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American continent accounted for the largest proportion of coca-cola sales in 2000



jobymonpj 8 / 17  
Jul 17, 2012   #1
The pie chart shows the percentage of coca-cola's global scale in 2000,while the line graph illustrates the changes in its share prices between 1996 and 2001.

It is clear that American continent accounted for the largest proportion of coco-cola sales in 2000 and that overall,the share price for it increased considerably over the given period.

In 2000,around 30% of total coca-cola sale was in North America,along with more than a quarter in Latin America and together they comprised over half of the the total sales.Europe contributed more than 20% to the total sales ,whereas the sales in Africa and Middle East was significantly lower ,at 7 %.The figure for Asia was relatively better than that ,at 16.4%.

In 1996,the share price for coca-cola stood about 35$,which doubled in the next year.It is interesting to note that the coca-cola share price peaked in 1998,with around 80$,though it slumped below 50$ in 2000.By 2001,the price again rose to above 60$.

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bingle2012 7 / 11  
Jul 17, 2012   #2
a well written report, in my opinion, with only a few minor problems.

the percentage of coca-cola's global scale in 2000,

I think you'd better also say where: the percentages of coca-cola's global scale in different parts of the world in 2000

American continent

the American continent

30% of total coca-cola sale

30% of coca-cola's sales

The figure for Asia was relatively better than that ,at 16.4%.

bigger may be more appropriate than better here

you failed to predict the total sale which is 7.1bn

the share price for coca-cola stood about 35$

stood at about

with around 80$,though it slumped below 50$ in 2000

at around 80$, though it slumped to below 50$


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