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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leading a single life rather than get married ?


ltthien 1 / -  
Oct 30, 2021   #1

to be single or to be in a relationship?



These days ,there seems to be a tendency for a growing cirlce of young to lead a single life and get cold feet to tie a knot.From my perspective, living alone has both negative impacts and positive ones .This essay will consider these sides and draw some conclusions.

On the one hand, there are some edges attracting the young to lead a unrestricted life.Firstly,it authorizes them to do many things at liberty.For instance, this trend Not only does this trend provide our possibility to pursue career without being driven to distraction by nurturing children or material needs ,it also offers chance to have dating with more partners. On the top of that,such a life can avert domestic violence due to financial burden or lack of close-knit in a family. It is easy to imagine how that mode can improve the quality of life.

On the other hand,we almost express apprehension about how a sole life has negative effects on the young.In the short term,it is likely that we will see a rise in loneliness.For example, a scene that we can visualize is that they find themselves in a room without encouragement but with the stressful, bumming out and even being shaken up. A long-term fear is that it will be challenged if young people are about to be a single-partent.

In conclusions,while leading a single life in the young will no doubt about improving their quality of life in many ways, some drawbacks should not be ignored. Thus,the issues addressed in the essay should be given enough attention.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,000 3875  
Oct 31, 2021   #2
This essay will consider these sides and draw some conclusions.

You have failed the essay in terms of restatement considerations at this point. The prompt, as you have provided it to me, shows the discussion as only needing a comparison of an advantage and disadvantage. There is no requirement presented for the writer to draw conclusions about the 2 sides.

In conclusions,while leading a single life ... given enough attention.

The conclusion will be another reason for the essay's low score. This time, the same errors in the paraphrasing were made in the summary conclusion.

The comparison paragraphs are well developed and explained. These are supportive of the original discussion requirement. However, the esor in the restatements are what will score down the final mark.The student must make an effort to not alter the discussion rephrasing next time.


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