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Essay about the benefit of internet



Putrisalju2200 1 / -  
Sep 8, 2017   #1
Hallo, I wold like to shere my practice of writing essay to you, i hope you guys can help me to corect my mistake in comment section down bellow.

The benefit of internet


Internet was the example of the modern texnology taht maded by human. Internet was very helpfull for every sector in the world. In this era, Internet become a vital accomodation to everyone because almost every single work and actifities that we made need internet. Therefore, let's take a a look of the adventiges of the internet.

Firsly, internet can help us to communicate to each other no matter wherever you are or whenevr you are, you always can conunicate to your family or friends every singgle time. Moreover, we can easily to interaction with our family just by sending massage or by email to shering our experience and telling about our condition or etc.

Second, internet giving accommodation to increase and expand our knowledges to help us in social life. Information was provided on internet everyday so very easy to having a new information or news that happening not only in our country but olso in another country.

Thridly, in modern era, everything is possible to do such marketing and treading. In the past, we need to come to the traditional market to sell our product or beverage, but in modern era such now, we could selling product at home without going to anywhere. You need just post you product into internet service like instagram or tweeter or maybe aplocation such buybuyonline or anything that internet vasilitated to you.

In comclution, every singgle action that we made probably can not be detached from internet because internet helping in every sector in our life. Anyway, we have to thankfull everyone that finding internet.

Taeyangie 1 / 2  
Sep 8, 2017   #2
@Putrisalju2200
I think you need to go through your spelling and grammar again, there are lots of mistakes. But other than that you have a generally good idea of what you're writing about.
Ngan Nguyen 1 / 1  
Sep 8, 2017   #3
... texnology taht maded technology that made
...helpful for in every sector ...
... an vital accomodation essential tool to everyone because almost every single work most of jobs and actifities activities that we made need involve in ...

...adventiges advantages ...

FirslyFirstly,
... wherever you are or whenevr where or when you are, you always can always conunicate tokeep in touch with your family or friends every singgleat any time. Moreoverfor example, we can easily to interaction talk with ...

... sending massagemessage or by email to sheringshare our experience and telling about our conditions, or etc.

Second, BY using the Internet, we could Internet giving accommodation to increase and expand our knowledges to help us in social life.
Information was provided on internet ... Information is constantly updated on the Internet, therefore, we can get the latest news about what is happening in not only our country but also around the world

Thirdly Finally, in modern eraworld, everything is possible to do such marketing and treading????.
... sell our product or beverage but in modern era such nownowadays, we could sellingsell our product ...
... Internet service by using social networklike instagram or tweeter or maybe aplocationapps such as buybuyonline or anything that the internet ...

In comclutionconclusion, (...) that we madetake probably (...) because the Internet helps ...
Anyway, we have to be thankfullgrateful everyonepeople/person that findinginvent/create theInternet.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Sep 8, 2017   #4
Ni, there are numerous grammatical errors in this essay. I cannot say that these errors were made by auto-correct and that you typed the essay on your mobile device. The errors are so serious that if I were your English teacher, I would send you back to the basic grammar lessons that includes how to spell basic words. There is a clear indication that you did not really try to apply yourself in terms of grammar accuracy because, when you use a decent document typing program, or even if you just typed directly into the text box of this forum, the numerous red lines that indicate misspelled words would have tipped you off as to the spelling problems in your essay. When your spelling is this inaccurate, it becomes stressful for the reader to continue assessing your work. In this instance, I stopped reading by the second paragraph but forced myself to finish reading your work because I need to give you an accurate review. My final word on your essay is this, your intentions and message gets lost in the severe grammar inaccuracies present. I can understand what you are trying to say, so that is good. The bad, is that your spelling is so atrocious that your essay would be given a failing mark in terms of lexical resources and grammar accuracy.
phuongsongao 3 / 5  
Sep 9, 2017   #5
@Putrisalju2200
I think you need to be careful when using pronouns. In some sentence, you used " we" but in some others, you used "you", which makes it hard for the readers to understand who the essay is intended for.


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