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What are the advantages and disadvantages of children having a school uniform?



khangpt2k6 1 / -  
Oct 9, 2022   #1

pros and cons of uniforms at schools



In the contemporary decades, there were controversies about the students' dress code when going to school. Meanwhile, several schools have rigidity in wearing uniforms, others have loose surveillance about it. In general, this regulation brings about both merits and demerits and this essay will discuss these aspects.

To begin with, it can be seen that there are numerous benefits of compliance with school outfits. Firstly, The specific dress code may diminish the wealth gap and promote general equality. Living in an epoch where social positions constantly intertwine, uniforms will standardize all in a certain framework. This can make rich pupils not follow expensive brand-name clothes, and simultaneously, students who are in impoverished circumstances don't feel self-deprecating. Secondly, school uniforms can create an identity and make it easier to recognize. Institutions can readily manage their pupils through their uniforms. For instance, if strangers go to the school with negative intentions, staff will easily recognize and prevent them, or in a chaotic crowd of competition, uniforms will become the signature for identifying certain participants coming from what institution. Besides that, school clothes not only can create formality in school but also avoid cases in that students wear inappropriate costumes: short skirts, tight tops, or bright-colored hairstyles.

On the contrary, adopting rigorous regulations results in students can't express their own styles. Following strict attire rules will make pupils not have the right to select their favorite outfits or show their aesthetic tastes. As a consequence, plenty of them will feel frustrated because of not being in freedom of choice. What is more, some uniforms can lead to inconvenience to the pupils since a number of school outfits are unsuitable for outdoor activities. A noteworthy example is the "ao dai" - a traditional costume of VietNam and also uniforms of every high school female - occasionally causes discomfort when moving, and at the same time, danger when driving.

In conclusion, regardless of the disadvantages of uniforms' obligations in some schools, I strongly believe that the pros of dress code surpass its cons.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15460  
Oct 10, 2022   #2
The prompt restatement of the student should have been clearer in reference to the original prompt. The given sentences do not really adhere to the given statement / idea, so the thesis statement that the examiner expected to read was not of a very good quality. It can only be weakly scored because it is basically empty of context. A better paraphrase would have been:

I can definitely see what advantages there are to wearing a school uniform such as (reason 1) and (connected reason 2). Then again I also consider uniform dreassing in schools as a disadvantage because (reason 1) and (connected reason 2). I would like to explain my opinion so that the public can make their own decision regarding this topic.

What did the above presentation create for the task accuracy score of the test taker?
1. It created 2 summarized discussion outline presentations.
2. The summarized reasons led to the creation of general discussion considerations for the reader as required by the presentation instructions.

Remember that this is a general statement essay. As such, the prompt does not ask the writer to make a decision for the reader but rather, inform the reader to allow them to come to their own decision. When the prompts provided are along these lines, the writer should present clear reasons and explanations, but allow the readers to come to their own conclusions since the writer is not directed to create a conclusion for the explanation paragraphs. That means the belief of the writer should not be factored into the discussion, most specially in the concluding statement. It should disseminate information, but not make decisions for the reader.

The writer took the correct approach to the discussion though. He kept it general and did not reflect a personal opinion in the paragraphs. Good work on keeping the explanations generalized in terms of opinion presentation. That is exactly the kind of writing this prompt requires. Remember, there are no right or wrong opinions for these types of prompts, only conclusions that the readers can arrive at for themselves based on the given writer considered discussion points.


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