We have to bend children in the starting stage otherwise we can not stop them after growing

In many countries schools are having many problems with the student behavior

My point of view students are very fast as compare to the olden days .In this days children's are thinking too smart than elders .Development of society can make the changes in the children's .majorly the co education schools are having more problem with the student behavior .

In the foreign countries there are many rules for children's there is no chance to punish to their parents they are growing with their own decisions so that they are go way to parents rules .most of that movies are changing their mentality with the new thoughts.earlier days technology improve in the society that would be effect on the students means internet is more useful in some case that is may effect to the students. they spoil their life easily by the conditions.

parents giving more freedom to children's .the children's are misuse their choice in front of parents.In some countries provided the child law any one hurt children's they have to punish with the judgement so that the teachers also feel some fear punish the students.

finally i am saying that we have to bend children's in the starting stage otherwise we can not stop them after growing .Love gives more happy on children's but if it is exceed gives poison .so we should maintain both levels balance.

Child : Singular
Children : Plural

Children's ? :(

Firstly, you should write the prompt of this essay!: agree or disagree? Own opinion?
Secondly, Your introduction is quite disorganized! Plus, you haven't given your own opinion!
Thirdly, try to use more linking words, because they help to make your essay more official!

I am the basically from telugu background so i have little tough in english .please help me for my ielts exam.that is the destination of my life.thank you

Bhanusri, first, u have to focus on sentence structure, I think that ur most of the sentences are not correct and pay attention to the spellings. Try to read good essays.don't worry , , Nothing is impossible in our life

When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read.

Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.

Allocate your time and effort in approximately 4 to 5 hours every day to read as many authentic English texts/ samples of IELTS writings from this site (EF) as you can to improve your writing skills. Reading texts not only gives you some new ideas about different topics, but it also improves your vocab and grammar

Also, make sure you meet the minimum requirement of your word count.