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The average family expenses in Malaysia and Japan


consumption figures in different sectors



The pie chart compares the proportion of domestic spending of both Japan and Malaysia on five household sector's in 2010. Overall, it can be seen that health care sector was the smallest expense in both countries.

Looking at the figure, the most household expenditure was in the good and services sector, representing almost over less than a third and housing was the third popular expenditure in Japan, while in Malaysia the biggest expenses was in the housing sector at 34%. Turning to Japan, nearly a quarter of food sector was the second largest household spending meanwhile good and services was the second largest in Malaysia. Interestingly, both of two countries occupied the second position of spending on food category during the period

On the other hand, less proportion was seen in remaining sector. Percentages of health care and transport sector was the smallest household spending in both countries, but a domination with more than double was seen in Japan.




@septaafrian0554
Hello, Septa,
It was such a great essay by the way, however, you need to tweak more of your essay to make it better
First, on five household sector's, you should change it with..on five household sectors ..
Secondly, looking at your body, "...was in the good and services sector. ", I think it wasn't suitable with your chart, its better if you write "...was in other goods and services sector ". Furthermore, in second line you have to more structure in order to explain the figures, after explain the most household you should directly to compare the Japan's most dominant.

Lastly, the second body, don't use "On the other hand ", it wasn't appropriate, use connectors like "Turning to another figures ..".

Cheers,


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