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|IETLS Writing Task 2 | Effects of negative reporting on individuals and society
3 - I think the explanations and opinions are not enough clearly. And also I think by reporting problems, governments can...
Writing Feedbackejohn - Feb 19, 2021 / hglingg - Feb 20, 2021
|Many claim that the important factor in sport is physical strength; however, the opponents disagree
2 - The essay instructions requires a 4 paragraph comparison discussion with your personal opinion presented. Your approach to the writing...
Writing FeedbackAurora27 - Feb 19, 2021 / Holt - Feb 20, 2021
|Writing 1: The line shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited Edinburgh attractions
2 - You have several spelling errors in the presentation that show a lack of proof reading for this paper. You...
Writing FeedbackVanVan Nguyen - Feb 19, 2021 / Holt - Feb 20, 2021
|In some countries, it is important to have a private house rather than renting one
Writing FeedbackNgocngo - Jan 25, 2021 / Ngocngo - Feb 19, 2021
|Ielts1 - The quantity of pineapple exports in three different countries and the cost of pineapple
2 - Avoid using long sentences in your presentations that require 2 different sets of information. In the first paragraph, you...
Writing Feedbackthang1305 - Feb 18, 2021 / Holt - Feb 19, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Student enrolment in 1980 and 2000
Writing FeedbackNgocLinhh - Jan 31, 2021 / NgocLinhh - Feb 18, 2021
|Essay about the effect of technology using from home
3 - In the conclusion, the phrase "All in all" is quite informal, so I suggest you use "In conclusion" or...
Writing Feedbackhglingg - Feb 17, 2021 / Pham Bien - Feb 18, 2021
|Students choosing subjects - writing introduction for some essay
2 - One topic per thread There are direct questions being asked in the topic. What is the reason? What...
Writing Feedbackchucnguyenthi - Feb 18, 2021 / Holt - Feb 18, 2021
|IELTS: world pineapple exports and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019
2 - Incorrect vocabulary was used in the summary overview. The word "Otherwise" cannot be used in this presentation because you...
Writing Feedbackantinhsg - Feb 17, 2021 / Holt - Feb 18, 2021
|The major environmental problem is the loss of specific species of plants and animals
NEW - Some people say that the main environmental problem off our time is the loss of particular species of plants...
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|The foundation for sportsmen's success. PHYSICAL STRENGTH AND MENTAL STRENGTH IN SPORT
Writing FeedbackPham Bien - Feb 16, 2021 / coolbaby - Feb 17, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the science and preparation of food should be taught in school time
4 - @nvsthao Hi! I think your body paragraph 1 is quite undeveloped as paragraph 2. Because it is a discussion...
Writing Feedbacknvsthao - Feb 17, 2021 / ilikesnow - Feb 17, 2021
|IELTS: Do you believe that professional athletes make good role model for young people?
Writing Feedbackpplhvnh1706 - Feb 9, 2021 / boboiboy1a3 - Feb 16, 2021
|The table gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries
Writing Feedbacklehalinh - Feb 1, 2021 / boboiboy1a3 - Feb 16, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Family size essay
2 - Unfortunately, scoring is part of our premium services so I cannot score your essay. Any student who scores your...
Writing Feedbackboboiboy1a3 - Feb 15, 2021 / Holt - Feb 16, 2021
|Should sharing knowledge about scientific research, business and the academic world be allowed?
2 - You have turned a 5 paragraph comparison essay into a 4 paragraph personal opinion essay. The format for your...
Writing Feedbackgiangkc1811 - Feb 15, 2021 / Holt - Feb 16, 2021
|IELTS ESSAY TASK 2, it is about how human action can damage the environment.
Writing Feedbackmalugesteira - Feb 12, 2021 / malugesteira - Feb 15, 2021
|[Writing task 1] - Household income and spending on food and clothes in UK
5 - As far as I am concerned , in the last sentence of the 3rd paragraph, "while" is used with","...
Writing Feedbackvungocf1417 - Feb 8, 2021 / lan82 - Feb 15, 2021
|Students Working Part-time - IELTS Writing Task 2
5 - I do recommend you to use transition words (therefore, furthermore, additionally) at the beginning of your paragraphs to be...
Writing FeedbackTpG2006 - Feb 10, 2021 / teddyz - Feb 15, 2021
|Jonas Salk, the Man Who Saved the World with Vaccines
2 - Well, this is an interesting personal influence essay. Unfortunately, without knowing if this is in response to a prompt,...
