Question: Academic achievement at school or university is the only true measure of a person's intelligence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
intelligence and study
Answer:
The question of how to evaluate the smart ability of people remains a source of controversy. While I agree that academic results at school or university may be a manner to measure people's intelligence, I would argue that this manner is not the unique method, and there are various manners to assess the intelligent ability of people.
On the one hand, it is certain that learning result in school may be used to evaluate well people about intelligence. Subjects are designed to develop cognitive ability of students in the variety of aspects. For example, studying mathematics may help learners in logical thinking while learning literature may develop memorization and imagination capacity. Therefore, undergoing a long period learning, students may express all their clever ability. Besides, examinations could measure accurately the process learning of people. Hence, academic results might reflect the cognitive ability of people during the long time. As a result, these results should be considered as an apparent measure in evaluating people's intelligence.
On the other hand, a growing number of researches have showed that there are numerous forms of potential intelligence, which are not evaluated by academic results, and I only suggest two forms of intelligence which are leadership and physical body. Actually, a number of leaders have not good results in schools. For example, Jack Ma, CEO of Alibaba, who had three times failing entrance examinations of university, is still seen as an extremely clever leader thanks to the achievements in business. Another aspect is smart athletes. They play sports with thinking rather than physical strength, even in sports having strongly physical requirement such as football. Xavi Hernader, a football player, for instance, was seen as brain of Spain and FC Barcelona football teams. He is always considered as one of the most intelligent players in football although there is no guarantee that he has a good academic achievement.
Admittedly, the academic result may be considered as a necessary measure to assess intelligent ability of people. However, from my perspective, we need a comprehensive assessment on the results which they gain in their life.This is ambiguous writing... to me, you are lacking in nearly all boxes
1. Lexical Resource = repetition of words, you need better vocabulary and structure
2. Task Achievement = essay does not have a clear set of objective
3. Grammar = there are many issues, sentences are not structured properly
4. Coherence = well they are not connected properly, the topic is not developed enough.
So all in all, an average piece for me 65 out of 100 or 6.0 bands out of 9.0 bands.
