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IELTS TASK 1 Average GDP in globalizers & non-globalizers (GRAPH)



mhss 18 / 53  
Mar 4, 2013   #1
Please help me with the ielts academic task 1

The graph shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Use 150 words.

Black- wealthy countries
Pink- globalizers
Brown- non-globalizers

Answer:
The bar graph provides information about how globalization has affected the annual GDP growth of the 3 categories of countries over a period of 30 years from 1990. It is clearly shown that globalization has made a remarkable improvement economy in countries with a global approach.

In a more detailed analysis, in 1990 the height GDP growth was recorded from wealthy countries standing at 4.7% compared to globalisers and non-globalisers who were well below, exhibiting 1.4% and 2.4% respectively.

During the next decade, impact of globalization was apparent showing doubling of figures in globalisers as opposed to non-globalisers where the rise was just 1%. However, annual GDP growth of wealthy countries elicited a drastic decline and continued to drop in next two decades remaining at 2% by 1990.

However, in 1980, the progress in globalised countries was insignificant as 1% but it boomed in 1990 reaching the 5% margin to a level which no country has ever reached during for the past 30 years. The drop in annual GDP growth of non-globalisers was erratic from 1970 to1980 after which it recovered to 1.5% by 1990.

In conclusion, global approach has made a significant impact on the GDP growth of thirds world countries and the final out come was not determined by the original wealth.

halhante 2 / 2  
Mar 4, 2013   #2
Very relevant, and from what I can see, you have done a fine job, but just one thing:you have used the word "however" twice in a row in a short piece of writing, and thats no what I'd call something good, so try switching that to maybe a "conversely"?
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 4, 2013   #3
Why don't you upload your graph? It's easy for others to comment if they can view it.

The bar graph provides information about how globalization has affected the annual GDP growth of the 3 categories of countries over a period of 30 years from 1990. It is clearly shown that globalization has made a remarkable improvement economy in countries with a global approach.

.... Sounds great :)

in 1990 the height GDP growth was recorded from wealthy countries standing at 4.7%

..., in 1990 the wealthy countries have recorded a GDP growth of 4.7%.
I can feel that you have done a remarkable job, though the graphs are not available for any verifications :P
Good Job and Good Luck!
OP mhss 18 / 53  
Mar 4, 2013   #4
Hi Dumi,
Graph did not appear due to a technical problem.
Your comment are always inspiring me to write more essays.
Thanks.

mhss.


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