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The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.


marned 4 / 10 4  
Jul 9, 2015   #1
I am struggling to write essay and prepare myself for toefl exam, please correct my essay.

For traveling, we have two choices either traveling individually or in a group by a tour guide. Each of them has many pros and cons. From my experience, I disagree to travel in a group and my preference is traveling by myself. Traveling alone has many advantages in comparison with in a group and I will mentioned in following.

First, I can allude to setting up. While you are planning for your trip, scheduling is the most important issue. Therefore, when you go to travel alone, you can personally planning your time better. For example, two years ago, I went to Spain in a group and we had a tour guide. After we were departured, we understood that it is his first trip to Spain. Also, he did not know anything about interesting places in Barcelona. Although, the agency told us he is so professional. So, we lost our time because of his lack of information.

Also, when you travel personally, you can go to the different places that you are interested in. For instance, I went to Malaysia last year. I surfed the Internet to find interesting places. It was easy and I found many exciting historical places and religious monuments. I actually chose some of them based on my time for every day visiting. But I had an awful experience when I have been in Amsterdam. I went there by a tour guide. She was not familiar with sightseeing of Amsterdam in spite of living there for 5 years. She could not show me all the famous places and I was spending my money in the worst way.

For those aforementioned reasons, I strongly disagree with traveling in a group by a tour guide. Based on my experience, I prefer travelling individually. Due I can be the best tour guide for myself. I can planning my trip personally and do not waste my time. On the other hand, I can find the best places to visit.

faarasyad 7 / 15 7  
Jul 9, 2015   #2
Hi Marned,
Lets me render some suggestion for your essay

For traveling, we have two choices either traveling individually or in a group by a tour guide. Each of them has many pros and cons. From my experience, I disagree to travel in a group and my preference is traveling by myself. Traveling alone has many advantages in comparison with in a group and I will mentioned in following.

I assume that it is to write by adding more information regarding to your writing in your body.

Travelling is not a new culture these days and is separated to two different ways, individually journey and travel in group. For this case, even though there are numerous advantages in a colony such sense of togetherness, it is believed that break packing alone is claimed as better way due to the big change to reach the experiences. Therefore, in my perspective, I personally argue that the benefits of traveling alone outweigh journey in group.

Hopefully this is going to help you.
Keep writing and good luck
Junisha111p 11 / 21 4  
Jul 9, 2015   #3
you should not use word "strong" in conclusion.

you can say--
In the aforementioned reasons, It is clear that travelling in group led by tour guide is not as adventurous as tour alone because Individual put their effort to get acknowledge about new thing.----

Let me know what you think.


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