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BARRON'S TOEFL "Advances in transportation and communication"



Nohna 3 / 7  
Jun 8, 2010   #1
Advances in transportation and communication like te airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

In my meditation, away from daily life's hustle, I started thinking impressibly about the improvement has been acquired to human beings society all over the globe and that led me to realize that the internet is one of the most effective innovations with positive impacts on our life.

To have a look at some of these good impacts, I would start with learning as an example. The internet has provided a lot of facilities for educational circumstances, For example, an instructor can start teaching the class from somewhere else which in he(or she) is by using the internet. As well as, there have been quickly effective communications between the teachers and the classmates about homework and projects through emails and groups like forums. Moreover, Distance learning through the internet has created a big chance to learn while staying home or at work. In addition, googling through the internet is the most helpful way for the researchers to find what they are looking for or to publish their accomplishments. Moving to marketing, using the internet in advertising has decreased the cost, as well as, it has increased the numbers of audiences. At the domain of management, the internet has an effective role in saving time and efforts of paper work while it is still documented. Furthermore, there have been good opportunities of jobs for professionals like webpage designers, for example. In social life, people have communicated and interacted in visible and audible way around the globe which expands the knowledge about the cultures worldwide.

Although it has been a double edges sword like most innovations, After all, people can find their demands like jobs, relationships, education, entertainment and so on in the internet. In my view, the internet has been the seed of globalization.

I appreciate corrections and comments.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jun 10, 2010   #2
You need a comma here:
acquired to human beings society all over the globe, and that...

Capitalize Internet.

As well as, (you can't start a sentence with as well as) Additionally, there have been quickly effective communications between ...

In social life, people have communicated and interacted in visible and audible ways around the globe, which expands the knowledge about the cultures worldwide.

Although it has been a double-edged sword like most innovations, after all, people can find their demands like jobs, relationships, education, entertainment and ...

The last sentence is th best!


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