leisure time by age
In the following chart, the statistics of using leisure time between different ages of people are illustrated and we can see younger are more fascinated to work with computers and middle-aged people are more fascinated with doing sports activities. In opposite, people of older ages are more interested in passive activities like reading books. In this essay, I will explain more about the chart and will give some summarized information.
To begin with, It's quite obvious the amount of spent time reading books among 13-19-year-old people is significantly low at 5 minutes at weekends. but, 75 minutes at weekends allocated in computer usages for leisure purposes which are over than average usage between the other groups. Furthermore, it is good to be known 20-65-year-old people have special attention to health and well-being and 120 minutes of a weekend spent for doing exercise and going for sports which is dramatically high in comparison with other groups. And finally, time spent for reading in the 66 and more year-old group is two times higher than 20-65-year people at 1 hour time a weekend, however, it is quite a passive activity and it is shown that sports activities times are fewer in comparison with the other groups at 20 minutes a weekend.
In conclusion, it's quite shown, youngers put more time in passive pastimes like computers and middle-aged prefer to put their times having exercise and older are more interested to study which count as a passive activity.
> bar graph's link :
drive.google.com/file/d/1cBdK0sVPLzMJrqaLG3CuK43_kWeDTt8f/view?usp=sharing
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