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British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035 - IELTS task 1



Vns9x 102 / 230  
Jan 31, 2015   #1
The graph chart illustrates the percentage of British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035, measured in percentage.

The graph shows that in 1985, that both in UK and England, the percentage of population with age 65 and higher were equal to 15% respectively. In parallel, Scotland and Northern Ireland were considered to be the lowest with their percentage of 14% and 12%. The most salient in the graph, Wales managed to reach 16%.

According to the graph chart there will be a significant vicissitude when it comes to the percentage of all territory in 2035, it betokens that England and UK's percentage will be increased by approximately 8 % each. In the meantime, Scotland will increase it percentage for 11 %, while this value will be 2,5 % larger than the future Northern Ireland one's. Wales as usual will be leading with its remarkable 26%.

The data suggests that, as time goes by, British people are becoming more salubrious and that phenomena will prolong their life span.


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ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 661  
Jan 31, 2015   #2
The graphbar chart illustrates the percentage of British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035, measured in percentage.

add a general trend at the end of the introduction.

The graph shows that in 1985that both in UK and England, the percentage of population withat the age of 65 and higherabove were equal to 15% and XX%, respectively (if they are at the same range of 15%, then, you cannot use respectively) . In parallel, Scotland and Northern Ireland were considered to be the lowest with their percentage of 14% and 12%. The most salient in the graph, Wales managed to reach 16%.

According to the graph chart t here will be a significant vicissitude when it comes to the percentage of all territory in 2035, it betokens that both England and UK's percentage will be increased by approximately 8 % each . In the meantime, it is predicted that Scotland's population will increase it percentage forby 11 %, while this value will be 2,5 % larger than the futurefor Northern Ireland one's . Wales as usual, however, keeps its lead in population and thewill be leading with its remarkable increase of 26% is anticipated for this area in 2035. .

The data suggests that, as time goes by, British people are becoming more salubrious and that phenomena will prolong their life span.
ruwchii 6 / 17  
Feb 2, 2015   #3
Let me try to rewrite this.

The graph chart illustrates the percentage of British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035, measured in percentage.

The bar chart gives information regarding how many population aged 65 and over in some regions in United Kingdom over half century, and it is measured in percentage.


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