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A breakdown of mechanism to produce electricity using wave is provided by the charts



Pramudia27 34 / 52  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
A breakdown of mechanism to produce electricity using wave is provided by the charts. Overall, it can be seen that electricity can be generated by moving air within column to rotate the turbine.

First of all, using wave as source to generate power can be done by preparation the equipment at the first. The tools that are needed in this process are chamber, turbine, column, and lamp. After that, all of these tools are assembled on the cliff or sea wall that separate between land and sea , and the instrument is ready to be used.

On one hand, generating electricity process is started by entered sea water into chamber that causes air within chamber moving up through column which can stir the turbine. This process can turn on the lamp. And then, when water go out from chamber, pressure within chamber increase. As a result, the air in the outer of column enter into chamber again trough column and rotate the turbine in same direction that can make lamp remain lit as indicator that electricity can be generated successfully.


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Beauty17 56 / 79  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
Halllo diana..

... process is started by entered sea water into (...) column which can stir the turbine. This process can turn on the lamp.
... out from chamber, pressure within chamber increase .

1. By is preposition and after preposition must be followed by gerund
2. Repetitive can, you have to change it with be able to
3. Pressure within chamber increase when the water turning out, i think you have miss understood for this point. In my perspective when the water flow from outside the chamber, pressure in the chamber is lower than outside column thus air from outside is able to blow to the column and stir the turbine.


I hope it helps. Good Luck!
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 73  
Dec 1, 2016   #3
Hello Pram!
Allow me to give you some suggestions.

A breakdown of mechanism to produce ...

It is really a short paragraph Pram, you should put at least 3 sentences here. You are able to add some information in your conclusion.

On one hand, generating electricity process ...

On one hand use for starting first idea, when it comes to another idea you have to say "on the other hand"

Hope it helps you :)


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