Writing FeedbackWiseCupcake - Feb 14, 2021 / Holt - Feb 15, 2021
|IELTS task 1, what nursing graduates did in the UK
Writing Feedbacklan82 - Feb 4, 2021 / lan82 - Feb 15, 2021
|IELTS- Task 2: Health benefits in countryside and cities
NEW - Please give me some advice on my writing essay. Thanks a lot! Topic: Many people believe that it...
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|IELTS Writing task - study the science of food - requirement of advice
4 - hi, the format of your essay is wrong as it contains only 4 paragraphs. Your opinion is not strong...
Writing Feedbackcoheny - Feb 10, 2021 / Priscillia - Feb 14, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TOPIC EDUCATION & - TYPE: DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.
4 - @ilikesnow Hi! I think you should paraphrase the question completely instead of paraphrasing only one of the statements. You...
Writing Feedbackilikesnow - Feb 11, 2021 / ranagiani - Feb 13, 2021
|IELTS writing task 2: Each year, a number of languages fade into extinction
4 - @LadyOfClockwork As adding one comment in terms of Holt's comment, I can see there is one possibility to correct....
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Feb 8, 2021 / coheny - Feb 13, 2021
|Some believe that computers are the most valuable invention in the late 20th and early 21st century
2 - You absolutely agree with the statement without giving a thesis statement to support your point of view. That makes...
Writing FeedbackCrazy Snake - Feb 10, 2021 / Holt - Feb 10, 2021
|ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS - rising sea levels and excessive use of plastic bags
2 - Oops! You did not only use memorized phrases in your presentation, you totally altered the discussion topic as well....
Writing Feedbacksongthaonguyen - Feb 9, 2021 / Holt - Feb 10, 2021
|IELTS writting part 1 bar chart practice: Female Unemployment rate in 4 countries of the UK
3 - @Linhmely Your overview: Overall, it could be clearly seen that there are some negligible differences between the statistics...
Writing FeedbackLinhmely - Feb 7, 2021 / Crazy Snake - Feb 10, 2021
|People's shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors.
4 - @LadyOfClockwork Your ideas are great, but there is a contradiction in the first body paragraph. The first and...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Feb 6, 2021 / Crazy Snake - Feb 10, 2021
|Forms of teaching - school should choose students according to their academic abilities
2 - This is a compare and contrast essay with a personal opinion presentation. You have not followed the required discussion...
Writing Feedbackstormiiii - Feb 9, 2021 / Holt - Feb 10, 2021
|The proportion of people who used the Internet in three countries between 1999 and 2009
3 - i think you should go for this structure with the introduction, the overview and the 2 detailed paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackkhadong - Feb 6, 2021 / Linhmely - Feb 9, 2021
|IELTS ESSAY TASK 2: Young people in the modern world seem to have more power
2 - The original presentation uses the word "seem", which means that the claim is questionable. Therefore, you should not be...
Writing Feedbackheyatafroz - Feb 8, 2021 / Holt - Feb 9, 2021
|The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011.
3 - Seams that the sctructure of the essay is correct, however it is difficult to estimate it without image. Instead...
Writing Feedbackhanngoctran1104 - Jan 25, 2021 / madrisheva - Feb 8, 2021
|Obesity is now a major global epidemic. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?
3 - Although you have included relevant examples from experience that are apt on a more individual level, you should look...
Writing Feedbackomonaija - Feb 2, 2021 / lennonmenace - Feb 8, 2021
|The proportion of people who had a habit of eating five portions of fruit and vegetables every day
3 - Hello, I am not sure that women consume more vegetables and fruit than men. What I learn from the...
Writing FeedbackThao Vy Tran Thi - Jan 30, 2021 / LadyOfClockwork - Feb 8, 2021
|Ielts Writing Task 2 about the designation of newly constructed building
2 - The first sentence in your presentation does not make sense. It is trying to be impressive in presentation by...
Writing FeedbackTongkhangte - Feb 7, 2021 / Holt - Feb 7, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TEST II, SEVERAL LANGUAGES DIE OUT
Writing FeedbackCrazy Snake - Feb 1, 2021 / Crazy Snake - Feb 6, 2021
|Participation in cultural activities in Scotland
2 - I cannot properly asses the validity and task appropriateness of your writing without the image to compare it to....
Writing Feedbackchinharu - Feb 4, 2021 / Holt - Feb 5, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Try hard enough to achieve something
2 - When dealing with TA score considerations, you will notice that the score given is higher when the student provides...
Writing FeedbackTrang84 - Feb 4, 2021 / Holt - Feb 5, 2021
|CBEST writing - individual efforts to improve environment and preserve the planet
3 - @Holt Thank you for the feedback! I actually got this prompt from CBEST test prep book (Cliff Notes), so...
