Based on Pollster Charta Politika as surveyor reveals that the highest proportion candidate of governor in Jakarta is occupied by Agus Harimurti. This is followed by Ahok, while Anis Baswedan takes in the last position. The specification survey is 29.5 % for the highest one, whereas Ahok at approximately 28.9 percent. Then, 26.7% is owned by Anis. According to the Yunarto as executive director of this survey institute said that it will occur the second round election since the candidate does not reach more than a half plus one vote.
Hi Riandi, let me give some feedbacks to you.
Well, actually it is good essay but I think you have a lack of sentence introduction in the beginning paragraph.
Battle in Jakarta election plays an enermous role in Indonesia. The reason is perfectly plain that each candidate has their characteristic to win the voters.
I have re-write your summary, I put some correction there.
... that the highest proportion of governor in Jakarta was occupied by Agus Harimurti, at 29,5 %. This was followed by Ahok, at approximately 28.9 percent. Then, Anis Baswedan took the last position, solely at 26.7%. According to the Yunarto (...) said that
, it would occur (...) since the candidate did not reach more than ...
I think it will be better if you use past tense since you describe about survey that have been done.
Hope it helps you :)