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IELTS Task 1: The air circulation system in the 2-floor house


aflah15 32 / 18 4  
Jan 26, 2016   #1
The figure illustrates the air circulation system which causes the heat loss and energy wasted in the 2-floor house. Overall, air enters the house through every slot in the basement and first floor, while the rested lamp and air which leaks out of the house in the attic release the energy as wasted energy.

According to the picture, some features such as a dryer vent near a washing machine and windows in the lowest floor allow the air to enter the house. Similarly, there are an electrical outlet, a big window and a door in the middle room, also a window and fan vent in the kitchen which provide a space for air to leak into the first floor. It produces the large amount of air in the house which causes the big amount of heat loss.

The opposite process occurs in the rooftop. The air flows out of the house through cracks such as a bathroom fan vent, a plumbing stack vent and an attic hatch. Also, the lamps in the kitchen and attic generate rested light. It affects the energy consumption since it releases the energy, like residual heat from the lamp's light.




Riiskacha03 31 / 34 5  
Jan 27, 2016   #2
through every slot in the basement and first floor,

simply use main floor, since we do not have any second floor there.

which causes the big amount of heat loss.

I prefer to use 'huge' than big, since big is less academic.

the lamps in the kitchen and attic generate rested light.

what is that 'rested' means?
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 27, 2016   #3
This is not a bad example of how to write the report on the diagram. You were able to deliver a different take on the understanding of the illustration. The way you presented the facts are far different from the other essays that have been presented here. Yours has good mistakes, in the sense that you only need to worry about building your vocabulary in order to avoid your tendency towards redundancies.


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