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Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors



mohjawahir 11 / 16  
Apr 17, 2015   #1
Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world.
How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, the modern life has created a number of children to stay more indoors due to totally meeting their needs for the bright future. Because of this, many children are more likely to spend a lot of time to study some subjects such foreign language at course after finishing their study at schools, but this automatically gets children less time to explore the natural world. Therefore, I would argue that it becomes more substantial for children to gain well education from natural environment than spending lots of time at homes for studying several subjects.

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Stacy Handayani 29 / 16  
Apr 17, 2015   #2
Hello Mr. Jawa.. Your writing is excellent, but I have some correction. Hope it helps you :)

Nowadays, the modern life has created a number of children towho stay more indoors due to totally meeting their needs for the bright future.

Spending much time to study some subjects makes children to stay more indoorsspending more much time indoors because they have to focus on their learning which needs a quiet room to get an effective class. Taking students who are studying foreign languages at course, students have to study in the small room in order to gain well-understood from their teachers. As a result, some children have less time to obtain much information from the spectacular environment. There is no doubt that spending a lot of time indoors makes some children achieving their lessons quickly, yet this makes children have little exposure to the natural world.

On the other hand, being essential for children is to conduct researches from the nature because of several reasons. First of all, children are going to understand local cultures which are important for indigenous people to create good neighborhood in the future. For instance, some children in countryside respect their local cultures and have a good attitude with their neighbor. [ should we add an example in multiple idea paragraph ?] In addition, the natural world creates children to become great leaders for next generations. This is because childrensince they are able to learn how to keep healthy environment and local cultures for sustainable growth. For example, children who interact more with the natural environment tend to care about it when they become adults . Not only this, the nature provides lots of information which is good for children to develop their knowledge, so as that they have brilliant thought to achieve a high standard of living.

To conclude, although spending a lot of time indoors can fulfill children's needs for studying some subjects in order to gain well abilities to face international complicated competitions, learning the natural world is more essential for children because the natural environment provides and teaches children to become more attention on their lives. [it is better for you to add your personal tought here ]

Good Luck !


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