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Toefl :Advance in transportation and communication like the airplane and the phone


ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Aug 27, 2011   #1
"Advance in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reason for your choice."

Nowadays, everyone can see the effect of technology on their life, especially on the way of transportations and communications such as the airplane and the telephone. There are lots of other effects of growing technology on transportations and communications, which are mentioned as follows.

First and foremost, email can be count as one of the most beneficial results of modern technology. Many years ago, peoples had to pay a great deal of money to post their letters, and their payements were related to the weight of their letters or boxes, and many accidents may cause problem that the post could not be delivered. But nowadays, all people can take advantage of internet to have their own email free, and send their emails to everyone in no time, besides they can be sure if their emails have been delivered or not.

Another important aspect on technology is transferring money. Today, students can apply for foreign universities much easier than before. Not only with the help of sending email, but also using credit cards to pay all necessary fees online. Therefore, with the (advent) of internet and online paying systems, you can do many thing at your home easily.

Another technological innovations which help people around the world is related to medical equipments. Biomedical engineers could make a significant effect on increasing life expectancy the world. For example, one of their inventions was related to artificial heart valves which can be count as a turning point in heart surgeries. In the past time doctors used pig heart's valve to implant, but the patient could not be alive more than 3 years after the replacement. But now, biomedical engineers can make artificial heart valves which works well and doctors can implant them easily.

To sum up, technology has helped us to have more comfortable life. You can see its effects on transportation, communication, medicine and so forth.

apieceof 3 / 5  
Aug 27, 2011   #2
This is a really well-done essay except several small mistakes followed:

1. First and foremost, email can be counted as one of the most beneficial results of modern technology.
2. Many years ago, peoples(people ) had to pay a great deal of money to post their letters,...
3. and their payements were related to the weight of their letters or boxes, (and their payments were charged according to the weight of letters or boxs)...

4. , and many accidents may cause problem that the post could not be delivered.(Worsely, their posts may not be delivered if some unoredictable accidents or disasters occur.)

5. But nowadays, all people can take advantage of internet to have their own email free, and send their emails to everyone in no time, besides they can be sure if their emails have been delivered or not.(Nowadays, however, people can take advantage of the Internet that provides us the convenienct and free email system communicating with others in no time.)

6. Today, students can apply for foreign universities much easier than before. Not only with the help of sending email, but also using credit cards to pay all necessary fees online.(For instance, students can apply for foreign universities much easier than before because of helps of email and credit cards that allow appplicants to pay bills online.)

7. Biomedical engineers could make a significant effect on increasing life expectancy the world. (Biomedical equipments are able to prolong human life expectancy at present.)
8. In the past time doctors used pig heart's valve to implant, but the patient could not be alive more than 3 years after the replacement.(In the past time doctors used pig heart's valve for implant surgery, but the patient only had three years lifetime.)

If you have any comment or question about my post, please let me know in no time.
OP ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Aug 29, 2011   #3
Fang yu,
Thanks for your correction, I really appreciate it
Mahsa
abc1400 17 / 32  
Aug 30, 2011   #4
But nowadays,...
I think it is not good idea to start a sentence with 'But'


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