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Benefits of living in the countryside



Dung2001 1 / -  
Apr 15, 2020   #1

The life in the countryside area



In my point of view, living in rural areas is good for your life because of several reasons. First, the main advantages could be a clean environment. Because there are not many factories as well as less traffic. Moreover, there are a lot of trees, rice fields or ponds so you can walk here to enjoy the fresh air there in the early morning. Another benefit is everything is affordable, because people there have low income so a small business to succeed in a small town, it must be reasonably priced. If you living here, you can save a lot of money. Finally, people in the countryside are friendly and helpful. They are willing to help each other if they can. Kids are always taught to respect their neighbors and love them. The people of small communities are very down to earth and ready to get on with the new people. They welcome you with all their heart. In short, I really love living in a small town because it has many benefits.

antonellaabreu 2 / 4  
Apr 16, 2020   #2
For concision, state the reasons in your first sentence instead of stating "because of several reasons." To prevent really short sentences lconnect thoughts in one.
vuthuylinh2611 19 / 61  
Apr 16, 2020   #3
@Dung2001
Nice writing practice! I think you can make some improvement on your grammar as follow:

you can walk there. Here means the place where you are.
" Another benefit is everything is..." This is a run on sentence i.e. the part of this sentence are not connected properly and it also contains grammar mistakes. I recommend revising it as follow:

"Another benefit is ... Because people ..." In case you want to express multiple idea in a single sentence, be very careful. You should split your sentence down to shorter one to avoid making mistakes.

I hope that you will improve your writing further.


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