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Cars have been used as public transportation since early twentieth century



Yonathan 46 / 50  
Sep 20, 2016   #1
IELTS SUMMARY 7 Electric Cars Around the Globe

Cars have been used as public transportation since early twentieth century, even though gas-powered cars polluted urban area with exhaust and consumed gasoline which is irreplaceable resources. But technology advance offer the new alternative for eco-friendly public transportation such as electric car which is more quitter and don't produce greenhouse gases. Many major brands like Mitsubishi, Nissan, Toyota, and Mercedes Benz produce electric cars and distributing around the world.

Electric cars were invented in early twentieth century even though it didn't gained much popularity because they were not able to travel the required distances and their slow speed. But now, the most advance sport electric car that can travel 300 miles on a single charges and accelerate from 0 to 60 mph in3.7 seconds. Electric cars are the new answer for urban life problem like air pollution and oil price rising.

mem77 62 / 93  
Sep 20, 2016   #2
Hello Yonathan, it very nice to see your writing and I really appreciate with your efforts to do this essay. However, I've some correction within your essay to make it more good and also to give you an experiences about writing skills. So, keep watch!

At second sentence of first paragraph, you write "But technology advance offer the new alternative............" I think your word is reverse each other, so it should be change like this "But advance technology offer the new alternative......." And also on the next sentence, you write "...... is more quitter and don't produce....." I think there are not grammatically, so it should be change with "....... is more quitter and didn't produce...."

I think just enough from me, and keep practice to write!
Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 38  
Sep 20, 2016   #3
Hallo Yonathan
i have some advice to your essay

such as electric car which is more quitter
if you uses such as, the example have to more than two examples

... travel 300 miles on a single charges ......without s


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