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Essay: Agree or Disagree: There really are no better teachers than parents



MoonMoon 7 / 14  
Aug 27, 2012   #1
Hi everybody
All of your comments are welcomed and valued.
please have special attention on the content and give me some pieces of advice whether the organization of the essay is good or not?
i appreciate it in advance.

When faced with the statement of whether parents are the best teachers in one's life or not, quite a few would cast doubt on it, but others believe that, during one's lifetime, there are no other equally deserving precious guides like parents, and that is also my point. There are numerous reasons why I advocate this standpoint, and I would like to explore a few conspicuous ones here.

The main reason why I took a position in favor of the statement is that I believe no other teacher is as sympathetic as parents are. Definitely, no one can repudiate the motherly love and the fatherly compassion. Parents are willing to sacrifice their goals for the sake of their children's success. Who can tolerate a rebellious adolescent except his parents? This is due to the fact that they are concerned about the future of their children, more than any other teacher.

Secondly, according to the new researches, a child acquires more than half of his knowledge, under the age of six. This means, what a child learns at the period of childhood is more than what he learns during the rest of his life. Since at this age, a child mostly communicates with his parents, they play an extremely influential role in shaping the child's character. They influence on establishing a child's values and they are the ones who teach the social etiquette to the child. In addition, children are affected consciously and unconsciously by their parents. They may copy some of their parent's habits and styles of behavior.

In spite of the undeniable fact that people, who refuse to accept my point, may have some good reasons such as, in the modern life, parents have far less time to be involved with their children's issues, and not all parents are skillful enough to educate their children decently, but if all the discussed points are contemplated together, we may safely come to the conclusion that there are no better teachers than parents.

hxuanhung 1 / 5  
Aug 28, 2012   #2
Hi, I think your essay is very good. There is a sentence that I think you can rewrite it.

Secondly, according to the new researches, a child acquires more than half of his knowledge, under the age of six.

It is incomplete, isn't it? You did explain this in the next sentence though, I think you can add a few words like "half of his knowledge in his life" to make it clearer.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Aug 28, 2012   #3
Hi Monir,

Here's my help for you dear friend :)

When faced with the statement of whether parents are the best teachers in one's life or not, quite a few would cast doubt on it, but others believe that, during one's lifetime, there are no other equally deserving precious guides like parents, and that is also my point.

-------------- I find this sentence is a bit too long. Lengthy sentences disturb your ideas to flow in a logical manner and makes the reader exhausted on trying to memorize things. So try to avoid writing very lengthy statements. Also both these sentences mean the same. i.e. the parents are the best teachers. You say "but others believe that " and the reader gets confused when you say " there are no other equally deserving precious guides like parents". This error may have occured since you wrote a very long sentence. So break your sentences at proper intervals so that you would not be distracted.

When faced with the statement of asked whether parents are the best teachers in one's life or not, quite a few would not cast doubt on it. (make a full stop here ) butHowever, others believe that (no comma here ) during one's lifetime, there are no other equally deserving preciousbetter guides like parents, and that is also my pointwhat I believe too.

You are good at writing. You display a good knowledge on vocabulary too. :)


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