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IELTS - Is Capital Punishment essential to control violence in society?


TTJudy 4 / 3  
Aug 10, 2011   #1
Question:
Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society.

Essay:
Capital punishment, a cruel and unusual punishment in the legal system, has long been an issue of controversy. While supporters hold that execution deters crime, opponents claim it is inhumane to deprive fellow men's life, whoever they are.

Admittedly, possibility exists that capital punishment may lead to miscarriage of jurisdiction by mistakenly executing innocent suspects. To make things even more complicated, political conspiracies have repeatedly pushed innocent victims to death in the name of jurisdiction. Take Socrates and Jesus Christ for example, both of them were imposed death sentence as dissents for violating the ruler's interest, but as is undeniable today, both of the two have made huge contributions to the human civilization.

However, these reasons mentioned above are inefficient to serve as evidence to abolish the capital punishment, because death penalty, despite its minor fault, plays a vital part in preserving the safe and security of the whole society. Not only can it ensure that the convicted criminal won't offend a second time, it is also regarded as the best "legalized revenge" to victims' family. The cost of life itself also poses as a threat to potential criminals, preventing them from harming the others. A society which imposes no more severe punishment than life imprisonment on murderers is one that perceives murder as a tolerable and unimportant issue, which is no doubt against human rights.

On balance, we can safely conclude that capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. But to render it more unbiased, related regulations need refining to ensure a more effective and judicative legal system.

EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Aug 10, 2011   #2
While supporters hold that execution deters crime, opponents claim it is inhumane to deprive a fellow man of his life, whoever he is .

Admittedly, the possibility exists that capital punishment may lead to miscarriage of justice by mistakenly executing innocent suspects.---This has happened many times!

To make things even more complicated, political conspiracies have repeatedly put innocent people to death in the name of justice .

Take Socrates and Jesus Christ for example, both of them were imposed a death sentence as dissents for violating the ruler's interests , but as is...

However, these reasons mentioned above are inefficient in serving as evidence to abolish the capital punishment, because the death penalty, despite its minor faults , plays a vital part in preserving the safety and security of the whole society.

The cost of life itself also poses as a threat to potential criminals, preventing them from harming the others.

A society which imposes no more severe punishment than life imprisonment on murderers is one that perceives murder as a tolerable and unimportant issue, which is no doubt against human rights.---But isn't the person who throws the switch on the electric chair also a murderer?

Good luck in school, and have fun!

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ekekek 25 / 51  
Aug 10, 2011   #3
Hello, Judy.

I think you should state your opinion more clearly. Honestly, I cannot find your viewpoint after reading.

Also, you need to add up more supporting reasons. Otherwise, it seems your argument is weak.

My suggestion is that you could use 2 para. in the main body for supporting you viewpoint--ban or not.


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