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The causes of losing productivity of global land and the regions affected by the degradation in 1990



IvanMS027 43 / 28  
Oct 29, 2016   #1
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1900s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The figure shows the causes of losing productivity of global land ant the table informs the data about the regions affected by the degradation in 1990s. Overall, over-grazing is the main cause of global soil degradation. The Europe is the region having the highest percentage of land degraded.

It can be seen from the pie chart that over-grazing is the biggest number of degradation with 35 percent. Logging is the second rank with 30 percent. Then, over-planting gives 28 percent of causes of degradation. Other causes can be combined with 17 percent overall.

Europe is the continent that having the impact of soil degradation with 23 percent. Deforestation is the reason why there are many land degraded at that region. The group of islands in south pacific including Australia and New Zealand - also known as Oceania - is the second degraded land which mostly impacted by over-grazing with 11.3 percent. There is no over-planting here. The last region is North America having 5 percent degraded land. The main cause is over-cultivation with 3.3 percent then over-grazing with 1.5 percent.


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SarlindaDS_27 42 / 51  
Oct 29, 2016   #2
Hello Good Night Mr. Ivan :)
Let me tell you about my opinion about your summary :)

Overall I really enjoy and can follow your flow of sentences cohesive in each sentence that your express on your written. That's an excellent power of your summary. Actually, I almost not found anything your mistake in here. Just one, but I think this is also important to be more your attention next time :)

... of global land ant AND the table ...

Okay, Mr.Ivan I hope you can keep try and practice to make it better and perfectly :) good luck :)


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