The amount of 4 different types of food that were consumed in a European nation in 25 years

food consumption in europe

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make relevant comparisons.

The provided line graph illustrates the amount of 4 different types of food that were consumed in a European nation in 25 years from 1979 to 2005.

In general, fish was stably used at the lowest level during this 25-year period. Besides, there was a significant decrease in the consumption of beef and lamb, whereas that of chicken showed the contrasting state.

In 1979, it can easily be seen that fish was the least commonly eaten food, which was consumed at about only 60 grams per person weekly. Contrastingly, the most preferred meat in this year was beef, which accounted for the amount of 220 grams that was nearly four times higher of fish consumption. The figures for chicken and lamb were lower that of beef, at about 140 grams and 150 grams respectively.

During 25 years, the country witnessed a fluctuating decrease of beef and lamb, which resulted in the considerable drop in the statistics of these food's consumption. The beef was consumed about 100 grams per person while the figure for lamb was 50 grams in 2004. In contrast, the amount of chicken consumed continuously increased to 250 grams and became the most eaten food compared to the others. Although fish showed its slight decrease from over 50 to under 50 grams in 25 years, this was still the most stably consumed food in the nation.

Word count: 228

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Tran, this is a very comprehensive analytical report based on the graph you were given. However, at 228 words, you have written too much. Please remember that editing could spell the difference between you limiting your mistakes so that you can pass the test or not being able to edit the work and submitting it with errors in writing that can make you fail the test. Try to limit your writing to only 200 words at the most. 175 would be the ideal number of words.

The main problem I see with your writing is that you are over-explaining the graph rather than just indicating the data that was indicated in the graph. When you explain too much about the graph, you gain more words, but lose more time during the writing process. Don't be too wordy because the LR section is only one part of the 4 scoring sections for this essay. Do not focus on only one aspect of improvement.

Based upon your writing, I am confident that you will be able to explain the graph very well with less words. Try to leave at least 5 minutes towards the end of your writing to leave room for revision and editing. If you can do that, I am sure that you will gain a very impressive final score for any task 1 essay that you write.

Thank you so much for your useful advice. Actually, this essay took me 30 mins to finish, so I realize that I have problems with time management. I will improve this soon.