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IELTS ESSAY; animal species become extinct because of natural processes



devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 12, 2013   #1
IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
Question:

Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural processes. So, it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
We know the proverb, "Nature is the art of God", natural disaster like earthquake, tsunami, flood, tornadoes, volcanic eruptions, droughts, hailstorms, heat waves, avalanches, blizzards, cyclonic storms, wildfires etc., are volatile cannot prevent from the world. In this essay, I completely agree that we cannot forbid animal species destruction from the globe due to natural disaster.

Nowadays, development in technology advancement, scientist can predict earth quake occur in particular area or forecast bad weather for future months. Scientist deployed tsunami alert system connected from sea to satellite through which they can monitor and alert tsunami occurrence in all over the earth. This can help enormously only to the human kind not for wild animals living in the forest.

Although, zoo and zoological parks across the world, protects different variety of rare animals. It breeds to prohibit its extinction. Currently, occurrence of global warming, sea water level rising deeply and submerge most of the land area all over the world. It will result in great disaster to living beings in the earth. Scientist are started their research on living condition in moon or on other planets in order to live to protect from natural calamity. Due to cannibalism, scarce species are obliterating around the continent.

In nutshell, like the proverb "Time and tide wait for none", natural disaster can appear anytime in any place and we cannot proscribe or anticipate because it is by innate process. Beyond human intelligence natural disaster is something unpredictable, all living being cannot escape from it.

colin 23 / 47  
Jan 12, 2013   #2
It is said that examinee would be better not to use the proverb in the test.

We know the proverb, "Nature is the art of God ", natural disaster like earthquake, tsunami, flood, tornadoes, volcanic eruptions, droughts, hailstorms, heat waves, avalanches, blizzards, cyclonic storms, wildfires etc. , are volatile cannot prevent from the world.

==>>There are many disasters in the earth such as tsunami, flood and volcanic eruptions.

While I would be impressed by your vocabulary if you can write all of them in the exam, it seems that you tend to use more of the examples than necessary.
OP devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 12, 2013   #3
Hi colling,
Thanks for your valuable feedback.
i didn't get more points so i filled more vocabulary to fit 250 words. Any tips to get more points or idea in this topic.

Regards,
Devaraj
salmav 8 / 27  
Jan 12, 2013   #4
you should use " so on" or "so forth" instead of "etc". Try to prevent it in ielts
I pretty like your essay :)
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 12, 2013   #5
hai...

Dev..

Try to Avoid writing so many examples in one sentance...):

Tessy


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