compare the data on number of cars made
The table below shows the number of cars made in three countries in 2003, 2006, 2009.
2003:
Argentina: 235,088
Australia: 452,163
Thailand: 735,852
2006:
Argentina: 352,759
Australia: 341,268
Thailand: 1,162,356
2009:
Argentina: 466, 089
Australia: 245,624
Thailand: 999,963
( Since the image is too big to post, I decided to rewrite them above.)
The table compares three countries in terms of car production between 2003 and 2009.
It is clear that Thailand, despite a slight fall in the last three years, was the largest car producer over the period shown. While Thailand and Argentina saw a big increase in automobile production, Australia experienced a decrease.
In 2006, Thailand was the largest car manufacturer, producing around 730 thousand units, which was higher than the combined figures of Argentina and Australia. Australia supplied over 450 thousand units to the market, whereas Argentina only produced 235 thousand units, at just half of Australia's. However, over the following 6 years, Argentina overtook Australia as the second highest among three countries.
From 2006 to 2009, the number of cars manufactured in Thailand rose dramatically to a peak of more than 1 million in 2006 units before declining to 999 thousand units in 2009. Meanwhile, the figure for Argentina increased by around 200 thousand units. By contrast, a fall by a similar amount in car manufacture was seen in Australia.
@Nhanpham147
Hi there!
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It is clear that Thailand, ... the period shown. While ... production Among the three countries mentioned, only Australia experienced a decrease in automobile production.
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