holt - Feb 3, 2017
|Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000
5 - Ayu, why are you indicating the information in the essay based upon thousands of percent when he chart is...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|[IELTS task 2] Lack of Learning languages and children development in the modern society
5 - The main problem with your essay Ken, is that you did not really understand the prompt. If you can,...
Writing Feedbackkenthai - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|task 2 ielts - celebrity's privacy; should every rumour of the famous be published by media?
5 - To, try to not type the prompt into the box. That is usually how these mistakes occur. Whenever possible,...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Essay Writing. Methods to integrate modern ways of transportation.
2 - Ayman, I am assuming that you posted the wrong prompt instructions to go with the essay that you developed....
Writing Feedbackabohashim2003 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Family, television and friends are important factors in child's development. Task 2 ielts
5 - @Holt Thank you very much...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Jan 31, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Jan 31, 2017
|Some people think that reducing air travel is the best way to protect environment
5 - Chathuri, in an opinion essay that asks you to either agree or disagree to a particular degree, you must...
Writing Feedbackchathuri1982 - Jan 24, 2017 / Holt - Jan 31, 2017
|Minimum age limit for driving - Discussion
6 - very good, everyone has his own point of view and understanding of a topic, you shown yours, I may...
Writing Feedbackahamad17 - Jan 26, 2017 / mariana13 - Jan 31, 2017
|Around the world people are working more than ever. Is spending more time at work beneficial?
3 - Luong, you have written an extremely well researched essay. Normally, I would congratulate you on such a well written...
Writing Feedbackduongbaluong - Jan 31, 2017 / Holt - Jan 31, 2017
|Researching the Internet - I practice for my TOEFL writing
5 - @Holt Thanks so much. I really appreciate your professional advice and I will try the best to improving...
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Jan 30, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Jan 31, 2017
|Task 2 ielts - sports and exercise classes and academic subjects
4 - To, the essay needs to have a better presentation on your part. You have 2 possible topics for discussion...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Jan 30, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|There are three reasons which support my opinion that parents aren't the best teachers
6 - @Ochir let me try to help you in writing. You should give the real prompt so that...
Writing FeedbackOchir - Jan 18, 2017 / SYDA - Jan 27, 2017
|Internet make our communication easier, helps with getting information, business, and transaction
3 - Hi, let me try to help you in writing :) ~~~ you can use recent decades rather than...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017 / SYDA - Jan 27, 2017
|What would I do if I were a billionaire?
5 - Dears Your essay has some gramarical problems . For examle, let's find out what would I do and where...
Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Jan 8, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017
|The Earth needs both governments and individuals to cooperate for a positive change
2 - Hi Mai, thanks for posting the complete prompt and revised essay on your part. Having reviewed your work in...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen123 - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change
2 - Mai, since you are a newcomer to the forum, I guess you do not know that we require you...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|IELTS1 - the number of diarrhea cases in Mashhad over ten years, some time ago
4 - Ayu, it is my opinion that you could probably score at least a 5 with this essay. As I...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 25, 2017
|University should not specifically accept more girls or boys for whatever purpose
3 - Ho, you approached this essay from the wrong perspective. In fact, you seem to have decided to answer a...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 25, 2017
|Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements
4 - I agree with Holt. You seem to be missing the main issue here. If you agree that contemporary celebrities...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen - Jan 24, 2017 / Rashan - Jan 25, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: How Do U.S. Expenditures Compare With Those Of Other Countries?
4 - Hi @ellisana, in the second point, you should explain bit more about clothing percentage. In other hand, BritonJapan spend...
Writing Feedbackellisana - Jan 21, 2017 / ayuriska - Jan 25, 2017
|Writing an Essay on Personal Growth based on an activity
2 - Nina, it would be best if you just mention that your hobby is photography but your personal growth comes...
Writing Feedbackngutzeit3 - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 25, 2017
|IELTS: Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries
3 - hi @SuXrOb, I hope that you are not giving up to practice writing, the first problem that you should...
Writing FeedbackSuXrOb - Jan 24, 2017 / liv_ryu - Jan 24, 2017
|Free education - reasoning and consequences of implementing the policy
6 - On the contrary, your score will be better in the GRE depending upon how well you debate the issue...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jan 23, 2017 / Holt - Jan 24, 2017
|Flying all over the world. IELTS Task 2: Should air travel be restricted or NOT.
5 - Thanks for the feedback, I have taken notes. They are of great help....
Writing Feedbacksumanmahajan - Jan 22, 2017 / sumanmahajan - Jan 23, 2017
|GRE Issue Task: The idea to tell students which subject their should study
5 - just remember you need to fully understand the complexities of the issue and show, in you writing, that you...
Writing Feedbackshiv_riky - Jan 21, 2017 / Rashan - Jan 22, 2017
|'Our personality is the average of the five people with whom we spend most of our time'; GRE Task
4 - @Holt @notmargaux Thank you, for the advice. I understand I was not able to convey my message from...
Writing Feedbackshiv_riky - Jan 18, 2017 / shiv_riky - Jan 21, 2017
|Many different views about the leading role of university education
2 - Jessica, I wonder if you know that your essay is 5 words short of the 250 word minimum requirement...
Writing FeedbackJessica Huang - Jan 21, 2017 / Holt - Jan 21, 2017
|Writing 2: people think instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it
7 - @Arlen I think it would be better to pick a side in this essay and focus on that side...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Jan 13, 2017 / skazo - Jan 21, 2017
|Is fashion detrimental to society? People look into exterior beauty without notice of inner beauty
2 - Maritsa, I strongly suggest that you post the original prompt discussion that you are responding to along with your...
Writing Feedbackmaritsa - Jan 20, 2017 / Holt - Jan 20, 2017
|GRE Argument task for a hobby shop at Grilldon
7 - Thank you everyone for their feedback! I will improve before my exam date. Thanks!...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jan 18, 2017 / payal1982 - Jan 19, 2017
|Death Penalty should be given or not? The use of capital punishment
6 - @Holt Thank you for the detailed explanation....
Writing Feedbackdrjanck_82 - Jan 18, 2017 / drjanck_82 - Jan 19, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: A free university education should be applied in Vietnam. What is your opinion?
2 - Thanh, I do not believe that you can score higher than a 5 in the overall score for this...
Writing Feedbacktabiris - Jan 19, 2017 / Holt - Jan 19, 2017
|Several changes of silkworm in its life cycle and method to produce silk cloth
3 - Hi Ayu, listen, I feel like this summary report is not one of your best work. There is a...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 18, 2017 / Holt - Jan 19, 2017
|The graph presents information about comparison of spending on petrol between people in the UK & USA
4 - Grienda, for starters, always remember to include a copy of illustration that your report is based on when you...
Writing Feedbackgribigribi - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Jan 19, 2017
|The proportion of telephone calls in the UK
4 - Ayu, there are instances when you should use a comma and when you should a period in your sentence...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 19, 2017
|IELTS - Writing t2 - Mobile telephones have brought many benefits but they have also had negatives
3 - Phuong, do you see the reason that you gave in the conclusion of your essay? You should not have...
Writing Feedbackphuong1312 - Jan 18, 2017 / Holt - Jan 18, 2017
|Corporation has a responsibility towards society and environment apart from maximizing profits.
5 - Thanks for the information Payal. I hope you won't mind that I will be giving your work a score...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|The number of times that youngsters ate 3 kinds of junk food namely pizza, hamburgers, fish & chips
4 - @bellajane pizzas and burgers were the lowest consumption this sentence does not make good sense it should have...
Writing Feedbackbellajane - Jan 17, 2017 / drjanck - Jan 17, 2017
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