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The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries



tangthuyduong304 1 / -  
Jul 31, 2024   #1
The chart provides the information of employment in a number of tourism-related industries over a ten- year period. Overall, the total level of employment witness a upward tren during the period. In additon, there was a variation among individual sectors. While the figures food industry saw a significant increased, hotel and other accomodation declined its workforce over the decade.
In 2009, hotel industry drew attention to massive labour, which become the most prevelant sector of total. The second position was held by sports with 284,700 employees and followed closely by the figure of food industry. Less employments could be seen in travel and culture, recorded under 100 thousands individuals, rating at 60,900 and 82,800 respectively.
Travel represented the biggest area of expansion, having almost doubled its number of employees by 2019. food industry also saw a significant increase, from 283,000 employees in 2009 to 357,000 in 2019, while the sports industry enjoyed an almost equal level of growth. The least successful sector was culture, including museums and art galleries, where the figures actually fell slightly over the period.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Aug 1, 2024   #2
The chart provides

What sort of chart was provided? The chart type is important because it will help the reader envision the image that the information you will be providing came from. There are several charts to choose from so identify the correct one to help you avoid receiving TA penalties based on incomplete summary overview references.

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Be careful with your spelling. You will receive LR score reductions for every word that you misspell. In this case, you wanted to spell the word "trend" not "tren" which is the Spanish word for "train".

You need to be careful with your writing. Remember that every first word of a new sentence must be capitalized. That is the English writing rule. You clearly showed that you did not proof read your paper. You failed to spellcheck your work twice in this presentation, lowering your LR and GRA score both times.


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