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As a result of huge development of the mass media, people can hear many advertisements on TV, on radio, on the internet and in the newspaper. Even they can see advert on the public transportation and on the street. This means that people can be easily exposed by advertisement in their daily life. It cannot deny that advert has huge impact on people's mind about products both negatively and positively.
Many people say that advertising makes them to purchase unnecessary things. When people own the advertised products, they have a confidence as the possessions of well known products make them to feel like they are successful and special person. Also, product advertising makes people to believe that advertised merchandise have good qualities and functions so it works really well on them. When people succumb to these advertisements, they have impulsive buying. For example, women often rely on skin products advertising and they think the goods will help them to have a beautiful skin by removing all troubles on skin such as winkles and blemishes. In addition, diet product advertisement often attracts female's attention. They might trust that taking advertised diet goods assist to reduce a lot of weight in a short time and then make them good looking. Thus everyone buy more and more, thinking the products are necessary after they watch advertisement. Moreover, if there are big discounts on expensive products in advertisement, people purchase unplanned goods as they just do not want to miss the chance to get the goods at cheap price. Although the adverts are false and exaggerated, it does not matter to them. People easily mislead by advertisement and then buy products on impulse, and they purchase products which they do not really need to have when they see the advertisement. Therefore, I agree with the statement that advertising influence people to buy unnecessary goods.
It is true that advertisement makes our life better in some ways. However, I think that the advertisement has more impact on making people to buy things that they do not need.
this is incomplete writing as you can see, i just wrote the negative points. thanks.
As a result of huge development of the mass media, people can hear many advertisements on TV, on radio, on the internet and in the newspaper. Even they can see advert on the public transportation and on the street. This means that people can be easily exposed by advertisement in their daily life. It cannot deny that advert has huge impact on people's mind about products both negatively and positively.
Many people say that advertising makes them to purchase unnecessary things. When people own the advertised products, they have a confidence as the possessions of well known products make them to feel like they are successful and special person. Also, product advertising makes people to believe that advertised merchandise have good qualities and functions so it works really well on them. When people succumb to these advertisements, they have impulsive buying. For example, women often rely on skin products advertising and they think the goods will help them to have a beautiful skin by removing all troubles on skin such as winkles and blemishes. In addition, diet product advertisement often attracts female's attention. They might trust that taking advertised diet goods assist to reduce a lot of weight in a short time and then make them good looking. Thus everyone buy more and more, thinking the products are necessary after they watch advertisement. Moreover, if there are big discounts on expensive products in advertisement, people purchase unplanned goods as they just do not want to miss the chance to get the goods at cheap price. Although the adverts are false and exaggerated, it does not matter to them. People easily mislead by advertisement and then buy products on impulse, and they purchase products which they do not really need to have when they see the advertisement. Therefore, I agree with the statement that advertising influence people to buy unnecessary goods.
It is true that advertisement makes our life better in some ways. However, I think that the advertisement has more impact on making people to buy things that they do not need.
this is incomplete writing as you can see, i just wrote the negative points. thanks.
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