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TOEFL: Best ways of reducing stress: listening to music, exercise, meditation



something 23 / 51  
Oct 27, 2013   #1
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TOPICPeople have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of
modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their
gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress?
Use specific details and examples in your answer.


Nowadays, we are living in in the world which is absolutely complicated. Everything seem to be rush, and it have a lot of competition. These make people get stress. Thus, many people try to reduce their stress. There are many activities that could relieve those people who are in stress. in my opinion, reducing stress by listening to music, playing sports, and doing meditation are easy and practical ways.

First of all, listening to music is a great way to relax. For example, when I go to office, I use public transport. I see many things such as traffic jam, crowded people at bus stop, and all so crowded people in buses. These make me stress. So that I always listen music from my mp3 player. I could enjoy listening music without thinking of people around me. Consequently, I feel happy when I listen music.

Second, another way that is perfectly work for everyone to reduce the stress is exercise. For instance, I alway have many things in my mind such as a difficult of my work that I have to finish in time. These problem sometime make me hard to fall asleep because it make me stress. Thus, after work, I always do exercise, and jogging is my favorite sport. I feel that after working out, I am easily to fall asleep. Exercising not only reduce my stress but also make me get a good health.

Third, meditation also one of the ways to reduce the stress. when I have many things to think about, and this make me stress, I will do meditation. Meditation is easy way to relax because it is not require any equipment, and it take few minutes. A way to do meditation is that I just sit down, close my eyes, and count my breath. These could relieve me from stress.

In conclusion, there are many ways to reduce the stress. In my point of view, listening to music, exercising, and doing meditation are the most activities that people could do to escape from stress. It is are easy and usable. And everyone should find the time to do more and more to feel better physically and in everyone mind.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Oct 27, 2013   #2
Nowadays, we are living in in the world which is absolutely complicated.

Modern world is very complex, complicated and fast paced.

Everything seem to be rush, and it have a lot of competition.

Everything is done in a rush amidst severe competition.

These make people get stress.

This causes high stress levels in people.

There are many activities that could relieve those people who are in stress.

.... relieve stress and not relieve people
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Oct 27, 2013   #3
I see many things such as traffic jam, crowded people at bus stop, and all so crowded people in buses.

.... crowds of people in buses and at bus stops both give the same effect to this sentence. Therefore one makes the other redundant.

These make me stress.

... "make me stress" is grammatically wrong. It should be ;
These things make stress in me or
These things create lots of stress in me.... I prefer this form.

So that I always listento music from my mp3 player

listen to music

. I could enjoy listening to music without thinking of people around me.

Listening to music not only helps me to avoid things that creates stress in me, but also helps me relax while enjoying it..


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