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The advantages of nuclear family - living with grandparents or without them



anhkhoa1819 1 / -  
Aug 19, 2016   #1
Now in society we know many kinds of families but each of kind have a lot of different advantages.the first,i live in small family and we have four members so i feel more pleasant than when i live with grandparents. I used to live my grandfather,he always prevents me from doing anything i like.he is also angry me about doing wrong important somthing.this make me uncomfortable.next,i think we spending much money on taking care of grandparents every week, every month, and every year . Therefore if we don't live grandparents,we will reduce account of money very big . Final, we can live being independent of our grandparents. That is the best choose if you think like me about advantages that i give

akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Aug 20, 2016   #2
Hi Anh Khoa
These are my corrections for your small story.


Now in society we know many kinds of ...
NOWADAYS, WE HAVE KNOWN THERE ARE MANY KINDS OF FAMILIES, BUT EACH OF THEM HAS A LARGE NUMBER OF DIFFERENT ADVANTAGES. .the first FIRST OF ALL,i I live in THE family, and we have (...) when I live with MY grandparents. WHILE I used to live (...) from doing anything i I like. He is also angry WITH me about doing wrong important somthing IF I DO A MISTAKE . This maDE me uncomfortable.next MOREOVER, I think we spending much money on taking care of grandparents every DAY week, every month, and every year .

FinalLY, we can live being independent ...


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