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[IELTS-TASK1]Bar Chart of the UK Economy Structure



vivien_wang 9 / 29  
Apr 13, 2010   #1
Dear friends, please help me with this chart interpretation. Thank you very much.

This graph below shows the contribution of three sectors -- agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services -- to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The link here may lead you to the graph: teachingmaterial.blog.sohu.com/148333615.html

The bar chart describes changes in the percentage of three different sectors contributing to British economy in the last century: agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services.

According to the graph, the UK economic structure experienced a big shuffle during this period. Specifically, agriculture, although contributing to the largest proportion of British economy in the first half-century, saw a small increase from just below 50% in 1900 to about 52% in 1950, followed by a dramatic decrease in the following five decades. By the end of the twentieth century, this figure had dropped to only about two percent.

A similar downward trend can also be seen in the importance of manufacturing. The percentage occupying the UK economy descended steadily from around 45% in 1900 to approximately 17% in 2000.

On the contrary, the role played by business and financial services in the UK became increasingly important over the whole century. The increase remained at a staggering rate, which thrived from no more than three percent in the beginning of the century and ended at almost 35 percent in 2000.

To sum up, it is obvious that the contribution of business and financial services to the UK economy has far overweighed those of its counterparts.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Apr 16, 2010   #2
The bar chart describes changes in ---- I would write, "The bar chart depicts..." or the bar chart shows...
If you say describe, it sounds like a verbal explanation, but a chart is a visual representation.

The bar chart describes shows changes in the percentage of the British economy, over the course of a century, associated with each of three different sectors contributing to British economy in the last century : agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services.

On the contrary, the roles played by business and financial services in ...

:-)
OP vivien_wang 9 / 29  
Apr 21, 2010   #3
Thank you for your help, Kevin:)


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