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Australia Bureau of Meteorology - the ielts exam task



Thienan2409 1 / -  
May 27, 2021   #1

Writing task 1 - information on the Weather for reliable forecast



The diagram below shows how the Australia Bureau of Meteorology collects up to the minute information on the Weather in order to produce reliable forecast.

It is widely known that the Australia Bureau of Meteorology plays a vital role in provide precisely and trustworthy information about the weather so how does it work?

Firstly it gather incoming information from all around the globe through satellite, radar and drifting bouy, which each of them will provide data for the bureau to analyze.For instances, the satellite will send photo which help to predict the weather phenomenon like storm, raining or snowing weather. The radar will give radar screens which will helps detecting any below the earth surface activity and finally the drifting bouy will provide synoptic chart about the ocean flow.

Secondly, all the information gathered will be analyzing to prepare for the forecasting in form of chart, diagram, visual implementation in order to make the forecast more accessible to the average dwell.

Lastly, the Australia Bureau of Meteorology will sent data about the weather to broadcast networks such as TV newsreader, radio stations and even recorded announcement to help people know about the upcoming weather.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
May 27, 2021   #2
The diagram below

What sort of diagram? Your identification is incomplete. It does not help the reader create a mental picture of the data you are presenting.

up to the minute information

What sort of information ? Summarize it. Where is it collated? By whom?

It is widely known ...how does it work?

This is not part of the task 1 data from the image. This sentence style can only be used in a task 2 essay presentation. The task 1 essay is focused solely on data reporting based on the image provided.

instances

Singular V. plural problem. The succeeding presentation is based on a singular example so refer to "instance" instead.

Secondly

This should be included in the preceding paragraph since it is still related information. A concise report sticks related information together in the paragraphusing proper sentence formations.

* Limited review due to lack of image.


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