Writing Feedbackyosaris_22 - Feb 4, 2021 / yosaris_22 - Feb 4, 2021
|WHAT ARE THE PROS AND CONS OF USING PUBLIC TRANSPORT?
2 - The complete original prompt for this essay has given you the discussion topics you have to use in the...
Writing Feedbackphamthanhdat - Feb 4, 2021 / Holt - Feb 4, 2021
|The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
2 - Due to security concerns, we refrain from accessing exterior images and advise fellow users not to access images that...
Writing Feedbackthuytram1937 - Feb 3, 2021 / Holt - Feb 4, 2021
|The graph below shows how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010
2 - In the summary overview, the sentence prior to your trending statement should have been the enumeration of the 6...
Writing Feedbackyenlinh20050911 - Feb 3, 2021 / Holt - Feb 4, 2021
|International sports pros and cons. Discuss both view and state your opinion
NEW - Hosting an international sports events Write about the following topic: Some people think that hosting an international sports...
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|Do you believe that e-learning can be the alternative to face-to-face learning?
NEW - Hi everyone. I'm a student from Vietnam and I'm looking for help. I need someone to fix this essay...
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|Animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans
4 - After a meeting with the forum administrators and careful consideration of your explanation, they decided to exempt this post...
Writing Feedbackjoshdiamond - Feb 2, 2021 / Holt - Feb 3, 2021
|HOSTING INTERNATIONAL SPORTS EVENT - IELTS WRITING TASK 2
2 - In the first paragraph, you were able to address the topic restatement covering the 2 points of view in...
Writing Feedbackhohhohok - Feb 2, 2021 / Holt - Feb 3, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - formal schooling or independent learning online at home?
Writing Feedbackmmai - Jan 31, 2021 / mmai - Feb 1, 2021
|Women are usually under-represented in STEM fields. Explain the reasons and give solutions.
2 - You cannot claim that gender discrimination has been a problem "throughout centuries" as the claim regarding gender discrimination is...
Writing FeedbackKhanh Nguyen - Jan 29, 2021 / Holt - Jan 30, 2021
|Task 1: The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six types of UK school
NEW - Answer in Text summarise the information from the chart The bar chart illustrates the proportion of men...
Writing Feedbackmhklinh - Jan 29, 2021 / — -
|The proportion of total residents in India, China, USA and Japan with prediction for 2050
Writing Feedbacknadiraapsari - Jan 28, 2021 / nadiraapsari - Jan 29, 2021
|Artificially intelligent robots at every workplace. IELTS writing part II. Give your opinion type.
2 - You have to frame the opinion you are presenting in the first person presentation format. The prompt clearly asks...
Writing FeedbackAnami - Jan 28, 2021 / Holt - Jan 29, 2021
|Should there be any limits of amount of years a teacher may teach the same subject or grade level?
4 - @Holt @HafizTaimoor Thank you for your feedback! It's my first time practicing this kind of essay and honestly I...
Writing Feedbackmarjoeyo_20 - Jan 27, 2021 / marjoeyo_20 - Jan 27, 2021
|Scared of driving - CBEST- Identify an obstacle you have faced in your life
2 - Okay. I noticed that towards the middle part of the essay, you lost your focus on the topic you...
Writing Feedbackmeetuapril2005 - Jan 27, 2021 / Holt - Jan 27, 2021
|STUDY FOOD SCIENCE, SHOULD OR NOT? DISCUSS.
2 - You have to be able to tell the difference between a debate, a discussion, an opinion, and a thought...
Writing Feedbackstudyingabroad - Jan 26, 2021 / Holt - Jan 27, 2021
|Writing Test : anti-society behaviors
2 - Since you did not specify which English test you have written this paper for, I will not be able...
Writing FeedbackMelodyAn - Jan 25, 2021 / Holt - Jan 25, 2021
|IELTS- Task 2: odinary work of art is now easily be labelled as masterpieces.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your detailed advice. It is true that I am self-studying. I used oxford...
Writing FeedbackPriscillia - Jan 23, 2021 / Priscillia - Jan 25, 2021
|Evaluate the public place and suggest how it could be more appealing
2 - You were asked to evaluate a public place. So the evaluation should not only describe the place but also,...
Writing Feedbackthevansociu - Jan 23, 2021 / Holt - Jan 24, 2021
|Benefits of Student Exchange - This is my ielts writing task 2
2 - The first sentence of your prompt restatement is not going to get you a good TA and GRA score....
Writing Feedbackeubyo - Jan 23, 2021 / Holt - Jan 24, 2021
|IELTS: People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution
4 - Your essay is really long (340 w), I think you do not need the 3rd ideas ( the "additionally"...
Writing Feedbackminhhg - Jan 20, 2021 / vicz001 - Jan 22, 2021
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