Good morning miss Dina your essay is good, i have a suggestion to your conclusion paragraph :
you can write more than 2 sentences and
you could use this pattern :
1. restatement the question
3. new idea such as hope, recommendation
I hope that you pay more attention on using many + plural noun and tray to erase "but" by using another mechanism.
In conclusion, the media society have
many advantage many advantages for all activities, but the several moment several moments still bring problem.
My suggestion :
To sum up, it is evident that although the social media have many advantages for all activities, the several moments still bring problems. Hence, i believe that the media is the best technology in the life. Then i recommended to the official for managing the program to minimize the negative impact in the future.