They use it frequently for having trips
people commuting by car
Admittedly, the allowance to pay higher tax for car ownership is the viable solution through this problem
"allowance" isn't a right word here. I suggest rewording: ..the implementation of the policy that requires people to pay...
people who visit to this country are estimated to be surprise because there are no more cars operated in this country.
people who visit
to this country are estimatedare liable to be surprised - "estimate to be" is used for figures
The reason why it could
be happenedhappen is that (governments rise in tax??)...
I suggest rewording: the reasons for this involve the authorities rising the tax for car ownership and fining (verb fine)...
By doing so, people tend to cogitate about driving to the town
you can't write "by doing so, people.." because in this case the subject is the government. Who is "doing so"? -Government. So it should be " by doing so, government..." --- so this needs rewording. Or remove the phrase "by doing so"
I'd write "As a result,people tend to avoid"
As a result, people will not break the rule when governments are able to manage well.
It doesn't make sense to write "people will not break the rule", because such a problem has not been aroused. The problem is that people use car too often; we don't know if they break rules.
Also,here you need to write in the past simple, because you are referring to the result, which already took place.
as a result, people gave up their habits of using their cars too often because the government was able to manage well